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Reviews for The Demilitarized Zone

By : lexjamandme

From on August 30, 2009
To: The Asshole
From: Sasuke Uchiha
Subject: You Sadistic Fucker

Itachi,

Fuck you.

Sasuke Uchiha
Vice President, Uchiha Incorporated

LOL!!!!! Enough said still laughing
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From sonotgoingthere on August 09, 2009
Hello, me again. Re-reading your story agian.

�Now, little brother, this is exactly what I was referring to when I asked if there was anything �more� you would like to share.�
Brilliant line. Gets me everytime I read this story.
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From fairietayle on May 22, 2009
This story is amazing! I can't remember the last time that I enjoyed a story so much and laughed so much during a story as this one. This truly is something else :)
I love the way you portrayed the characters. I also love the petnames they have for each other that express the closeness between them (Itachi being The Devil, Lord of Darkness and Naruto being Sunshine, Naruto and Sasuke being Minions and their teams being Children or Duckies). I love your writing style, it's smooth and seems effortless, and the text messages and e-mails were hilarious!
I like the plotline, the way it moved. And I'm glad that you pushed the sex into the last chapters - nothing kills a good story faster than reading the first chapter and stumbling across a lemon even before the characters truly know each other. In your story, everything was exactly were it was supposed to be. Nothing was rushed and it moved on it's own pace. Yay for proper build up! And the emotions you managed to get into the chapters... it all blew me away :)
I just love, love, LOVE this story!
So now I'm gonna go and read your other stories ^-^
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From TheMadKatter13 on May 21, 2009
Oh. My. Gods. I don't think I have ever loved a fanfiction more! From the very first chapter, I was cracking up and I couldn't stop. I loved the little flashbacks and I especially loved the e-mails!!! It was a sad story but it was still one of the best I have ever read and so well written! I can't wait to read more by you! >.
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From ANON - lea on March 11, 2009
I know what you mean about Naruto.
That's why I stopped watching a long time ago.
I think they're just milking the story now.
It's never going to end.
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From jessysuki on February 24, 2009
Hey!Just finished reading your story and I got to tell I loved it. I read it as fast as I could. You are one wonderufl writer and I will be looking for other of yours stories! Congratulations! And i just LOVE Itachi as The Devil!!!
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From ANON - Ashley on February 20, 2009
Speechless. Seriously, unbeFREAKINGlievable! (it was so good i had to make up a word =P) Ok maybe not speechless but pretty damn close!! This is the fifth story of yours that i've read now and i have every intention of reading them all! I honestly dont think ive laughed so hard in a looooong time...the comments that you had sasuke and itachi say had me pissing my pants haha! I love how well you incorporated their actual characters into it to! You managed to come up with a totally new aged story line and yet keep everyone the way they were meant to be! (if you know what i mean lol!) Ok this is probably boring you by now, so im done haha! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE keep writing lol, im fascinated with your stuff!!! =D
P.S. - I have a mantra as well hehe... SMUT SMUT SMUT ;D
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From asm613 on December 11, 2008
Great story. I'm also glad you didn't have Kashi and Ruka die. I think Itachi deserved a little more torture though. I think I would have had him walk in on a meeting that Sasuke and Naruto planned to have with him in his office and when he showed up in his office; Sasu and Naru could be 'making love' on top of his executive desk...Oops
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From asm613 on December 11, 2008
Sasu and Naru were in Naru's parents hospital room past 2am. So they didn't get home till much later. You have Itachi send all 8 employees to disrupt Sasu/Naru sex? That's just mean_the 'not'humorous in the least' mean, even with Itachi's text message. Still can't believe an Uchia would leave Orochimaru alive. he's already taken Naruto twice_why would they allow him the opportunity to take him a 3rd time? Plus Sasuke promised to kill him.
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From asm613 on December 11, 2008
I don't believe for an instant that Itachie or especially Sasuke would leave Orochimaru alive; to be taken be paramedics or cops that for all they know he could get away from; kill or could be working for him. They would have made sure it would never happen again and would have killed OrochimarU_so why didn't you?
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From asm613 on December 11, 2008
I've been reading lots of your stories. Have to say I pretty much loved them all. I almost didn't read this one; because I thought it was a war story. I was amused to discover what the title really meant. It's a very smart story. Very funny, very witty. It's also suspenseful, scary, sad, hopeful, etc...CH 12 is particularly good. I figured it was Orochimaru when you had them say the body looked like him_probably meaning they didn't do prints, dental or dna to make sure it wasn't a cosmetic surgery replacement. Loved interrogating Sasuke and loved Naruto telling Oro how he should have fucked Sasuke while he had the chances. But Oro must be pretty old by now__yucky=his ball sack is probably hanging down to his knees. I also loved the memories you've included of Minato and Kushina and a younger Fugaku and younger Sasuke and Naruto interacting. The story is just brilliant. Really well told and a pleasure to read. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
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From sweetciel on December 09, 2008
You are just too addicting to be legal! I LOVED the story. I know i'm finding it late, but i'm glad that I didn't miss it all together. I am your willing slave for life *kowtows*
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From MiraMira on November 19, 2008
Hahaha, omg, you�re a genius! I found The Demilitarized Zone in someone�s Recommended Reading Section, so I checked it out. This is by far my favorite out of all the fics I�ve ever read. You�re so amazing! You really do have a gift for writing humor. I loved every second! The first few chapters had me rolling on the ground in laughter, then you had me on the edge of my seat, then wanting to cry, then laughing again! Part of me was/is kinda sad that I couldn�t have found this gem earlier and been able to review as it was made, but the other part is whole-heartedly ecstatic that I was able to read the whole thing in one fell swoop. (i think that's partly why I left such a long review [sorry v_v;;])

