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Reviews for Team Bonding Exercise

By : Askerian

From ANON - Sasuke-fan on March 21, 2014
OMG! I loved the story——it was so hilarious. Who could ever imagined a Hebi(Taka, whatever)orgy! And what I really laughed in the end Those Taka's members are very horny xd
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From Calcifer on February 09, 2009
LMAO -heart- There were some truly giggle worthy moments in this.

Keep up the good work!

~Angel
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From PervyYaoiFancier on January 13, 2009
XD!!!!!

Oh my god, I choked on my own laughter all through this! TOO FUNNY!! AND sexy. You hardly ever find that combination anymore! Oh, and I love Sui on principal now...Smarmy bastard. This had everything anyone could ever want from a dirty ninja orgy involving Sasuke. Oh, man! LOVED IT!!
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From ANON - Anon on September 17, 2008
hah. Like who *didn't* think of that when we first saw Suigetsu pick up that sword.
Some akward things there, but most people reading this probably aren't going to notice. :P
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From ANON - blisblop on August 26, 2008
Oh praise the Lady , Juugo and Sas.HOT.It was a laugh riot in the best of ways, bawdy I believe is the term.Thank you!
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From ANON - Denisse on July 13, 2008
Amazingly HOT!!!!
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From ANON - ras on February 06, 2008
that was brilliantly in character and made it easy for a person who doesn't ship any pairings to read it without feeling squicky. sasuke had some great lines, that really set an interesting tone. it was so him, even though he wasn't the one doing anything to anyone.

i was seriously wowed by his convo with suigetsu when sui was like, it's not fair, and sasuke was like, when you wanted things to be fair and sui was like, i don't, but you do. i thought that was just perfect dialogue. and actually i liked the suisasu bit because, again, sasuke was so in control all over the place and perfectly in character without being arrogant or prissy. it was like watching an alpha male keep his followers in submission while submitting himself... sort of
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From animekid on January 31, 2008
hahahah this was hot and funny!

oh man poor sasuke has to deal with his cracked up team! It was so in character and man....I want to read more of this XD

Karin was a piece of work....if she did get preggy....

sui was just nuts.....

please more
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From ANON - Anon on January 28, 2008
Pre-reading: Alright, let’s get this show on the road. The pairings look interesting. At this time, I’m strictly a Team 7 pairing reader, minus Kakashi and Sai, but with the addition of KyuuOro. (I guess that defeats the meaning of “strict,” though. ^_^') Maybe this will break the mold a little.

