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Reviews for Sweet, Innocent Hinata-Chan (COMPLETE!!!!!)

By : ShouraiChan

From DragonMan220 on March 01, 2008
So, the question is did Naruto climb out of his room to go rescue his friends or was he forced out? And will Hinata stay captain after everyone recovers from the mission? I really hope Naruto will be well enough to fight by Hinata's side, I'd love to see Byakko Hinata working with Kyuubi Naruto! Plus, I can see them nuzzling one another on all fours like animals.
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From roxnroll on February 29, 2008
Where's Naruto?????? I can't wait to read the mission and find out where Naruto went.
Rox
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From EroSage on February 29, 2008
Thanx for the fast update. I can't wait to see what happens in yukigakure. And the whole Naruto disappearance thing , I wasn't expecting that; makes a sense of mystery. Well as you love to give these out I thought I'd give one out for a change: *e-huggle* *e-huggle* *e-huggle*. Well I don't wanna push ya but update soon lol. And once again gratz on the awesome fic
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From EroSage on February 29, 2008
Umm, I've been reading your fic since the beginning and I must say that it is the best I've ever read and I've been reading fics for around 2 yrs. Sorry I've never reviewed your fic I know how much u love it :)but I just never got around to it. I love the way you develop the characters and how you twist the plot that makes all the chapters cliffies lol. I love you sho-chan, sorry but i just had to say it. I can't wait for the Hinata kicking ass at yukigakure. O yea and i love the smut. Your descriptions of the smut are so good it's like I'm the one fucking Hinata or whoever is getting fucked, lol I know that was just wrong but i need to voice my opinion. Your story has inspireed me to make a WAFF fic and thanks for indirectly helping me ;).

Yours Truly,
ANBUKiller or bennyx (however it appears on the screen lol)

p.s. A small note, when u said that Hinata's mom was "Hokage" of yukigakure... Hokage refers to the leader of the land of fire. Since she's from the land of snow wouldn't Hinata's mom be the "Yukikage"??? Sorry just had to point it out. Happy writing and I hope to enjoy your next update!!!!
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From JAKKAL on February 29, 2008
You should edit the lines where you refer to Hinata's mother as Hokage. Hokage is the title of the Kage in Konohagakure. The five great villages all have their own Kage's with a prefix of their country or village. Konoha is in the Fire Country, and Ho is Fire. Kazekage is the leader in Suna, in the Wind Country, and Kaze means Wind. So on and so forth.

Also, Jiraiya and Tsunade were a bit OOC, eh?

Also, where in the hell did you get the idea for Hinata being the strongest Ninja throughout Konoha? Not that it's a bad idea, just curious as to where and how it came to you.

Other than that, the chapter was fun to read, kind of. A bit boring, compared to some of the other chapter. Overall, though, good chapter.
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From roxnroll on February 29, 2008
Really nice little story with the emphasis on Hinata. Can't wait to read more.
Rox
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From DragonMan220 on February 29, 2008
Silly me, I mixed up Gobi and Byakko. But beating on Hinata like that... it's just asking for a Kyuubi Naruto to sense his mate in trouble and break out of the hospital to finish what Kyuubi started. NOT A GOOD IDEA!!! Why do people always have to beat up Hinata to bring out her inner power, why can't she just meditate to find it?
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From BlazinAtsuma on February 29, 2008
Hey just read the last chap so far. I gotta say Hinata is from Yukigakure and her white Tiger is Byako then... So the only thing I can think of is she goes to her home village and set her friends free from their fantasies... Who is strong enough to damn near kill Naruto and Kyuubi.... That is the question I need the answer to.. And who is the old man who hurt Atchi like that.... Since they couldn't get anything personal from Naruto they couldn't subdue him into sleeping or living out his fantasy life.... Love your story Sho-chan please keep up the great work..
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From SPARTAN777 on February 28, 2008
Hells bells lol. Naruto beaten? Dear Kami... Who could take on naruto at all, let alone the kyuubi. And thank you for the e-huggles *e-huggle for you*. no worries about my little rant on FantasyFreak. You should see what I would've done physically. *maniacal grin* heh. anyways. I like how this is turning out. I'm pretty much hooked on your work Sho-chan =) I've also noticed that you called yourself that at the end of this chappy *grins* Hope you like it. I just kinda thought it'd be more what a friend would call you. So sometime we really need to talk about a fic of my own. I'm having some real problems trying to come up with an idea for this fic I want to write. My basis thus far consists of merely a loving relationship between naruto and hinata. I only hope I can rival or at least try to keep up with this ridiculously delicious meal of a story. But just like a meal, I'm a pretty big guy and my appetite for food is nothing compared to my appetite for reading so I always want more *smiles warmly* and this is without doubt the tastiest storyline, and story I've read in a long time. You still haven't told us how you've been Sho *puffs out chest indignantly and turns head to the side peeking out of one eye slightly* I just qualified for black-belt exams in ninjitsu next month so I'm all psyched for a wicked awesome fight chappy *bows* Please Sho-chan? *bows lower* Hope all is going well for you and I hope that the sun shines on your face and the moon illuminates your nights. Hope to hear from you soon sho =) Please take care. Ciao my friend.

