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By : ElfenDream

From on April 23, 2008
Wow, poor Sakura and Lee. What is Naruto going to do now? Two of his friends seriously hurt, maybe dead, and I'm sure Itachi will point out how it's his own fault. Will Naruto try to get back at the Snakes? And even though Sasuke had something to do with this, I feel bad for him because he really wants Itachi to love him. And I don't even like Uchihacest (unless Naruto is in a threesome with them anyway). Looking forward to your next update!
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From snnj11220 on April 23, 2008
OUCH that was so fucking harsh! I may not like Sakura in general but she wasn't such a bad character in this story, you can't help but feel bad for her (and Naruto). But wow you really did her in, lol! Sasuke is being Mr. Major Prick here in the beginning of this chapter, I'll just add that to the list of his titles. Let's see so far we have Mr. Emo Bitch, Mr. Ice Prince and now Mr. Major Prick, you see the pattern here.

So yeah like I was saying Sasuke was being Mr. Major Prick being all shitty to Naru, when really its not Naru's fault Itachi doesn't love him. I really, really hate Sasuke in this story. Naruto, who I absolutely love in this story well besides Itachi who I am mad at right now, anyway Naruto must feel like he is in an episode of the Twilight Zone. Although he will probably blame himself it is not his fault what happened to Sakura because 1) he is just too nice, its in his character to care and be worried about people regardless of the situation (remember how in Naruto he still loves the village and villagers even though they treat him bad). They are stupid for not expecting him to do something like that. Besides he was saying goodbye its called closure. God Itachi's such a fucking idiot, but I'll get to that later! And 2)It seemed like she was going to be killed anyway because like she said how did Kankuro get to her house so quick. It really was a setup if I ever saw one.

Now let's get to the fact that Itachi is such a fucking idiot. He had a good thing going with Naru so far and then he had to go ruin it. I think he was just thinking out of jealousy and possessiveness but I think he screwed things up right here. Yeah Naruto is Mr. Nice and crap but when he finds out that Itachi set this up he is going to frustrated and he may start hating Itachi again (I know I would). Itachi is just playing right into Sasuke's hands, who is trying to separate them. Hell he wants them to hate each other, wake up 'Tachi.

This is really going to affect Naru badly, and what affects Naruto is going to affect Itachi because then Itachi won't have any of Naruto's smiles that he loves. And when Itachi is not getting Naruto's smiles then he is not being 'nice' to Sasuke. And then poor Sasuke is going to start turning into Mr. Emo Bitch again complaining even more about how Itachi doesn't care about him. Its like a domino effect, one even triggers another. So really instead of Sasuke trying to break them up he should be trying to keep them together so that way he gets 'nice' Itachi.

Oh and Kank is fine, I mean like you said he is never this cruel so of course he is going to be ooc, but the way you portrayed seems to fit him in this story. I am sure there are more sadistic things he could have done so even still his temperment is mild which is fine. And when is the freeloading slut going to come back, he really makes my day. I can't help but wonder how he is going to feel about recent events. And my heart goes out to your Naru they really are being so cruel to you, its so sad he is kind of like a slave or a puppet. Anyway see you next chapter!
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From mrk33 on April 23, 2008
Talk about obsessed. He killed the girl though he did warn him, and
maybe now Naruto will listen, not.
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From ANON - dyessie on April 23, 2008
yeeeeessssssssss.........
atlast! sakura. dead. for real. YEAH!! rock on baby!! :D
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From mls on April 23, 2008
loved it!!!! can't wait to read the next chapter!!!!! keep up the great work!!!!!
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From snnj11220 on April 17, 2008
God drama queen is so right. For real Sasuke needs to stop being emo for a moment and relax with his spoiled its all about me attitude. Its a typical case of girl in love with boy, boy in love with someone else, girl not happy about that, but in this case their all boys. Why the heck should I feel sorry for Sasuke when in the previous chapter with them he was thinking of devious ways to hurt Naruto and/or Itachi just because Itachi doesn't love him like that. And the crazy part about it, is that Naruto is Naruto, he is so freaking nice and everything to Sasuke that is kind of like really how could you hate him. Its not like Naru-chan originally asked to be put in that situation and taken away from his girlfriend (although I am sure he doesn't regret it now.) He doesn't even know Sasuke harbors the ill feelings towards him because he is just that type of person. I hope Naruto remains oblivous though, I think the realization might hurt him, he may not care for Sasuke like he does Itachi but he still cares for him. Really you can't force someone to love you, like you love them. Itachi offered him what he was able to and its up to Sasuke to accept it or not. To me Sasuke still has so much growing up to do.

