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By : riddlestar
  • From ANON - meemee on May 25, 2013
    Whoa was that Hindi? I thought I'd just bunch my reviews together at the last chapter like always (cos I'm a lazyass like that) but then I noticed you just wrote something in Hindi... -is too shocked cos this is the first time seeing a fanfic author who knows Hindi-


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  • From ANON - achtland on February 05, 2011
    You really need to fix the font and the code on this story. It is so freaking hard to read and takes the enjoyment out of reading the story. Its really disppointing that its this way.
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  • From AngelTalion on February 03, 2011
    This was lovely... so good I acctually read through most of my work day and now I will be working after 5 because of you and your lovely story! :) Thank you for sharing I liked it!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 07, 2010
    Chapter 16: “Dancing around each other in a poor imitation of a mating ritual,” lol. ____ Sasuke using Neji’s back as support, lol again. ^^ ____ “And now there were almost home.” I think you mean “they”. ____ I like how Naruto’s deciding that the sooner they talk about it, the better, before Sasuke closes it off completely. ____ At least Naruto got started. Once he starts, it’s hard for him to give up. ____ “Hn is not the answer to everything.” Good one. ____ Oh yeah, Sasuke was irritated at that impersonation. If Sasuke knows he’s jealous, that’s a point in Naruto’s favor, isn’t it? ____ “Be careful, teme, I might drop Neji.” Like Sasuke cares, lol. ____ For most of that time, Naruto wasn’t sure, was he? ____ Lol, “I’m not mad.” Just a little disappointed. ^^ ____ Aha! The persistence pays off! There’s the kiss I’ve been waiting for. ____ Lol, that’d be funny if Neji woke up to see them necking right next to his face. ____ Hehehe, just try using that excuse of just-to-shut-Naruto-up now, Sasuke. After that hot tongue-twirling kiss, the excuse will not hold water. =_) ____ Bwahahaha, “Erm, we still have time to, you know…” For a second, I read that and missed the word “time,” so I thought it said, “Erm, we still have to, you know…” XD Yeah, it HAS to be done. No avoiding it. XD ____ “You want to do it in a forest.” Eh, why not? (*shrugs for Naruto*) ____ “The dark eyes were shinning in what Naruto knew was lust.” You mean “shining.” ____ Also, “over whelm” should just be one word. ____ Interesting how Naruto’s body reacts to the mood. His scars stretching and the colors sharpening…. ____ I like it how Naruto’s suddenly hesitant because he’s not sure what Sasuke’s up to. It is hard to trust the guy. ____ Love it how Sasuke’s all To-hell-with-Neji-let’s-fuck. ^^ ____ This is interesting: “‘You’re scared, aren’t you?’ The tone was taunting and not playful in the slightest.” Sounds almost like Sasuke’s ready to give up, like, “Yup—this isn’t gonna work, forget it.” Like he’s expecting it to go wrong. ____ “The Uchiha had smelt blood and was going after it.” Good line. ____ It’s hard to respond to Sasuke’s question, because Sasuke can find an argument for almost anything. At least Sasuke can’t use the rape excuse, because Naruto hadn’t hinted at making him…. Also, I think it’s spelled “skeptical” with a “k” instead of a “c”. ____ “His life was on the line here.” It’s that serious?? o.o ____ Good line: “He was starting to realize that Sasuke had had no intention of sleeping with him when he had brought him here. All he had wanted was to get more information out of Naruto…” Well, this was a disappointment…. ____ Niiiiice, Naruto. =D “You’re just using this as an excuse to ruin what we have. You’re the one who’s scared, teme.” Excellent. ♥ ____ This is another interesting one. “He knew that Sasuke was trying to intimidate him and it pissed him off that Sasuke would even think that would work. All the close contact was doing was reminding him how those pink lips tasted.” It makes me wonder what Sasuke thinks when he steps that close. Is he feeling something similar and isn’t aware of it? ____ “It calmed him, he realized belatedly.” Understandable. It’s hard to imagine Sasuke calming anybody when he’s so ready for something to get messed up. ____ “That what they had was the was something people rarely found.” I don’t think you meant to have that part in there. ____ “Sasuke would sneer at the cheesy lines and would probably shut him out forever.” Even if Sasuke feels the same way and knows it. True, Sasuke has had this sort of thing said to him before by several people; it probably is a little difficult for him to recognize it. The question is if he feels the same way in return and if he trusts that feeling. Or wants to admit it. He doesn’t like surrendering, so … he’s a tricky one. ____ “Sasuke sounded almost sounded bitter.” Might want to delete one of those “sounded”s. (I suggest the first one.) ____ “Re orient” also should be just one word. ____ At least Naruto’s man enough to admit/notice his pigheadedness. ____ Love it how Naruto just pulls Sasuke close and Sasuke loses more ground. I doubt that would work for a long-lasting relationship, but it might work for the