-Spartan

P.S. Just a little sidenote for FantasyFreak, whom I hope has been juvenile enough to come back and read the reviews of the devoted readers of our beloved author. FUCK YOU.

*thought I'd throw that in there for fun lol*
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From DragonMan220 on February 28, 2008
Gobi is protecting Hinata?????? Sweet, I almost feel sorry for the bitches when they get in her way!!!!
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From SPARTAN777 on February 27, 2008
HAHA! I was right, it was a genjutsu. Nice touch with the owning or possessing personal property of the yonnin in order to put them under the influence of the jutsu. I'm afraid I can't review this one for long because as luck would have it, I have forgotten to turn the heat on in my basement where my lair resides and I can't feel my fingers. I'm sorry for the short review I'll have to leave this time but I promise that I will leave a better one in the morning when I finish my training. I really really like how this is turning out and I off you any assistance I can if you should need it in continuing the story because I am far too enthralled to let it end. I gotta get outta here now and stretch and whatnot before I go to sleep so I bid you a goodnight my friend. *e-huggle for you* God bless and take care of yourself Sho-chan. Ciao, Goodnight.

-Spartan
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From SPARTAN777 on February 27, 2008
I didn't get a e-huggle? *pouts* I noticed it too... Ten-chan (neji's pet name for tenten) "Ri"chu taking care of shika whose girl is tema"ri" and "ku"chi with sasuke when the girl he just got pregnant is sa"ku"ra. I think I left a comment about it but anyways lol. I haven't read this final chapter today yet. I will do so now =P sorry again about FantasyFreak. May his guts fill the bowels of the death-eaters. *morbid statement* lol reading now. *eyes glued to screen*

-Spartan
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From SPARTAN777 on February 27, 2008
Alright. Here I am thirty seconds after my last review and after reading the authors note. I went from ecstatic over the updates and the developing storyline to homocidal maniac in one blow. FantasyFreak, I hope you burn in hell. Stupid fuck, did you not read the authors notes nor the rating on the story before you read it? Something is seriously wrong with people who can review on a story based on the fact that they didn't like reading it. Dumbass fucking cunt. You were last in line when they handed out the brains weren't you you miserable piece of shit? Anyone else who is stupid enough to do anything of this sort, you're in the same boat as fantasyfreak and the same goes for you. If you've got a problem with it, tell me about it and I'll be more than happy to rid you of your less than worthless life.

Shourai-chan, I am so sorry that an author as good as yourself (I'm speaking from experience because I know what the fuck I'm talking about from reading nearly all my life) has to deal with such scum. Pay them no nevermind. They aren't even worth the brainspace it would take to remember who they are for half a second. 99.99% of your readers like what you write and the ones that don't have no grounds upon which to stand their rediculous little opinions because just like FantasyFreak, they didn't read the warnings or the rating or don't know how to appreciate someone who can come up with their own unique storyline like you have. I know how hard it is, I'm trying to do it myself and it's nearly enough to drive me insane and I scored in the top 2% of our nation on the A.S.V.A.B. I'm no retard and it is still giving me a ton of trouble. I have respect for any author who can earn my respect which you did in two chapters. So as I said, pay these trifle fools no heed. They don't deserve it nor can they come up with a valid argument that I can't strike down myself to prove them wrong "AGAIN". Should any of the idiots I've WILLINGLY and with much glee insulted wish to try to prove me wrong, I invite the challenge which, much like their intellect, is nearly, if not completely, nonexistant.

Thank you for your updates my beloved author and friend. Sorry for ranting and raving all over YOUR review space but I felt like telling off a few morons and upholding the good name of my favorite author. Sorry for the language too. I'm trying to stop it for the benefit of myself, my fiance, and of course, my dear friends. I do find that it helps to alleviate the pain in my mind brought about by incompetents who have no reasoning or grounds on which to place their vague and meaningless statements.

I'll go on and read the next and final chapter updated thus far now=) I shall review momentarily =) take care Sho-chan (may I call you that?)

-Spartan
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From SPARTAN777 on February 27, 2008
heh. I think I might've figured it out at least to some degree, but I was sure you'd have this. I like it when no matter what, you can't figure out everything because not everything has been left for you to figure out. You're really good Shourai. I'll be reading until I can't read no more! *quotes a knock-off of choji* I won't leave to much on this review as I'm far too eager to get to the next chapter heh. I'll be reviewing again in a few moments *begins to read*

-Spartan

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From SPARTAN777 on February 27, 2008
Ah. Although you have two or three chapters still to read I do so believe that I'm going to review each of them as I read them as opposed to my norm of reading all there is and then reviewing. From what I can tell Shikamaru is trapped in a very powerful genjutsu cast upon him by that "richu" I believe? Because she was the one who wanted smokes from him. I'm glad you're alright Shourai-chan. I miss not being able to write as much but I am currently forming a plotline in my mind on a Naru-Hina fic of my own. Sometime I'd like to run it by you one-on-one to see what you think because I hold your opinion in high regard being as you currently hold my favored author position. (a hard thing to get mind you because I read a lot lol) So whenever things become convenient for you I'll give you my myspace or something. Whatever you prefer. I'll be reviewing again here in a few minutes after I read the next chappy =P Thank you very much for the updates and for mentioning me again *prideful smirk* lol

-Spartan
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