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Reviews for Three 6 Nine

By : ktaztrofee
  • From maggiekebs on September 03, 2008
    I am very intrigued... Looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.
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  • From Quirk on April 23, 2008
    It's a good story, but the large spacing between paragraphs interupts the flow of everything.
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  • From 24CaratCoal on April 19, 2008
    Okay, seriously, my hand started to cramp when I was editing out the spaces so I could read this thing more easily. Actually, I just plain gave up, you're putting too many spaces between paragraphs and it makes it really hard to read. It's an interesting concept but you've just got everything too far apart in your formating. One open line between paragraphs is all you need for formatting. Really, ouch. I don't mind if you delete this or whatever, but the space issue is something to keep in mind- it breaks things up enough that they don't become run-ons but keeps them close enough together that you don't forget what you're reading. Not trying to criticize, just want to help you out a bit. Drop me a note when you've got things straightened up a bit. Eric Blair (aka George Orwell) had six pretty good rules for writing, hope you don't mind I'm going to post them here for you.

    # Never use a metaphor, simile, or other figure of speech which you are used to seeing in print.
    # Never use a long word where a short one will do.
    # If it is possible to cut a word out, always cut it out.
    # Never use the passive voice where you can use the active.
    # Never use a foreign phrase, a scientific word, or a jargon word if you can think of an everyday English equivalent.
    # Break any of these rules sooner than say anything outright barbarous.

    Hope this helps. Later. WS
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  • From DevilLived on April 15, 2008
    Awesome chapter. Full of suspense and angst. I loved it. Hopefully you'll be able to update again soon. Can't wait~
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  • From DevilLived on March 06, 2008
    OMG. What a cliffy. I love how you write all the characters. Kakashi's POV was especially amusing.

    It's late here too and I'm half asleep so keep up the awesome work!
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  • From Raholea on March 05, 2008
    *blinks*
    umm.... wow. naruto vanishes... and what's with the bloody floor panel? somehow, i see some vary intriguing explanations coming. i hope. onegai???? i want more...
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  • From serenagold on March 04, 2008
    His floor boards are filled with blood???!!!! OMGWTF?!?!?!?!


    The mystery thickens!
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  • From zero12789 on March 04, 2008
    what the hell is going on, i can't nwait to see what happens next. write on my wayward author
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  • From shadowsonata on March 04, 2008
    Hey,hey, now! You've gotten me interested. Update! Lol, I have a box of cookies for you.*Dangles box*
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  • From Raholea on February 08, 2008
    MORE!!!!!! lol. am looking forward to who the floating head is, and how the clean-up (which i'm guessing will be a while in coming) will go. am very interested, add more when you can! PLEASE????????????????
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  • From ultistarmon on February 06, 2008
    Whoa! Great story! I can't wait to see what happens next!
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  • From serenagold on February 04, 2008
    oh my. O_O


    I'm just gonna throw in the towel now and simply wait for the next chapter to arrive. I have no idea what the next move is and can't even begin to fathom it.
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  • From DevilLived on February 03, 2008
    Wow. That was just... Wow. Epic. Loved your writing and the structure of the story. You put it together wonderfully.

    And the ending! What a cliffy! So much to question! I can't wait to find out more. This looks like it will be good. Update soon, ne?
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  • From zero12789 on February 03, 2008
    what the fuck. that was weird. kind of reminds me of how big O played out in the end. i higher power watching them like a sitcom or a daytime soap. i'm freakin out man i gots to know wat happens next. well happy writing
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  • From dirtygirl42 on February 02, 2008
    This is a great beginning - I really can't wait to see where you go with this. The only things I can think of that might be beneficial to add to your prologue would be: a bit of description about the time period (i.e. how old are the characters, where would you place the events of the prologue in the storyline of the manga or anime) and maybe a bit about how this battle royale came to be. Of course, neither is necessary for the story, I'm just curious. :-) Again, great start and thanks for posting this!
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