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Reviews for Over the Edge and Through the Wall

By : VanityBlake

From Hestia on April 06, 2008
Hmmm, well, I don't like a lot angst, so I'm suffering a bit here. I loved the sexual tension and early chapters (Sasuke being the cake factory was an awesome line). I wanted Ibiki/Gaara, but you sold me on Ibiki/Sasuke. The dark chapters are pretty damn dark; however, I actually had to skip some bits to not get freaked out. I'm a wuss. But I'm hoping for a happy kinky ending, so I'll be checking in on this periodically.
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From ANON - the_boyfriend on February 29, 2008
hi,

again. It seem that in my day off work, there is nothing better to do then read you fics. Keep it coming, can wait for more. Now i'm intrigued, in these updates it appears that Sasuke x Ibiki is compromized. Well, only you can tale. Update soon.
Ps: as for Sasuke, I do not find him being a whiny bitch. Everyone as his moment. In your fic, I felt it works with your plot very well. Anyway, Sasuke in my eyes is a very strong character but emo none the less. Ohh! I love puzzles, so keep the song quote coming, I least it keeps me occupy while a wait for more. Another question: is there going to be another vote for the next character or you will bring it on. Also, hope for a Gaara update. I know, I ask too much.

read you later,
:)
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From Mignonne422 on February 25, 2008
You got me all excited!!! And then I realized I'd read this chapter already. lol.

Still, it's a kick ass chapter. I'm glad that Sasuke picks himself up and is determined to prove Ibiki wrong about him. Despite how very messed up and broken he is, at least he knows what he wants, is man enough to admit it and brave enough to fight for it.

And I loved the running symbolism of laughter! It makes the nerdy English major in me sing and dance for joy! XD

Wunderbar, love!!!
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From Mignonne422 on February 06, 2008
Oh, and I meant to add this in my review, just for a bit of help. For formatting use these brackets around the text you want formatted. For italics insert an "i" as in or "b" for bold "u" for underline and I think "s" for strikethrough.

Again, I can't tell you enough how much I'm completely loving this fic. In fact, I totally think you should join y!gallery so I can pimp your work to EVERYONE and get you the loving fanbase you deserve for your mastery. Think about it.... ;)

I also forgot to mention how excited you've made me for Kakashi! I imagine it's got to be very interesting to provide background semi-parental support for a child/teen assasin in your life.

Love love love!
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From Mignonne422 on February 06, 2008
Darling, that was masterfully executed!

Poor Sasuke. He's been so abused and fucked up (literally and figuratively) from an early age. I mean, really, who trains a little kid to be an assasin? Poor baby. I just want to hug him.

You wrote that chapter beautifully and made me feel his pain, his despair, his total sense of isolation from the world around him, and his tiny, tiny little seedling of hope. I'm glad he pulled it together in the end. I really am. And I so can't wait for him to prove Ibiki wrong!

Yay! Awesome! Can't wait for more!
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From AnimeCookie on February 05, 2008
Wow -- okay, that was trippy, actually performing formating while trying to explain how to do it. Go to this URL address which will show you the hypertext markup for italicizing and bolding: http://www.w3schools.com/html/tryit.asp?filename=tryhtml_formattingch

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From AnimeCookie on February 05, 2008
Wow, that was pretty intense! But I�ve been working up to read some ansty intensity and this chapter fitted so well in explaining Sasuke�s emotional instability and why he has such an obsession of maintaining his self-control. You had to go there with the incest/Uchihacest, didn�t you (shouts �Chinatown�!); in fact I was WAITING for it (nods head � um-hmm, uh-huh). And I enjoyed his come-back � despite everything Sasuke went through, his will to live his life can�t be diminished or subjugated.

But now that Sasuke has finally come to face and accept the sources of his perversions and madness, how will he deal with them regarding Ibiki? Will he feel the same towards Ibiki? Will he say, �This really isn�t my true feelings towards Ibiki; that�s just my twisted madness during my times with Itachi and Orochimaru trying to take over and act out�.

Now it seems like Ibiki also needs to do a little soul-searching as to why he likes dishing out pain. Whatever�s in his twisted background, both he and Sasuke seem to share the need to control

Oh, I've yet to submit anything on this site so I don't know how it handles formating like italics, but typically in hypertext language, for italics you use and the beginning of what you want italicized, and end it with . Bolding is similar in that you use at the beginning of what you want to bold, and end it with . But if this is incorrect for this site, hopefully someone will be able to tell you the correct way to enter formatting.

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From AnimeCookie on January 29, 2008
First off, I really enjoy all the witty dialogue and the �Sin City� atmosphere of the story. It almost has that �noir� feeling to it, with Sasuke as Ibiki�s �femme fatale� (love it) � and you know how these seedy underworld/crime stories always end up!

Poor Sasuke, he is sooo unstable, between Orochimaru and Ibiki driving him crazy. And that back-and-forth between Sasuke and Ibiki and Ibiki warring with himself was definitely trippy! But I can see Ibiki�s reasoning that Sasuke is actually trying to top from the bottom due to that Uchiha pride. But then again, in a twisted way, it seems like his pride would only allow Sasuke to submit to the best and welcome Ibiki�s painful dominance. Which of course leads to the question, �what the hell is Ibiki into?� Is it knife play? Brass knuckles to the kidneys? Chain whippings across the ass? Is Ibiki just as demented as Orochimaru when it comes to pain and torture, the one Sasuke actually fears? Inquiring minds want to know! Whatever the case, I fear for Sasuke�s sanity at this point in the story. And if he looses his sanity, how effective will he be as a Hidden Leaf Assassin?

