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By : Shadowfox32459
  • From Nephthys on April 04, 2018

    this is a good story. please do more chapters.


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  • From Nephthys on October 15, 2016

    there are spelling and punctuation errors throughout the entire story.


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  • From Nephthys on October 15, 2016

    you really need to check the spelling and punctuation errors in chapter 1. for example, for naruto's date question, it's afterwards, not after words.


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  • From Ketteh on August 07, 2012
    I quit frankly find your story inspiring after I finished reading it I wrote 10 chapters in a day for my own fic. im a good plot weaver and if you find your self stuck I can drop what im doing atm and help you with a chapter or two. Ideas flow in to me like water falls at Niagara. i would consider it an honor. i never check my emails though.

    back to the review.
    naru/hina i love that its my favorite couple. I also like how you put sasuke and Sakura.
    if I have a suggestion for the next levels of elemental training

    earth: in in stead of making a boulder explode you are to make it shatter like glass, then for the final training do the same but insted of shattering you make boulders in to hundreds of pebbles

    Fire: simialar to stage one lightning and could be proctored by itachi, second level make the flames dance in air third Write out an entire poem using fire chakra in the ground while keeping it contained and not turinging in to a wild fire.

    Lightning: second level make balls of lightning chakra in your palm then toss toss them at rocks for a minute explosion. third try and make a blade out of lighting and then learn chidori

    your already know wind and I have no clue on water.

    and making kakashi's books in danged so he would teach PRICELESS!

    hope you add the new chapter soon

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  • From Zarrthtion on June 08, 2010
    This fic is wonderful first off im happy its not yaoi, there's too much of that. and secondly its very well developed and has a great storyline so plz keep writing im looking forward to more of your work

    and i may have only written one review but thats only cuz i couldn't stop reading long enough to write one my only chance was at the end of the updates so plz write more i'll be waiting
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  • From angelnomiko on February 20, 2010
    wow that was awsome ... please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

    angel
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  • From Coldstone on March 12, 2009
    Brr. On a word, my friend.

    The correct speech should be NI SAN, not NEE SAN. Or is Itachi a girl?

    Ni San means brother, Nee San sister.

    Otherwise it is an interesting chapter. Can't wait to see the fight between Naruto and Kisame.
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  • From shadowman on February 14, 2009
    you didn't pay much attention to the first step of the rasengan did you.
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  • From BlazinAtsuma on February 07, 2009
    Hey Shadow how is everything. I liked the update but I think ur going to have alot to think about. Especially for Itachi and Kisame going into Konoha and who is all inside the Hokage's room... Hope to hear from you soon. Keep up the great work til next time.
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  • From Coldstone on February 04, 2009
    Hi. Long time no see I guess.

    Sorry for my absence. I had a few problems of my own. I like your new chapter very much. I eager to see the sparring between Kisame and Naruto.
    It is a nice idea to give Tobi another Uchiha as assistance.
    I'm eager to read more of your Story.

    Keep up the good work.
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  • From Diamond84 on January 14, 2009
    That was great. Keep going.
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  • From ShouraiChan on December 12, 2008
    WHY did I wait so long to finally read this awesome story?!?! KUDOS! I mean seriously, you had me hooked from chapter 1! Keep up the amazing work!
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  • From ShadowInu on October 23, 2008
    This is a really sweet sweet story. and i love the various yu yu hakusho references. i cant wait for the next chapter!!!!!
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  • From brean on July 27, 2008
    I wanted to say that I am quite impressed with this story. I would like to point out some things though. First of all, I suggest that you go back through the entire story and proofread for spalling and punctuation errors. with the punctuation especially, it will make your story much easier to read. Seconly, I wanted to let you know that the likelihood of Kyuubi and Naruto running out of Chakra is zero, since Kyuubi has infinite Chakra. I would suggest that this tower of torment be in actuality one final attempt by Orochimaru to take over Naruto's body. And lastly, I would suggest that you look up the legends behind the diety names and the tailed beasts, as they will provide insight as to how these beings exist in oriental mythology. here is a link with a large amount of informaiton regarding the beasts http://forums.narutofan.com/showthread.php?t=57918 . Here is a mythological reference to Agni http://www.pantheon.org/articles/a/agni.html . Here is information on Rudra http://www.pantheon.org/articles/r/rudra.html .
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  • From Archfiend on July 14, 2008
    Ok. First of all I would like to say that I have never and will never flame a story, though I do understand if you are a bit pissed of by harsh or brutal reviews. Yet these reviews of mine, that have been sometimes hard on you are no flames but honest opinions. And never have I stooped so low as to insult you or your work. I have always pointed out flaws that is true, though I have also pointed out ways of how to remove these flaws. And if I say I`m dissappointed in your current chapter, then I also tell you why I say so, and what did not meet my expectations, and whatever you say but pointing out a flaw in astory or chapter to the respective author, and then suggesting ways of remeding these is constructive criticism in my opinion, and no flame. It shows I care for your story and that I wish to help you elevate your story to ever newer and heigher heights.
    Now to the fact that I have pointed out numerous times the in some chapters abysmal grammar and spelling. THIS NO FLAME EITHER! Ok, if one reads a tory or a story of a story in which one finds many grammatical errors and/or spelling mistakes it severly hampers a eader in reading and understanding the story and fully understanding and appreaciating the beauty of the story. To make the picture clearer I´ll give you an example: Imagine you want to recite a wonderful, romantic poem to the girl you love, though out comes a poem often interrupted by a stutter, the whole beauty and romance of the poem had been blown away. A good story is this poem, and your story is good, with the grammatical errors and spelling mistakes making up the stutter. to wholly appeciate the beauty of a story and what happens in a chapter one has to remove the stutter.
    Therefore I beg of you please do not take any of my reviews as a flame, they are just honest opinions, nothing more and nothing less.
    Archfiend

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