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Reviews for Take Me Home

By : CianisDeRolionus
  • From Jiro on April 17, 2008
    Admittedly, I'm only on chapter 3 but so far I like the premise of this story, and your writing is quite good ^_^ Also, you've written both Sasuke and Naruto relatively in character, which is hard to do in AUs.

    That having been said, I think you jumped into things a little too quickly in your haste to further the storyline. Sasuke and Naruto get to the Uchiha manner and go straight to sleep. So when we see them at dinner, the family has interacted with the new 'couple' for about, what, an hour, and everyone can magically tell Sasuke's the happiest he's ever been? Unless the man is pulling a Tom Cruise and jumping on furniture, I think you should wait a day or two in the story for the family to realize this. Maybe they CAN tell he's happy, but that doesn't necessarily mean NARUTO is the cause, I think it would take at least more than a meal in which the 2 don't talk to each other for the family to come to that conclusion (the fact that they're only there for the weekend is problematic for this too). Then Mokoto confronts Naruto all the blond has to say is "I love him" and all is forgiven? Her mood swings in that scene are almost manic. So, I like the writing, the plot, and the characterization. I just think you executed it a little too hastily. It's like you crammed a week's worth of observations into an evening's worth of interaction.
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  • From ANON - Nibiki on April 16, 2008
    Hi! I love where your going with this story and would love to be included on your mailing list. kori.nibiki@gmail.com Looking forward to the next chapter. Until then, Ja!
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  • From demona013 on April 16, 2008
    add me to mailing list demona_013@hotmail.com
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  • From ANON - demona on April 16, 2008
    great story.
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  • From yukikoangel on April 15, 2008
    Nice story, I really like it.

    Can you add me to the watch list? The cliffie is to die for :D

    yukiko_angel_demon@hotmail.com
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  • From MichiyoInue on April 15, 2008
    pls! put me on the mailing list!!!!!

    dacedarrien@live.com
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  • From ninetailedfoxx852 on March 24, 2008
    please update soon!! i love this story so much and i cant wait to see what happens next

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  • From ANON - fluffy_cloud on February 13, 2008
    damn it! i hate it all when all these happened! *pulls hair* but can't wait for more.

    oh yeah, i've received your mailing list ^^V
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  • From ANON - Captor Sakura on February 07, 2008
    OMG, Sasuke got into ANOTHER accident? O_O; Poor guy. But yeah, it did feel a bit rushed sometimes. That's okay ^^ I got the email for the update, thanks a lot!
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  • From In2lalaland on February 07, 2008
    I love, love, love this story. Could you please but me on the mailing list? In2lalaland@hotmail.com
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  • From sweetciel on February 07, 2008
    Such a goo0o0o0od fic! I'm hooked. Could i could i could i please be added to your mailing list? If it's not too much trouble. My email address is tiplarc@earthlink.net
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  • From Eternel on February 07, 2008
    if you don't mind could you add me to the list too please? snow_angel22003@yahoo.com
    I really like this story so far, it's very interesting.

    -Snow
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  • From Sayuri on February 07, 2008
    Wow, hot chapter. But it was great how you added more of the story in because I've been waiting to find out more since everyone remembers Naruto except Sasuke himself. I'm interested in seeing how it will progress and what's gonna happen between Sasuke and Naruto. Poor Naru-chan though, he's loved Sasuke for so long and accidentally hit him with a car >< I can't wait to go more into the past of what happened with Sasuke in his recovery/pulling through and Naruto with feeling guilt maybe? Or facing that the person he loves lost all memory of him.

    But yeah, the chapter was great, had some good lime with a twist on the end. Waiting for the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - taiintatsu on February 07, 2008
    thank you for the update is was a good chap. i got your notice thanks
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  • From kotikiz on February 07, 2008
    waw.. I'm a litle bit shoked..
    I LOVE this story!!!
    update soon
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