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From ANON - Anon on September 21, 2009
Chapter 15: Lol, a lover’s tiff. ^^ ____ Love how Naruto’s going through the different possible options. “For a supposedly easy mission, this was not going smoothly at all.” ____ And I still wonder where Neji is. For all we know, he could be in disguise as Yahiko. ____ O.O Th-that was c-close. (*shaken*) ____ Heh—Sasuke understood, all right. ____ “You think that Misakagawa knows we're here..” Hmm, I hadn’t considered that. Could be. ____ (*snicker*) “Even if Sasuke was giving him the worse case of blue balls in history …” XD ____ They’re so confident that Yahiko’s not an accomplice of Misakagawa. ____ Lol, “Maybe he went back to Konoha,” being his typical reply. ^^ ____ Love how they’re planning this all out.
Love the suspense. ____ Hmm, so maybe it wasn’t Neji in disguise if the Sharingan isn’t picking up anything. Unless Yahiko did something to Sasuke and he didn’t notice. ____ Lol, “pirate-style.” ^^ ____ “Naruto did not treat dead bodies so casually, never mind if they were Akatsuki.” Is it Naruto, then? ____ Ahhhh, so that’s what happened. ____ Sasuke just contradicted himself when he thought, “So the rumours that not even Itachi had been able to tell Misakagawa apart in the crowd had been true … impossible.” More like, “It shouldn’t be possible … but it was. ____ Heh—“he couldn’t trust that anymore.” ____ Huh? “He would have to use the ---- to check.” What’s with the extra-long hyphen? Well, whatever it was (sounds like it was Tsukiyomi), I liked the description about how it could distract the victim long enough for them to release whatever jutsu they had. ____ Maybe it’s not Naruto. Or maybe it is, and he’s under a spell. Or maybe he’s trying to get someone to give him information. ____ Wait a minute … is Sasuke under a genjutsu? He might have to use the Sharingan to break out of it. And he’s trying not to use it, so … ____ Oh. Holy. Fuck. That’s not good. Man, I wasn’t expecting that.
Strangely, this might help their relationship. Still, I’m kind of surprised that Naruto isn’t suspicious of this guy. Or maybe he is and is pretending not to be. ____ Love how Sasuke’s trying to get a grip on his emotions. ____ You know, I’m wondering if the Sasuke look-alike is Misakagawa or Neji. Probably Misakagawa. ____ Lol: “It was weird, Sasuke thought, to see Naruto with himself; almost like an out of body experience.” Heh—who knows? Maybe it is an out-of-body experience and he doesn’t realize it. Maybe his body is possessed. ____ Lol, Sasuke’s wondering if he thinks Naruto and he look good together. ^^ ____ AHAHAHA, that’s hilarious! “Who was Misakagawa kidding? … Annoyed that he was being acted out so poorly --did he really come across as such a fag?-- Sasuke leapt to the ground …” XD Love how indignant he is over the whole deal.
Alright, Naruto’s thinking on the same track as Sasuke. Nice. =) ____ Lol, “… [he was] a little creeped out by the smile on his face. Man, no wonder [Sasuke] didn’t smile that often … it was pretty comical to look at his friend’s features when they were like that. He didn’t know whether to laugh or stare in fascination …” Good description. XD But, I dunno, I think Sasuke can look pretty nice when he smiles. Naruto’s probably not used to it, though. ____ Heh—“wait till Sakura-chan heard about this!” ^^ ____ Could be Neji over the guy’s shoulder. ____ “However it was the mix of intense fear and hate currently on his face that threw him the most. Damn. [Sasuke] would kill Misakagawa for just daring to form that expression.” That’s an interesting line. Because we’ve seen that expression on Sasuke’s face many times. He probably doesn’t enjoy the thought of it, though. Probably also feels like another invasion of privacy. I wonder how Misakagawa’s version of it differs from Sasuke’s, though. ____ This has got to be one of my favorite scenes! This is so awesome! =D ____ Ahhhhh, good idea, Sasuke. Clever. (*snort*) Naruto’s studying his nails? >w< That’s a little hard to imagine, but it’s funny. Kind of OOC, though. ____ This is kinda cool, considering how Misakagawa still looks like Sasuke while the real Sasuke is threatening him. ____ Alright. Love it how Naruto threatened him with Kyuubi chakra. ____ You know, Misakagawa’s abilities remind me a little of Karin’s and her elusiveness.
Ah-HAH! Knew that was Neji! Unless Misakagawa’s just doing something to make it look like Neji; a last act of defiance, so that when Naruto and Sasuke kill him and later realize that the corpse isn’t Neji, Misakagawa still won something from them in the end. This is all just an idea, of course. It probably is the real Neji. ____ Good, he’s alive. Now he’s got some explaining to do when he wakes up, lol. ____ I wonder if the guy still looked like Sasuke when the real Sasuke killed him. I wonder how that must’ve felt. ____ Aww, that’s sweet. Yahiko’s going to be heart-broken enough. ____ Lol, love the dark humor between Naruto and Sasuke after the grave was made. ^^;
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From ninetailedfoxx852 on September 20, 2009
can't wait for the next update!-- i love this story and cant wait for some good smutty-ness!! X3
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From YojiKato on September 18, 2009
I am totally loving the way this is developing and can't wait to read more. I'm lookin' forward to some lovin', but I know things have to run their course so kudos for not rushing anything. Keep up the good work!!!
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From ANON - Meg on September 18, 2009
At first i wanted to pout and sulk that there was no smut, but you're right. it would be out of character for them to be so insensitive. I'm happy you updated and please dont take too long for the nexxt chapter.
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From serenagold on September 17, 2009
Congrats on your move to the UK. I wish I was doing something that exciting.

