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Reviews for All the Small Things

By : lexjamandme

From ANON - Kuno on September 08, 2008
I love this story! It's beautiful. I'm trying to remember all the things I found so wonderful about it while I was reading, but there were just too many things. You gave it detail, a thrilling plot, and lengthy chapters, to name a few. I was hooked in your tale. Thanks for sharing your story!
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From MichiTheThird on August 26, 2008
When I saw there was an update for All the Small Things, I straightened up in my chair and if I had a tail, it would have been wagging happily. :D

And then I realized I forgot to leave a review for chapter 13...it would have been something along the lines of "epilogueepilogueepilogueepilogueepilogueepiloguewhere'stheepilogueIwanttoreaditlikenow" heh heh...but, that would have been a completely useless review so I hope to redeem myself with this chapter's review...though I must mention that I laughed my ass off whenever the mention of the long pink boa plush was read. And Sasuke's proposal to Naruto made me cry.

*starts reading the epilogue while trying not to bounce in the chair excitedly*

'Naruto was glad for the third time that night that Sasuke�s parents took the twins for the night.'

--Me too! The kids would have SO heard all that no matter HOW reinforced the walls were.

Naruto scrambled over Sasuke, kneeing him in the gut and picked up the phone. His chest was heaving with anger, �I HAVE A DAMN DICK!� he screamed slamming the phone down.

--*dies laughing*

�I�m not sure they had Uchihas in mind when they created such vague vows�� Leaning over, Naruto kissed Sasuke�s pale shoulder. �Why did I marry you again?� He asked closing his eyes.

--A ha ha ha ha ha ha...probably not!

�Damn, Gaara, her excuse was that it was the right size. Like she was searching the world for the perfect thing to cram up her nose.�

--*tears of myrth* I can't say I did any better when I was a kid.

...until Konohamaru�s girlish and horrified scream reached their ears.

--*nearly falls out of chair laughing* Cosmos, that was so funny! I could practically HEAR the scream.

Madara smiled gently trying out the new �loving smile� that he had recently learned from his new DVD purchase. The smile slipped when Sasuke quieted the table by asking, �Uncle, are you having a heart attack?�

--Ok, I burst out laughing and really loudly at that. Late at night. Hopefully not waking anyone.

Obito shook his head, eyes sparkling with mirth and happiness as he pried the fingers away. �The bottom line is my sex kitten has agreed to marry me.�

--Aww! Yay, that made me teary eyed.

Aww, the end of the end...I loved this fic so much. If I could afford it, I'd print it all out to carry with me everywhere and read it over and over again. *sigh* But, I guess I can settle for late night reading when I can't get to sleep.

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From jordash00 on August 25, 2008
I have followed this story for quite a while and this is my first time reviewing. I have to give you many cudos. This is an amazing story. The characters are sooooooooo real. I have cried, smiled, forwned, and laughed hysterically. You truly have an amazing talent!

On a lighter note - How I would love to see an side story or sequel focusing on Kakashi and Obito. OH MY GOODNESS - I have nearly peed in my pants laughing hysterically at the interactions between these two.
- "The Doofus", "Sparky", The whole John Travolta "Staying Alive" thing, the lollipop, Kakashi falling out of the chair or the near colonoscopy, therapy, the fearsome five- IT JUST NEVER ENDED! OH, then the fact that they are getting married! I bet you could go on for days about that!

Anyway - luved it!
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From Kalariona on August 25, 2008
Just so you know, I adore this story a lot. This and the demilitirized (know ive spelt it wrong)zone are a couple of my fav stories, due to humour, sarcastic wit and fab storylines. I only with you would write a preqel to this story, with the hints that you have already used. I would love to see how they got together.

Rie
xx
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From ANON - angelreader89 on August 25, 2008
I love this story! I liked how you ended it the way you began it, with the rain. I can't wait until your next story! Thanks!!
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From ANON - animelover on August 24, 2008
you know, i usually fear epilogues attached to awesome stories, but yours rocked the house, babe! what an awesome ending and so cute. you are so talented. oh, and i expect my autographed copy in my mailbox by the end of the week. lol!
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From ANON - Anon on August 24, 2008
Awww. Thank you so much for posting this fan fic. You did an excellent job of creating a believable realistic AU that one is easily sucked into. Thanks for posting the epilogue, although I'm going to miss this one. Please continue to post and write when inspiration hits.
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From writemenolies on August 24, 2008
Aaaah! Okay, great update;) But did you mention a prequel!??! This story is just screaming for a prequel! I'd thought it more than once, I'm so glad to see I'm not the only one. Oh, now I'm excited.