moment. ____ Love the careful progression. ____ Love the paragraph about Sasuke’s eyes smoldering for Naruto. ♥ ____ “Errection” just needs one “r”. ____ “He would taunt him about that later.” Is that a good idea? I know they do that to each other, but in this situation, wouldn’t Naruto have to be careful with what he taunts Sasuke about? ____ The whole bit about the junction between Sasuke’s neck and shoulder being his weak spot is really clever. Reading it in this story made me look past the usual thing about it’s-because-he’s-got-a-Curse-Seal-there-so-it’s-extra-sensitive. Instead, while reading this, I was thinking, “Maybe it’s already extra sensitive, and that’s why the Curse Seal was there.” I especially like your line, “This was where the Sasuke’s weak spot lay—something to exploit and manipulate.” (Might want to take out that extra “the”, by the way.) ____ “Naruto blinked at the impressive sight before him, not being able to stop the stray thought that wondered whose exactly was bigger.” Lol. The obligatory question. ^^ ____ I wonder if Naruto doesn’t mind it because it’s Sasuke’s. Like, if he tried it with some other guy just to experiment—he wouldn’t, I know, but just for the sake of argument—would it be any less appealing. ____ Lol, I love it how Sasuke’s thinking, “I can’t believe he’s on his knees giving me a blowjob, for god’s sake.” ^^ ____ Where’d Sasuke get blowjobs from? (Dumb question, but he seems like the type to abstain. Who would he trust enough to give him one?) ____ “No, you’re not—gah!” Oh yes he is, heheheh. (*devilish laugh*) ____ I hate to point this out, but for some reason, “didn’t” is coming out as “didn’t’t” several times. ____ “For once, he had outsmarted the teme.” Congrats, Naruto. =) ____ “He had just been finger fucked to the best orgasm in his life.” I hope the implications don’t scare him. ____ “It was like Naruto was bearing his soul to him …” Actually you mean “baring”. ____ I like Sasuke’s perspective here: “The blond’s weakness for him was displayed almost vulgarly …” It kinda shows that he doesn’t like weakness, in himself or in somebody else (at least, not in Naruto anyway). ____ “If anyone walked on them now…” Lol, “walked on them.” XD I think you meant “walked in on them.” ^^; ____ That’s a cool line, “I’m not asking you for forever, I’m just asking you to try. Please.” ____ Yay. Sasuke’s not sure about the “love” part, but “trying” isn’t so hard. =) ____ Lol. Sasuke was in such control until the darn lube eluded him. XD That’s so typical of real life. You get control of a situation so far until something mundane throws you off. XD ____ Aaargh, Naruto, that was dirty, that trick with the leaves. ____ Love this whole exchange: “Sasuke … why won’t you let me?” “Why won’t you let me?” “Because I need this.” “… You haven’t even been with a man before, you idiot.” “How are you so sure about that?” “Because you would tell me if you had.” “Probably.” This exchange says so much. Sasuke’s really nervous and he’s probably had sex with guys before. (Once again, I’m not sure if the story had mentioned that before, but it’s something I’m always curious about.) I also like it when he says, “For fuck’s sake, you wouldn’t even know what to do! I can make it good for both of us.” He is scared. ____ Lol, “No one fucks Uchiha Sasuke in the ass.” I’m noticing a little bit of inconsistency, by the way. It’s no big deal, but earlier he was mentioned as “Sasuke Uchiha,” and now it’s “Uchiha Sasuke.” But anyways, it’s funny how the word “Fuck” keeps repeating in Sasuke’s head. Indeed, it’s a big thing on his mind right now; he wants to do Naruto anyway, and he also trapped himself into a corner with the argument. XDD ____ This is great. Love it how Sasuke’s going to “let” Naruto do it, but at the same time he’s gonna “hold his hand” and guide him through it. Love his misgivings, though. “It looked like it was going to hurt. Like a bitch. Shit.” XDD That’d be funny if Sasuke came out and asked Naruto, “Do you even know what you’re doing?” ____ Haha, Sasuke took too long. I’ll bet Sasuke’s just seething at the undignified position he’s in. ____ Lol, Sasuke’s urge to punch Naruto right in the face. I’m slightly disappointed that I didn’t see Sasuke reluctantly “guide” Naruto through fucking a guy, but this is entertaining. =) ____ Have you ever read some scans of NaruSasu doujinshi? There has been at least two of them that I’ve read where Sasuke says, “This is impossible,” while Naruto’s trying to screw him for the first time. I’m getting a similar vibe here. Along the lines of “This is impossible,” or “Too much, way too much too fast,” or “This isn’t working,” etc. ^^ ____ Heh. Love the sudden ending to the scene. Can’t think of a better one. ^^ ♥
    Good line: “I don’t need to be herded in like cattle.” ____ Hmm, Sasuke is acting weird. I guess it was naïve of me to think things were settled even that much. ____ Love Naruto’s honest answer: “Yes, I do think you might run away. I’m terrified that you might change your mind and disappear and never come back. Ever. Satisfied, asshole?” Great line. ____ Haha! And then the mood is just gone. “Teme! That was mean!” XDDD ♥♥ ____ AHAHAHAHAHAHA, that’s a GREAT LINE to end the story with!! XDDDDD ♥♥♥

