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Reviews for Vixens & Kitsune

By : archangelbloodraven
  • From dabluejay on December 10, 2007
    Very well done. I like the pace that you set in this story. Doesn't jump right into the good parts but at the same time doesn't bore me completely. Although to be fair I skipped the first chapter. I don't like to read Kyuubi interaction and a whole chapter of it that completely explains the plot of the story was a bit much for me.
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  • From DrkLazarus on December 10, 2007
    Sweet, another chapter. Awesome. Keep it coming!

    Nothing wrong with this one to comment on, things flowed smoothly, etc.
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  • From CryoBlaze on December 08, 2007
    A nice chapter, but I wish to comment on Naruto's cons you mention in your author's note at the bottom in a bit.

    As for how you switched the teams around that will make for some interesting times. The part with Shikamaru and Chouji asking Naruto to look out for Ino was quite nice. I can almost see Naruto going to Shikamaru's and Chouji's houses to ask their fathers about how they helped to support and/orprotect Inochi when he used his techniques. The reason behind asking Shikaku and Chouza is because unlike Inochi who knows what the technique is, does, and weaknesses, Shikaku and Chouza had to support their teammate. While Ino may not be completely happy that Naruto did that, she'd understand that it was because Shikaku and Chouza's experience of being Inochi's teammates helps him think of how to work with her. Inochi once he hears of it from Shikaku and Chouza will be happy that Naruto is trying to learn how to work with Ino by getting advice on how his teammates worked with him.

    Team 7 will definately have some prolems though since Sasuke is a loner and Kiba operates more along the lines of a pack animal (they'd just need to find out who's alpha). Team 8 (although in the manga Asuma's team was Team 10), will actually be a pretty good team, since Shikamaru can hold people and give Shino's bugs a chance to drain opponents without them reacting.

    In general his cons can be attributed to one of three things. His lack of a family/guardian/caregiver that would teach him what most children would learn how to do properly, he's had to learn on his own, never did learn it, or does not see a good reason to do it (the cons cuased by this can be corrected with the help of his other team members with some time). The lack of socializing due to how people treated him has led to his poor socialization skills as well as his attention seeking (while the attention seeking also relates to his lack of family, it relates also to his having no friends really until after the Academy).

    The final one would relate to the time Naruto spent in the orphanage and would mainly deal with his eating habits. I had an uncle who was in a group home for people and they only recieved set amounts for what they could eat at mealtimes. The problem with that was though was that other people would take your food if you didn't eat it fast enough (and the staff didn't always catch it, when they were looking). As for Naruto's eating that will take time and having it repeatedly mentioned that nobody's going to take/spill/ruin his food (that's what happened with my uncle, we had to mention that nobody was going to take his food and he slowly got better, going to a different place helped a lot as well). But yes Naruto's problems with time and effort on the part of others can help change him to be better around others (while Kyuubi will be able to help with some of it, other things would be best dealt with by Kurenai and the others).

    Anyways keep up the good work (sorry if it comes across as a rant about his cons, but just look at how kids who grow up in the wild are like).
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  • From UzumakiIno on December 08, 2007
    Good second chapter. Keep it coming.
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  • From Mangafreak on December 08, 2007
    good update. looking forward to more!
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  • From cloroxbarbie on December 08, 2007
    yeah nice list...can there be boys too? :puppy eyes: i like my narusasu..pwease?
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  • From caliko on December 06, 2007
    ok.. believe it or not, you made me log in for the first time in 2 years... lol. It's a good start, and cute. I'm def. looking forward to the next chappy... since there are no alerts at aff.net, do you have a mailing list to let us know you updated? If so, can you add carolinakitty@gmail.com to it? (Puppy eyes) Please????
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  • From shanthprime on December 06, 2007
    i like the way its going so far and look forword to reading more
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  • From UzumakiIno on December 05, 2007
    Pretty good. Keep it coming.
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  • From candycrys on December 04, 2007
    reads great so far, and i love your list of women. i don't know why but i just LOVE naruto with older women. i can't wait to see what you do with anko ^_^
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  • From Anonymous7 on December 03, 2007
    Alright, you've intrigued me with your mention of a plot-based fic rather than just a smut-fest, though I'll admit I'll be looking forward to the smut as well. I'll keep reading and see where this goes, but so far I like what I've read.
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  • From Gnosismaster on December 03, 2007
    Great story. I really like it. I'm glad that Sakura and Ino in the harem.

    PLEASE TELL ME THAT SAKURA WILL BE THE FIRST ONE THAT SUBMITS TO NARUTO'S WILES!!!!!!!!!

    Here's my yahoo e-mail, let's talk.

    hidan117@yahoo.com
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  • From DesertRoseTemari on December 02, 2007
    :D Very fun. I'm excited to be reading this fic, especially for when Ino and Tenten show (for some reason, I'm obsessed with Ino and Tenten, but I know I'll enjoy all the girls showing up, too). I love female!Kyuubi. Furry porn. xD
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  • From Chronostorm on December 02, 2007
    This is interesting i hope Hinata is invovled in the next chap though give what you put in the current chap i don't see why Sakura is in the Harem that and i just don't like her but i can deal with i weither way
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  • From Jin on December 01, 2007
    An interesting beginning. The dialogue and the plot aren't too cliche, and Naruto's new dream sounds like fun. Update soon!
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