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Reviews for The Canalized River

By : susanna
  • From lexjamandme on February 09, 2008
    My favorite thing about this story today? Well beyond Karin and Sug getting together... I mean, could there BE a more perfect example of sexual tension... I adore how every once in awhile, you remind us that Naruto and Sasuke are still kids. Kids with a plethora of adult experiences, but still just 15 with the world wide and open in front of them. And now, they are taking it on side by side. (Snugglie feelings abound)
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  • From LadyRonin on February 09, 2008
    how suave of sasuke to now be able to communicate with the ladies as soon as he came out of the closet (ironically funny). i loved the bet about sasuke's preferences too (some ninjas will do anything for homecooking). things are still a little muddled between sasuke and naruto but i have hope for the future and can't wait to see in the next chapter.
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  • From spoon10488 on February 08, 2008
    I can't wait for more. I loved the part about to smexy legend that might happen (please, please, please!).
    I love it!
    =)
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  • From dkf on February 08, 2008
    Yeah, I'll admit I'm a little worried that he'll dump them when he doesn't need them anymore plotwise. He has a habit of doing that XD;.

    Heheheh. Het smut *is an equal opportunity perv*
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  • From spoon10488 on February 08, 2008
    Sasuke giving hugs, that slightly distrubing and totally funny. I loved it. The mental image is one I'll save for a time when I'm feeling down, then I'll laugh my ass off. LOL
    Can't wait for more. I'm going to read the rest of the chapters now, I'm kind of behind, but I'll caught up! Yosh!
    =)
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  • From LadyRonin on February 08, 2008
    when i first read the title of the chapter i thought it ws going to be about naruto but really it is about karin and sui., even though it's a het pairing i thought this was a very moving chapter. the uncertain first steps in love. on the other hand it made me pity jiraiya for what seems to be a lack of caring on his part and that of his partners that even naruto could see. i really liked the distraction and can't wait to see the next chapter.
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  • From dkf on February 07, 2008
    I can see Naruto's chakra being linked to his optimism. Interesting.

    I like your Sasuke. Kind, but still an ass XD. 'Though coming to think of it, he had rarely fought alongside anyone in his life. Naruto was the only exception. ' How true...

    *purrs* You say you can't compare with Kishimoto-san, and mayhaps your right (but what fan can compare with the creator :P *hug*), but I hope he does at least as good as you when Hebi and Naruto finally meet. ...and-they'd-better. 'cause-i'll-cry-if-hebi's-gone-too-soon.

    'He had always dreamt of saving Sasuke, leading him back to Konoha, to the friends he truly belonged to, but now it seemed that Sasuke had found new friends, had formed new bonds, while it was him, Naruto, who was friendless and alone, without any companion but the kyuubi. '

    Something I think sets your fic apart from others. Naruto's...lonesome-ness.

    I like the way Karin and Suigetsu get along here, Still ringing true to canon but...less bite.

    Anywoo. AWESOME. *Glee*
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  • From dkf on February 07, 2008
    You know, I'd forgotten about the genin (or was it pre-genin?) having to kill each other to advance. ...That explains a lot about the Mist nin, now that you've brought it up. Poor Suigetsu.
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  • From LadyRonin on February 07, 2008
    i knew itachi was alive and that the crow man would proably save him. is naruto going to try and do the legend thing with sasuke. in the rematch it will be supersensitive in love and improved sasuke vs the upgraded itachi that i think is going to show up after the crow man got through with him. i can't wait to see the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Halskr on February 07, 2008
    Thanks for the update. This chapter answered some of the questions of the previous chapters.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 06, 2008
    I'm glad that Naruto will be going with them so he won't be alone as he thinks he is. Hurry with the next chapter!!
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  • From LadyRonin on February 06, 2008
    this is where the sasunaru goodness is hopefully coming in at. i like how you put naruto in the same emotional state as sasuke when he met itachi again for the first time after the slaughter of the clan (if you get what i mean). i guess we are not going to find out if itachi is truly dead or not for a couple of chapters. i cannot wait to see the next chapter (i have high hopes).
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  • From ANON - Halskr on February 06, 2008
    I like this chapter, but again it moves a bit fast. You spend alot of time in dialogue which is well written, but a conversation takes very little time in real time. It would help the flow of the story and slow it down a bit to switch POV's (point of view). This would make things clearer for the reader and for you. For example, there are a couple of discrepencies in the last couple chapters. There is Itachi's group in the west, two Akatsuki's in the east with Sasuke's group and Naruto in the middle. We know Naruto is about a day behind Sasuke, but you explain Naruto closing the gap by using the Kyubi's chackra. Naruto catches up to Sasuke and they fight the bird and Itachi. Suigetsu fights Kisame. I take it Karen and Juungo fight the two from the east. How do these two catch up and overtake Naruto? By switching POV you can tell the scene from Karin and Juungo's perspective and explain the discrepency away. What happens to the bird guy? Does he get caught in the blast of Naruto's jutso or does he run when Itachi falls? Now I am not trying to be mean and blast your story, what you do write is well written. I just think that if you switched POV's and possible threw in some more desciptive, scenery details, your writing would progress to another level. Again, thanks for writing this and sharing it.
    Halskr
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  • From digiditz on February 06, 2008
    I must thank you for your speedy updates. Your chapters aren't very long but the come out fast enough that I don't have any complaints. I'm really enjoying this story and I couldn't remember if I gave you a review yet. Very rude of me if I didn't. Keep up the good work.!
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 06, 2008
    I hope Naruto and Sasuke kick Itachi's ass or at least make him retreat. Hurry with the next chapter!!
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