    Good ending! It leaves things semi-open, but with enough closure to leave me satisfied that things’ll work out.

    I do have one question, though: the title. I’m not sure why it’s called My Favorite Mistake. What was the mistake, and whose was it?

    I enjoyed reading the story. Thanks for sticking with it and giving it a good ending. =) ♥

    Oh, and this chapter wasn’t as long as you’d believe. You should check out some of the early chapters in Anne Rice’s The Witching Hour. And even if this chapter is longer, it keeps moving, so it holds my attention. No information overload.

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  • From ANON - oni on December 23, 2009
    That was awesome, from beginning to end. Thank you so much!
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  • From serenagold on December 23, 2009
    "My Favorite Mistake" is one of my favorite stories. Congratulations on finishing it and keep up the great work. I hope you continue to create such interesting works of fiction in the future. ^^
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  • From ANON - HarryDraco on December 22, 2009
    ive been reading this fic the whole time and i thought i should tell you that ive really enjoyed it. I hope you keep writing more.

    toodles!
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  • From ANON - purple-er on December 22, 2009
    okay awesome end!! wow. i LOVED the sex scene and the banter between the two. clearly its not going to be a typical relationship, but i'm sure they'll pull through just fine! XD
    *happy reader*
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  • From ANON - Meg on December 22, 2009
    this chapter was.... i have no words. it was on a level of its own! you keep them in character so well.. not many can do that. thank you for this amazing story. it made me all warm and fuzzy inside.
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  • From loveusender on December 21, 2009
    Man i feel myself so swirling with emotions right now!! I feel hyped to even continue writing my new fic! that was breathtakingly mindblowing in all sorts of ways..Thank you for this, and i dont regret reading this in one sitting at all.My neck and back hurts but what the hell! i feel like I JUST EXPERIENCED fantastic sex..haha as funny and strange as that sounds. My all time OTP and you protrayed them beautiful and in character...*much loves and kisses for you*
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  • From YuukoUchiha on December 21, 2009
    no~~~ TT________TT
    I'm so sad it's over hehehe
    congratulations my dear, you should feel very proud of you
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2009
    I really liked your fic, and I think you are entitled to take as long as you want to finish a story...it does after all belong to you and we are only being allowed access to your imagination because you so choose to give permission by way of sharing the story....thanks for sharing it was a good fic...hopefully we will read more from you..
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  • From on October 03, 2009
    I love you
    Don't ever stop writing.
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  • From ninetailedfoxx852 on September 29, 2009
    please update soon! i love this story and things are def. starting to heat up and i cant wait to see what happens next!!!
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  • From Naomi0013 on September 24, 2009
    I'm glad that Neji is safe. I can't believe he was found out! Then used as a hostage I wonder what he'll have to say about that once he wakes up. Haha Mitsu-san totally missed how to impersonate Sasuke, seeing him smile and even embrace Naruto twice outside of closed spaces was creepy enough. I hope that there will be some loving after the initial shock of killing someone is over and their back in the village. Or maybe they'll be impatient and can't wait either one will be fantastic.:D
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