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Reviews for Lies You Tell Yourself

By : leanne
  • From noit on January 17, 2008
    Absolutely nice story. He's so much in denial.
    Stupid Sakura for not realizing that.
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  • From YuuriEiri on December 20, 2007
    Naruto leave on a mission for a while XD... (PLEASE?) WILL BE WAITING NEXT CHAPT. ;)
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  • From hinshihoushi on December 19, 2007
    It seems to be unanimous regarding the birth or rather non-birth of the possible Uchiha heir by Sakura. I agree with Lady Laran’s review the most, when it comes to the outcome.

    I hope that you make it very difficult for Sasuke to earn back the friendship. I have a hard time enjoying stories that have Sasuke cheating on Naruto in one way or another and then it all gets forgiven so easily. Real life is not like that or at least it shouldn’t be.

    I think he (Naruto) needs to disappear for a while and when he is rediscovered it should still take a long time to turn things around. Life and death situation, I don’t know, I just think it would take something major for me to be able to forgive someone that type of transgression, but them I proudly hold grudges.

    Maybe hook Naruto up with someone else in the meantime and Sasuke can see were his greed and selfishness has cost him.

    Anyways, I really enjoyed your first chapter and look forward to reading more. Very much so!

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  • From LadyLaran on December 19, 2007
    I went back to reread this to see if I could get an idea to suggest to you. Here goes:

    Given the fact that Sasuke went behind Naruto's back and seduced and knowingly impregnanted the woman that Naruto adored, any child between that pink haired terror and the Uchiha would be a living reminder of the betrayal of his best friend and the girl he loved. Honestly, the way this is set up right now, a triad wouldn't work and I don't know if you had that planned. I do think that Naruto should pull away, maybe have Tsunade send him on missions. When Naruto gets back, finds out Sakura miscarried but he can't find it within him to feel bad for either. Heart is going to be cold and sore for a long time. You don't love someone for THAT long and get over it fast.

    Resolution - once the boys hook up and there's outcry about an heir to the clan, Naruto and Sasuke agree to a surrogate but NOT Sakura.

    Just a thought!
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  • From serenagold on December 18, 2007
    This is a really well done story. Aside from some much needed punctuation (commas, commas, commas!), I really felt for Naruto in this. His well planned and crafted attacks against Sasuke were fantastic. Kitsune are the ultimate seductresses and Naruto instinctually picks up on this skill and utilizes it for all its worth. Sasuke's startled reactions to Naruto's competence as a Ninja were also nice touches. Overall, this story was great. Now, on to some suggestions...

    If you want to find a starting place for Sasuke to begin trying to reconnect with Naruto, how about soon after she gives birth to their kid. Officially, Sasuke's done what he needed to do in the way of repopulating his clan. Sakura, off of active Ninja duty to take care of their child, is stuck at home and Sasuke has more time to sneak way (mission and what not - wink wink). Sasuke could have also have been noticing Naruto keeping a watchful eye on Sasuke's behavior towards Sakura, all the while keeping his distance. Now that the baby's been born and Sasuke's proven to have lived up to his agreement to take care or his 'wife,' Naruto starts to back off. This immediately bothers Sasuke, because although they are no longer "friends", at least the blond was near. Sasuke decides to make his move and starts trying to pester Tsunande to pair him up with Naruto again on missions. Of course, the Hokage looks upon the Uchiha now with disgust and in no way wants to grant any request he makes. Another thing Sasuke decides to do is start shadowing the blond and showing up in all his favorite haunts - the ramen shop, the training grounds, near the blond's new apartment - everywhere. This is also driving Naruto crazy as he is actively trying to avoid Sasuke, only to see him every where he goes. Finally the two do get paired up on a mission and will have to work together...

    I dunno, feel free to take any of those ideas and run with it. After reading the first chapter, I have no doubts that whatever you come up with next will be just as good. Keep up the good work! I look forward to the next installment. ^^ (Oh, and one request! I want more Sexy no jutsu'd Naruto/Sasuke scenes! It would be a great way for Naruto to torture him and makes things awkward between them afterwards when spending too much time in that form -which I firmly believe makes him actually female- backfires on him leading him to experience his own aroused reactions. What a way to get the ball in motion! Rewr!)
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  • From bluegenjutsu on December 18, 2007
    This chapter was so sad!!! I loved how you had Naruto treat Sasuke though!! But I wish he really would see that Sakura is just as much to blame and Naruto himself already knew from when they were all first a team, that Sakura loved Sasuke and always would. I think Naruto needs to be sent on a long mission, maybe he should request that himself so that he can have time to get over the betrayal and to try to mend his heart. And Sasuke needs to learn that what he did was horrible and that he has a lot to make up for if he wants to be with Naruto. I really like this story and look forward to you writing more!
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  • From Picspixie on December 18, 2007
    wow, amazingly done, so sad though :(
    hmm ideas...well there could be a scare about naruto being late coming back from a mission as if maybe he let himself get killed or something and sakura and sasuke could be worried then try and see if he's ok when he does return but be turned away, i dunno, i think it is best to wait a while after the break up, grr sasuke is such an asshole and sakuras such a whory bitch, fits their personalities but sucks lol, interested to see how u have sasuke try and gain the friendship back, seems impossible, so please update as soon as possible u really got me thinking of this one
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  • From LadyLaran on December 18, 2007
    You know, the wonderful thing about being a writer...punishment can come in spades. Sasuke wanted Naruto AND his heirs? Seems like either a false pregnancy or a problem with Sakura and she can't carry children full term. I don't think it'd be right for Sasuke to EVENTUALLY win Naruto and Naru-chan have to see the reminder of his pain allt he time. That and payback needs to be a bitch and a half.
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  • From RickaZcurser on December 18, 2007
    gomen for double reviewing heheh but That was sly of Naruto telling Teuchi (sp?) about how wonderful Sakura was before the breakup.. there will be people who will look at Sakura with bad eyes... heheh quite sly of Naruto
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  • From RickaZcurser on December 18, 2007
    wow nice chapter I loved it... and you have to admit Sasuke got that comming the baka.... about suggestions I was thinking... hmmm Naruto's an ANBU too right? then he can be in a coma after a mission or so... I mean he was so distracted within himself that he became careless and while saving the team he himself put in danger... you know the drill
    OR you can make him a hunter-nin, they if I'm not mistaken get they data and existance erased from Konoha (paper-wise) until they retire (in which case they will have another name and identity) or their leader deems so...
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  • From Ezj on December 18, 2007
    OMG it's soooo good. It's so sad but at
    the same time I can't get myself to stop reading.
    I got to have more of this drama. Gods this is
    the best I've read in ages. Good work.
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