Cookie~

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From AnimeCookie on January 29, 2008
I didn�t realize that you added a second and third chapter until today! And to think I almost missed the continuation of this delicious story. But not to worry, I�m going to add my reviews separately for each chapter -- because this story deserves it!

Boy, all these walls everyone�s got. In Ibiki�s case, he almost fell off the wagon! He reminds me a bit of an addict trying to resist the temptation of his drug of choice while trying to deal with an Uchiha that�s starting to come apart at the seams. And I love the turmoil that both of them feel in each other's presence. But to see Sasuke totally loose it like that (not that the guy didn�t deserve it) was so "unprofessional" (not a contract killing) that you can tell Sasuke�s one thread away from completely snapping. Boy, has Ibiki has his hands full � keeping Sasuke under control as well as his own twisted needs.

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From LindyStar on January 29, 2008
Oh, the third chapter is lovely, my dear! Poor little Sasuke, how I love to see thee suffer *sighs* The part I love to death though is when you talk about how he has managed to survive what's been done to him, but hasn't gotten over it and hasn't healed. I also liked this line, '...tension so thick you could cut it with a machete' Very cool, and look forward to more chapters! Yea for you!
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From Mignonne422 on January 29, 2008
Aiiieee!!!

Luff! Luff! And so much more luff!!!

The dark, broken, angsty tone of this chapter is PERFECT!! It's so Sasuke. I mean really, it's not Sasuke if there isn't at least some angst right? *pets him*

And gawds, gawds those two are gonna be SO HOT together. It's going to be like setting a match to gasoline soaked kindling when they get together!!! I can't wait! (seriously!)

Yay! Excited for the Zabuza chapter. Well I'm actually excited for anything you write cause I am LOVING it all! You have an awesome style and a great way with words, sweetie. It's really quite amazing. Major props to you!

Can't wait for more! Gold stars for you! ***** XD
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From ANON - evil_twin_pride on January 27, 2008
hi,

again, my choice for the next chapie is Zabuza (an old time favorite). Question, is Haku with him or not? Guest, I'll find out when you write. Update any part of your story and you'll have a happy dance from me. Keep up with the good job. Love to see if Sasuke get his wish (I love when Sasuke is not pair with Naruto, very refreshing. Since, Ibiki x anybody is a very odd couple. And your fic portraits Ibiki having the hot for Gaara!!! and hopefully Sasuke aswell, maybe a 3some, ahhh!!! I'm perverted now). You got me hook on your fic. Write soon.
:)
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From Mignonne422 on January 24, 2008
Oooh! I'm soo so excited for more!!! I'm loving this!

And lolol. The cake factory comment had me grinning like a fiend. Cause, gawds, it's SO TRUE!!! XD

Have you thought about making all of your various one shots chapters in the same story? You'd probably get many, many more reviews and hits that way. Which you totally deserve, btw, because they are all FANTASTIC! I mean they do all relate and tie in together, afterll. Just a suggestion cause you deserve the loving! :D

Oh, and I hope you don't mind terribly, there was one little typo I caught. In the paragraph where Ibiki is thinking about keeping Sasuke for his own personal reasons you said "blond" instead of "brunet". That was it! LOVED it! Can't wait for more!

P.s. I'm still voting for Naruto!
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From LindyStar on January 22, 2008
I must say, the last chapter (Gaara) was fantastic. I love that little guy so much! And your writing is solid, so that was a great bonus along with the ideas you come up with. Anyhow, I must say I would like to see Kakashi next.
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From AnimeCookie on January 22, 2008
�The scars should have made him ugly, but they didn�t. They just made him sexier in a completely subtle way...Here was a man who had obviously been through hell and been tough enough to walk away, and he wore the proof proudly on his body like medals of honor..�

Owww~! Yes, I felt that! That whole paragraph just NAILED Ibiki to a tee (sexy-roughneck!) I never even considered thinking about Sasuke and Ibiki in the same train of thought. But what an introduction and a set-up of things to come! And I just loved how you described Sasuke here as looking for someone WORTHY of his submission. That�s right up there with the group member who tells the wannabe-leader, �If you want to lead, then you better be able to kick MY @ss�. That is just so butch.

And I liked how you delved a bit into Sasuke�s past with Orochimaru, his homicidal hostility giving Ibiki a kinky �rise� of sorts. Given that, it would have been nice if the chapter was a little bit longer, but at the same time, I�m glad you were able to update. Because it will be so interesting to see how long either of them can keep their hands off each other on this mission to kill Orochimaru. Gee, I hope neither of them kill each other in a fit of �passion� ;-)!

Who to see next? Hmm. You�ve already mentioned Kakashi, so it would make sense if he appears. But Momochi Zabuza �Devil of the Hidden Mist� sounds sooo tantalizing!

Cookie~

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