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Reviews for You Seduce Me

By : swtluck
  • From dreemzmeen on January 20, 2008
    Oh snap! I was just listening to "Cyclone" and I happened upon this fic. Awesome, I'd say. The pairing is once again rare, so it's really great you wrote this.

    Very very hot.
    I'm not one to drink but as I read those ingredients, I absent-mindedly licked my lips. Oh well.

    My only nit-pick is the dialogue; I understand it's AU, but the way Sasuke spoke was slightly off. Overall, however, the fic was amazing. :]
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  • From Lunar84 on January 19, 2008
    You had a nice little plot here. It has lots of potential. I like the idea of a "bad" Sakura getting drunk and making out with Ino to mess with Sasuke. Then he becomes so frustrated he has to screw her brains out asap. Got to love smut.




    Now onto the bad part. The spelling and the grammar were really horrible. I really think it could benefit immensely from a beta. The errors make the story lack a certain flow and therefore makes it hard to read. I'm not trying to be rude, I would just like to offer some friendly advice to improve your fic. The actual lemon seems rushed as well. I would suggest more detail describing everything Sasuke and Sakura are thinking, feeling, and doing. After all it's what the readers have been waiting for after all the sexual tension from earlier in the night ^_~


    Overall, it's a fantastic plot line. I think it would be even better with the corrections made to all the errors. I don't want to discourage you from writing or want you to think this is a flame.
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  • From Laurachan on January 18, 2008
    Very, VERY good! Finally a good SasuSaku smut on this site :D
    I loved it, it was very detailed and hot ;)
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  • From ElfenDream on January 18, 2008
    It`s good so far, I havent read the whole thing cuz I`m damn tired right now, but I`m putting a bookmark on it, and thats pretty impressing cuz I usually only read yaoi. hehe.. Don`t wanna change this to a Sasu/Naru? no? hehe.. and you, like me.. need a beta. heh.. ;P
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