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Reviews for Coliseum

By : Tenshi
  • From spoon10488 on December 04, 2007
    so sad. Poor naru-chan poor sasuke! Wahhhhhhhh!

    cool story.
    ;P
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 04, 2007
    Hem... Not to ruin your angsty story, but the historical setting is completely wrong. Emperors could do whatever they wanted, they could even demand to be worshiped as gods, (many of them did), not to mention that omosexuality was not a sin or a scandal or a shame, it was totally normal and accepted in the society, (yeah, I know, for this they were more civilizated millenniums ago than we are now...); think that for ancient greeks the REAL form of pure love was the love between two men, and greeks had a great influence on the roman culture. So, there are no reasons to want a slave dead because the emperor loves him. And if you meant that they just used him as a scapegoat, then his love for the emperor doesn't fit the situation; Then again, the emperor could do whatever he wanted, and laws were not as severe as ours are now, so Naruto could save him just with a snap of his fingers and sentence to death is senators without explaining anything to anybody.
    Then again, (and this is the last one), Gladiators were not killed in the coliseum without the permission of the Emperor; so, giving him the thumb up would have been enough for Naruto to save Sasuke. This definitely doesn't make any sense. If you wrote this just after seing the Gladiator with Russel Crowe, you need to know that that's definitely not enough to set an historical background.

    Think that it seems, from the ancient roman's files, that Caligola, (emperor from the 37 to the 41 a.C.) elected senator his horse Incitatus, (yes, he was insane) and Agrippina (Nero's mother) used to go out in the night and go to a brothel, to get fucked by strangers for her pleasure; These are probably hoaxes, but the fact itself that they exist mean that, whatever Emperors did, they were right: they were the law.


    So, your story doesn't make any sense from the historical point ov view. Maybe you could edit it and write that it is an Alternate Rome? Because you wrote you wanted to make a historical fiction, but to make an histrical fiction you have to set the right background for your story.

    Beside this, it was a good story and it was soooo sad. Though Naruto is being too weak... Why doesn't he fight for his lover's life? He could have saved him so many times it is disgusting that he's leaving him there to die!

    Sorry for the historical nerd-ness, but Ancient Rome belongs to us, and I was very good in both history and latin too, in my high school. A huge kiss from Italy.

    Ciao cara!

    hak.

    (ciao cara means Bye Dear)
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  • From lexjamandme on December 04, 2007
    Ah... that was sad. Poor Sasuke and Naruto! Stupid senators.
    Excellent writing. Thanks for sharing.
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  • From Rosebud on December 04, 2007
    Beautiful piece...very tragic and well written.
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  • From ANON - Jasmine on December 04, 2007
    This was beautiful. It was so sad- and personally, the "his eyes were shining with tears" part was romantic and heart-wrenching; but so it is for hopeless-romantics, I guess. :)

    To sum things up, you're an awesome writer, and this was really, REALLY good.
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  • From Chria on December 04, 2007
    This is sweet. Period. It doesn't feel sappy in a overly romantic sense but feels tragic and realistic. Much love~
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 04, 2007
    "his dark eyes shinning with tears" just throws off the story.

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