(I review as I read.)
Really nice beginning. . . . I like the short phrases to describe each member of Hebi. . . . Wise reasoning, Sasuke. . . . Hahaha, nice first spoken line. A total ?WTF? moment. ^^ . . . XD “Her eyes, not her chest.” XD His brain’s stuttering. . . . Good entrance, Suigetsu. Hee hee, “I sleep here, moron.” XD (This is going to be a loooong review, can you tell? ^^) OH, that was a good one! “Did you just call me flat?!” Very nice, as opposed to “Did you just call me fat.” XDD . . . Oh my God! I keep laughing at every paragraph! (*already on the ground laughing*) . . . They just keep coming. . . . (*another burst of laughter*) “Sasuke decided that he’d had enough stupid for the day.” XDD And I hadn’t even read the second line of that paragraph when I posted that. XD . . . You gotta hand it to Suigetsu to keep going on like that when there’s an enraged female in the room. . . . I must be blind. What is Suigetsu drawing? . . . Oh, jeez, there goes Juugo. Hee hee, he’s stuttering. ^^ . . . He couldn’t just scare them with his eyes like he did before? That might get them to quit and run under the covers. . . . They all want to -- and Sasuke didn’t see this coming?? . . . XD “Now there wasn’t.” . . . Man, Juugo’s cute. The gentle giant (at the moment, of course). . . . “Oddly silent.” Good, the silence makes it tense. . . . There’s the glare. Some of it. . . . I was just thinking -- the very first scene of Sasuke walking in on Karin would make a great picture. Anyways . . . . She does have doe eyes, doesn’t she? . . . Wow, the kiss-and-grope session was pretty cool. Not just hot, but cool. You know? . . . I like the bit about Sasuke biting everyone. ^^ . . . Not his shorts, her shorts. . . . (*bluuuuuush*) . . . Wouldn’t it be bad if Juugo turned right now? I mean, as calm as Juugo usually is, I still wouldn’t trust him to . . . yeah. (*cough*) . . . Man, Sasuke is so lucky! Having three people practically worshipping him like that! Okay, more like forcing worship on him, but still. . . . Heh, nothing’s ever easy with Sasuke. Anyone tries to help him, he’ll make them regret it. Hence the kicks. . . . WHOOPS! “Karin had used [. . .] out of her pants -- ” His pants, dammit!! . . . “Figured that Suigetsu’s asshole routine was also his way of flirting -- ” I’d bet you’d be like that too, Sasuke, if you ever get around to flirting with anyone. ^^ I like the phrasing of the second line in this paragraph, by the way; it sounds funny. X) . . . I love Juugo’s personality in this whole fic. . . . Whoa, when did Juugo get undressed? . . . Heh. “Just a little more.” X) . . . Love the repeated “Nothing worth mentionings.” . . . Hee hee, “Throw them both off him and storm out, he didn’t know, but something.” XD . . . I really liked the line “A corner of his mind was grimly satisfied; Suigetsu deserved to have the attention he demanded refused to him.” . . . Okay, every time you mention Juugo, my heart just soars. I LOVE this characterization! :heart: . . . Ooh, “snarled in frustration.” I can totally see that. . . . Hahah, I love Karin’s insult to Suigetsu’s pride-and-joy and then his retaliation. And then Sasuke said “Good idea.” XDDD . . . Yeah, I’m surprised too, Sasuke. Nice save, Juugo. But I thought Sasuke didn’t want to distract them. . . . Whoa! O.O Suigetsu’s sudden confession: “I’ve been dreaming of ******* *** **** for weeks!” RIGHT in front of Sasuke. XDD . . . Oh, nice, I love how you sneaked in Sasuke’s escape trick. . . . Ooh, (*shivers*) Sasuke’s growling at Suigetsu. :D . . . Awww, damn! I misread the pairings at the beginning! I thought it said “SasukeSuigetsu!” Oh well, my error. (*pouts*) I still think Sasuke should’ve f***ed Suigetsu, though. . . . You’ve got a thing for Sasuke being pushed around or the uke at least, don’t you, Asuka? . . . I like Suigetsu’s pleading/swearing. . . . Yeah, on his terms. . . . Hahah! “That was cheating!” XD . . . “The most bastardly son of a bitch,” and proud to be one, I’ll wager! ^_^ . . . “Or two or three.” There’s something funny in the truth of that. The dryness, maybe. . . . Aw, man, dammit!! Why did Karin get to have the satisfaction of knowing she was his first girl? (*scowls*) . . . Love that line: “And when he came back they better all be out of there.” Yeheah, I’ll bet. . . . Hee hee, the ending was funny. I hope he scares them this time, though. ^^
Okay! Great story! It didn’t totally break the mold with me, but it was definitely worth reading and will go on my Favorites list. (I STILL think Sasuke should’ve f***ed Suigetsu, though. *pouts*). The dialogue was hilarious and the characterization perfect. I’d give this maybe 4 to 4 1/2 stars out of 5. ^_^

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From dkf on January 09, 2008
guh.
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From cloroxbarbie on January 05, 2008
This story is so awesome! I love it. I especially love Juugo, now I have this image in my head of Juugo/Sasuke. Gosh..i love it.
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From kchan on January 04, 2008
Whoa, I wish I had come up with this idea ;)

The technicalities got confusing and it was difficult to visualize exactly what was happening, but group sex is like that - if you haven't done/seen it, it's difficult to figure out what goes where. And here it was left fairly vague which personally bothered me a bit.

Yet I thought it was really hot, and what I especially loved was how the characters stayed in characters - I love, love, love that in fanfics and it's really rare so thank you for that. I like my Sasuke as uke, but at the same time it's very difficult to write him as such and stay faithful to the original character - you managed to have exactly the right setting for that. I loved the interaction between Juugo and Sasuke, I've been playing with an fic idea for those two and you're inspiring me... I liked Suigetsu interaction too... hell, I liked them all.

I'll be adding this to my recommended reading list!
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From ANON - Emozilla on January 04, 2008
I love team hebi so much!

This was amazing i enjoyed every word of it.
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From ANON - audrey on January 02, 2008
That was brilliant.
"you're such a leaf, tell yourself it's bonding!!"
PFFFT!!
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From roxnroll on January 01, 2008
That was really good. I hope there will be more.
Rox
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