Also... updates!!! Hip hip fucking hooray! Woo hoo!!!!
I always get excited when I see one of my favorite stories back from the dead. The fact that I have an obsession with zombie movies has nothing to do with it! I would love to see you finish this story to the very end. (Personally, it will be a fun evolution to watch as you slowly start adding an extra "u" to all your words. Colour, favour, youur. lol) ^^

Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - purple-er on August 13, 2009
next chapter please!!
WHEN when when...
i love the subtle characterization of kakashi you put in where you say he waits till things unfold whereas these two lean towards clean action...nice!
i hope this is enough motivation to get the next chapter up... thanks!
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From ANON - purple-er on August 13, 2009
wow... i love this totally..
been hooked since the first chapter.. well written...
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From ANON - qoylurani on August 03, 2009
Great story! I look forward to the next chapter!
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From ANON - Sasunaru4eva on July 28, 2009
i dont usually read NaruSasuNaru, but your characterization here is perfect!! better than most authors ive read. please keep going. i love what got going on here.
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From ANON - Harry_lover on July 18, 2009
ive been following this story for a while. just thought I'd pop in and say i like it and keep going. :)
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From ninetailedfoxx852 on July 14, 2009
oh jeez-- i am lovin that little twist at the end- was not expecting anything like that!! please update soon-- this story is super exciting and im not sure how much longer i can wait! X3
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From ANON - Anon on July 13, 2009
Chapter 14: Nice reasoning, Naruto. ____ I like this line: “I may be okay at chakra recognition, but I’m no expert.” =) ____ “I am not that kind of ninja.” Good line. =D ____ I get the feeling that Sasuke would rather not risk having an innocent hurt if he can help it. He's probably open to alternatives, if there is one that's better. ____ “The teme” has been repeated ... way too many times in a small area. ____ “It was better left un said anyway.” Unsaid should be all one word. ____ D'awwww, that was so sweeeeet. ♥
“He couldn’t really pin point the reason behind what he had just done.” Pinpoint should also be one word. ____ Lol, Sasuke's daydreaming about Naruto. ^^
Heh—she's gotta regain her control, alright. She's probably pissed at herself. ^^ I like this line: “He understood her a little too well.” ____ “It was him who had gone to Naruto, and now it was him who had worsened the situation.” Actually, “he” works better in that sentence. ____ That's better. I like Hayate's gruff leniency. =) ____ Lol: “After this mission, he promised himself he would go stay in the hills for a few days. Anything for some quiet.” And I just bet he'd do it too. But Naruto would probably show up saying, “There you are, I've been looking for you.” Lol.
I'm starting to get a little worried about Neji as well. He's probably okay, just delayed for some reason or other, but still. Can't discount the idea that something's happened to him.
“He hated this kind of weather.” I do too. I'm okay with mist and fog, but not rain. D: ____ Heh—Sasuke doesn't care for frogs. I wonder why he prefers snakes to them. LOL: “'Thank god. Your Uchiha is no fun at all,' the frog complained.” XD “Your Uchiha,” he said. ____ There might be something like a secret passage in the house. Either that, or they've been following a clone of the guy and it led them to the wrong house. ____ Cute, “chakra detectors.” I wonder how those're made. Probably by some type of seal or something. ____ “I’ll get the job done with, and if I don’t, the target will run to the window.” Maybe. ____ “he stopped suddenly, a distant expression crossing his face . The clone had done its job, Sasuke assumed.” Excellent! Love the distant expression! =DDD ____ “We should enter the premises from the side. The clone will dismantle chakra receptors there for the second that we will need to jump the gates.” Oh. I thought the clone had dissipated when Naruto got that “distant expression”. Or did he just use the radio, like Yamato's wood clone did when he was trailing Sai in the manga that time? ____ Aww, that was sweet. =) ____ Lol: “Naruto was the one in heat, not him, for Kami’s sake.” It's called “chemistry,” Sasuke. ♥ ____ Hmmm, this could complicate things.... Then again, Yahiko might be in on something.

It's good! =)
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From ANON - Twinkle on July 12, 2009
ILU2! Nice chapter! I enjoyed the fluff! I'm glad Sasuke's coming in terms with his feelings. I have no life you know. I read your fic again. From the freaking begging. Nice cliffy in the end. I totally didn't see that coming. The reason this review is so choppy because I wrote you a looooooong review two seconds ago and this friggin site didn't let me post it coz I did not type in the 'identification' words, You know those tests, where you forget your password and they show you distorted words and you have to type it in correctly to log in the second time? Blah, so yeah, while I was reading this story again, I was thinking: 'Isn't Naruto being too in control of his heat. If he's in heat, isn't he supposed to lose it like, any freaking moment and jump Sasuke?' But towards the end, I understood though. Naruto's putting Sasuke's feelings before his own. He doesn't want to force his will on Sasuke. He want's their love to be real. Ah, he's such a sweetheart. I love it! Good luck with the next chapter!
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From serenagold on July 12, 2009
uh oh.. things just got complicated! O_O
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From ANON - Meg on July 12, 2009
Im so glad this chapter focused on their relationship! i made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.
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