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Reviews for Ballerina at Sea

By : rottenbiscuit
  • From poecilia on January 27, 2008
    This is pretty interesting so far; I look forward to updates. :)
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  • From Lhum on January 06, 2008
    This is looking pretty interesting, and I'm a big fan of this pairing. I think though that you need to look over your work one more time before posting, or get another person to do it if you're having trouble, because you seem to be able to write but I'm noticing a number of small grammar and/or typing errors throughout the story. Just trying to help!

    By the way, it's an interesting title. What does it refer to?
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  • From promise2003 on January 04, 2008
    I'm still really enjoying the story. I have been really busy, so I haven't had time to leave a review, but I want you to know that it is going well. (and do you think you would ever do a Naruto x Sakura story?)
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  • From llyoung on January 03, 2008
    Thanks for the update.
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  • From llyoung on January 02, 2008
    I liked Hiromi and it was good to know what punishment the girl who blew up the outpost received.
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  • From Hen on January 01, 2008
    I'm really liking this story! Too bad for that girl who destroyed the outpost though.
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  • From llyoung on December 31, 2007
    Thanks for another update. It was nice to know that Tsunade doesn't care much for the classes either.
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  • From llyoung on December 28, 2007
    Thanks for the update.
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  • From ixxora on December 22, 2007
    what are the classes all about? i am so darned confused..upadate more so i'll found out! :p
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  • From slayerette0 on December 21, 2007
    I know this story is in adultfanfiction.net so its probably gonna have a lemon, but part of me really really wants Sakura to start a kunoichi revolution and make the class not mandatory.
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  • From llyoung on December 10, 2007
    Love your story. I'm reading the new chapters as you put them up on your web site. Looking foward to more. Thanks for writing.
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  • From Nottoca on December 09, 2007
    Oh, I am really enjoying this fic! I usually don’t read WIP or incomplete fics (I know it makes me a terrible person, but I got so tired of reading really good fics that were abandoned and I also have no patience waiting for updates even though I love comments about my own stuff when I’m writing and I take forever to update) but this really is a promising beginning. I’m afraid I can’t offer any constructive criticism other than saying I enjoy your writing style and find everything to be flowing nicely. Please keep going and don’t disappoint your readers by stopping! (hint hint)
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  • From promise2003 on December 07, 2007
    Argh, such a cliffhanger.

    I would like to say that you write Ino very well, and I like your Sakura too. The story is progressing fairly nicely and your dialogue is still strong.

    Concrit: I'm glad that you are going to try to take the sentence paragraph thing into consideration, because there were some parts that really stuck out this time. Most of your errors are very tiny, and are things that you could fix by having a beta go through the story before posting (but I know good proof-readers are hard to come by). There really aren't that many of them either, just a few here and there. Kakashi seems a bit naive, and unless that is an act for him to inquire information about what is going on with Sakura, might be a little off in characterization. Kakashi is a person who I always picture to be completely in the know, but chooses to play dumb when it suits him. Even with his friend, but I do believe that it comes from a very caring place, and is only so he can help those who he cares about.

    Anywhoosits, please continue. I was happy to see an update so quickly. I can't wait for the next one.
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  • From promise2003 on December 03, 2007
    I'm finding the premise very interesting so far. That and I love Kakashi and Sakura. I really like your Tsunade, you write her very well. You wanted concrit, and it has been so long since I've given any, and I have been burned by giving my opinion so many times, that I'm not really sure where to start anymore. XD How bout this, the next chapter I will try my darndest to give you a full and well written critique? For now I think you should know that I'm enjoying it and that I definitely think that you should continue it. There were a few places where you had very short paragraphs, but not for dialogue reasons. That would be a place you might want to watch yourself. One sentence a paragraph does not make (most of the time XD). But really, it is good, and I can't wait for more.
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  • From Tricia1224 on December 03, 2007
    This sounds great so far. I am interested.
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