Okay, yes, great great story;) I'm in love with every bit of it--and I am NOT a Sasu/Naru fan. I like to see Sasuke give up control usually but this was an exception. Amazing story, everything about it.

Bravo!
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From hieisdragoness18 on August 24, 2008
lmao i loved it! im glad it was put up FINALLY! lol. just teasing, i laughed the whole time i read it
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From ANON - Anon on August 24, 2008
I saw that you wrote and posted the Epilogue and i felt like doing backflips because i was so happy!
I've loved this story from the very beginning to the end...the humor, the sexiness, the love, the action..
it's all in this story and makes one hell of a great read. I'd recommend it to anyone without hesitation.
The Epilogue was perfect, everything that i had hoped for and more. What a great way to wrap up such an awesome story.
I hope you never change your ideas or your writing style because you are most definitely one of my all time favorite SasuNaru Authors.

Your devoted fan
♥♥
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From LadyRonin on August 24, 2008
you guys did one heck of a job this was one great story. i can't wait to see what you come up with next.
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From ANON - Jea on August 24, 2008
I read the 1st chapter when this story started. I was not impressed at all. So I never continued it. When I saw that this story again & it said complete I skimmed over the last chapter & it seems like its a great story so I'm going to read it again from the beginning.
I doubt I'll be disappointed. I'll let you know what I think in a couple of days.
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From ANON - kkt on August 18, 2008
Adorable story, thanks so much for sharing it with us, I will look for more of your work in the future.

(Yuri is a pretty common Japanese name. 百合 it means lily. Honestly, I don't know that the Japanese even use yuri to describe f/f manga/doujinshi. I do know that they don't use the word yaoi very often. Yaoi=1970's amateur pwp doujinshi)
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From ANON - Anon on August 18, 2008
Hello *waves* I'm a big fan of yours following this story...along with any other story you've ever written :D
I hope i'm not pestering you by asking this (if i am then please forgive me?) but you are still planning on having
an epilogue for this right? Oh goodness, i really hope so. I'm very eager to read it..obviously lol.

Thank you for writing!
♥♥
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From ANON - paisita on August 06, 2008
Well it took me one day and one night to read thru all of the 13 ch. During those hours of completely devoted reading I suffer, cry, laugh, giggle, jump.............. as a stupid fan girl because of the wonderful way in which you portrayed each character.
What was my favorite thing about this story. Well shit were to begging, it was way to perfect and I don't know how to pick my number one Favorite moment. But here are somethings I really really enjoy.
1- Kakashi nickname for Naruto (Sparky) it fits perfectly.
2- Sasuke character. You just blow me away with his role in this fic.
3- Itashi, God I almost die and when to heaven when I saw Itashi role in this story. He is one of my favorite characters, and is great to see someone who can put a real human side to him.
4- The fearsomefive lol, they were hilarious.
5- Toys R Us............... it got me laughing for a good time.
6- The pairings, OMG you are a genius. It opened my perspective to so many pairing that have never crossed my mind. Itashi/Hinata WOW **
Iruka/Asuma never in my crazies dream
Kakashi/Obito perfect
7- Your sense of humor. Your characters all share the best sarcastic sense of humor I have ever read. For that my friend I love you.
8- Sai and Madara son/father relationship, and the Yakusa theme.
9- How the Uchihas call each other as Cousin/big brother/little brother............ damn even Naruto was considered a Ushiha. Can wait to see how are the fearsomfive going to call Kakashi, and his reaction to it.
10- Hospital atmosphere. You just managed to fit each character perfectly to their jobs.

Did like
1- Orochimaru............ I hate the snake bastard
2- Sakura dieing. I know she didn't have that big of a role in the story, but still it was kind of sad seeing her die =(

Finally questions.
Is there going to be a second part to this story?
Will Naruto start a OR career now that Oroshimaru is gone?
Where the hell is KIBA, ANKO, KURENAI, GENMA, GAI????

Sorry for the long review, this is the first time I write something so long to any author. Your story is just so good that I feel I have to comment on everything and this is not even half of what I think. Keep writing, you have a wonderful gift that not every one is lucky to have. Thank you very much for sharing your imagination with us.

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