Lemme tell you exactly how hooked I was. I started this series yesterday around 3ish. I was just gunna read a little bit here, write a little bit of my 10pg research project that was due 11AM there, and the world would be a happy place, right? Oh~ no~, genius me just COULDN�T stop reading DMZ. 1AM comes around and I force my self to go to sleep, telling myself I�ll wake up early to write the report which I had yet to start. 6AM comes and I think �Well, reading one chapter while I�m still half asleep won�t hurt anybody, right?� 10AM comes and it�s �No, no, no, no, no! I�m on chapter 12! I can�t just stop now!� 11:10 comes and I�m at the door of my class�.no paper in sight, BUT WAIT! I look on the door and what do I see? A blessed note: �I�m sick with a 104 fever, class canceled for today. Papers due Monday.� As Neji would say, it was fate! So I went to the library and read the rest XD Bwahahaha!

The e-mails and text messages were absolutely GOLDEN! They were so hilarious! Also, I�m usually a why-do-people-write-about-the-bastard-Itachi (I just can�t forgive him for killing his own family like that, jaded, I know), but your Itachi is so amazingly glorious in all his sadistic evilness! Oh, and did I mention that you are the goddess of one-liners? �Cuz you are.

Miranda�s Top 6 Favorite Quotes of the Series

6. �Fugaku Uchiha! I am your wife. If you called in all the demons from hell, I�ll make them fucking lemonade if it saves that little boy.� ~ Mikoto Uchiha
5. �Six years of higher education and you still speak perfect Uchiha.� ~Mikoto Uchiha
4. ��Oh, fuck no�If I don�t get any, ain�t nobody going to fucking get any.�� ~ Sasuke
3. �Never let it be said that an Uchiha can�t keep it up� damn it� I mean, can�t keep their promises. In closing, you�re just going to have to reign over hell on your own for a little while longer, boss. So many surfaces� so little time.� ~ Naruto
2. �Stay away from my goddamn duckies.� ~ Sasuke Uchiha
1. �Well, asshole, at least my vocabulary in the bedroom and the conference room differs. Yours is exactly the same� hnn� doooobbbeee.� ~ Naruto

Even your angsty-er chapters had AMAZING comic relief in a way that it wasn�t too funny to the point that you lost sight of the predicament they were in, but you didn�t drown in the despair-kool-aid that so many authors seem to be so addicted to either. You have such an amazing balance of humor and life, I wish I could write like you :( To be honest, while I was almost crying for laughter in the first couple chapters, I was getting kind of depressed, like, �omg, all this time that I�ve spent on forming my own humor fic was for naught.� I would always blame my muse for not giving me a way to connect the rampant plot bunnies in my head, but he was being generous. He was giving me funny instances when I apparently can�t write humor for crap to begin with. TT-TT *spends a couple seconds in the Sasuke/emo corner*

So�I was wondering (or maybe fantasizing would be a better word for this case) would you be willing to help me write these plot bunnies to perfection? Um, it would be a GaaraxNaruto pairing, equal humping promoted. The title�s �A+ for the Fashion Boyz��

Summary: In a world of wanna-be�s and plastics, Naruto and Gaara are starting their first year at Konaha Academy of the Arts� Fashion Institute in Japan to master design, create their own famous lines, and �wait�Gaara�s in fashion school? Holy Shit.

I had written part of the first chapter (because I�m a total perfectionist and I have no idea how to do any of this, so I�m just lost and confused), but, like I said earlier, after reading DMZ, I think I may have to just forget I ever wrote anything and dig a hole to die in�;_;

Anyways, I loved your story!! Please let me know either way whether or not you�d be willing to bestow your awe-inspiring prowess upon this lowly excuse for an authoress by e-mailing me at keitaros_kero_neko at yahoo dot com

Forever your faithful fan,
Miranda
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From Ikippiki on November 15, 2008
Jeez you're so right about Sasuke getting revenge but don't worry, I'm sure Naruto will gently get him back to the right path,... or beat him so he walks straight again! Mhahaha... hum, you didn't hear any evil laugh, is that clear?

Anyway thanks for another great story! You never fail to amaze me with your originality and entertainning way of writing. Your sense of humor is delectable as is your Itachi lol. I just loved his character in the story. And the mails and text messages were just priceless.

Please do continue with the excellent work!
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From ANON - JEANIE on October 30, 2008
ITACHI IS SO HOT!!!
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