And Naruto is so fucking hot in this chapter with all the dirty talk, I was like wow I am impressed. Loved the post sex cuddling scene with ItaNaru, heck I just love them in general. And lol at Kiba, he's such a freeloading slut but I just love his carefree attitude here. Its pretty refreshing. I am so sad that this story is ending soon because I love this story! I hope one day you write another ItaNaru fic.

So yeah once again another long review but really Sasuke was pissing me off here , it was like before he was okay but now he's treading in dangerous territory with that attitude of his and so I felt the need to rant. See you next chappie!
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From ninetailedfoxx852 on April 13, 2008
omg i love this story!! gaara thing with kiba was a little scary- but hott none the less!! and i love the three ways with itachi sasuke and naruto-- those are really hott X3 please update soon!
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From ANON - dyessie on April 11, 2008
im.. starting to hate.. naruto.. and feel sorry for sasuke.. btw, sasuke's right.. kiba's still alive.. wtf.. and sakura too!!!!?!? aww. too many unneccessary characters. i hope sasuke would feel *real* better nxt chapters..
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From mls on April 11, 2008
loved it!!!! can't wait to find out what happens with naruto, itachi and sasuke next, and kiba!!!! keep up the great work!!!!!
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From mrk33 on April 11, 2008
Jealous Sasuke is always a plus, besides Itachi needs Naruto. From what I gather
he keeps him sane, and he loves him. Enjoyed the chappie..........
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From HannaFO on April 11, 2008
I feel so sorry for Sasuke. He only want's his brother's love :( Funny ending though hehe poor Kiba :D:D
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From ValkyrieNiennaHelyanwe on April 10, 2008
damn. that was even better then the last one...damn. i cant stop saying it. i laugh at kiba.

and i feel bad for sasuke. geeze that was just mean itachi!
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From sweetciel on April 07, 2008
Wonderfully hot fic! My nose was bleeding the whole time ^_^ If you would like i could go over your un-betaed chapters for you. It could never hurt to have 2 betas could it?
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From snnj11220 on April 06, 2008
I've been gone for a minute because of school and when I signed on to AFF I was so upset to see that I missed like the past three chapters that were out. So that means I pretty much have to leave my thoughts in a nutshell. First things first I am so loving the progress with Itachi and Naruto. I think Itachi should upgrade Naruto's status since he already said he didn't really want to share him any more and realized he loved him. Then he shouldn't be thinking of Naruto as a pet anymore should he? Although I think Itachi has some business to take care of with the Snakes, to remind everyone especially those that have doubts like Tobi why he is the leader and is so powerful. I loved the scene when Kiba was caught it was really good, Naruto's reaction was priceless.

And speaking of scenes Sasuke better back off Itachi is taken! And speaking of taken I loved the Gaa/Kiba lemon it was definitely hot, and I hope in the future maybe you think about adding a Ita/Kiba/Naru one, I don't really see Kiba and Naruto doing anything like that but I really wanted to see Ita/Kiba get it on (Kiba so wants him) and I don't really think it would be fair if Naruto wasn't included. And while I love Kiba being a horny, manslut, masochist here and I really would not like to see that change, if you do think about a pairing for him I actually like the whole Gaa/Kiba thing. Kiba could be like Gaara's pet. And while I don't expect them to have a lovey dovey relationship with Gaara's personality I do think they would go pretty well together here, Kiba likes attention and Gaara, and Kiba could provide Gaara with a sexual outlet or whatever.

Also since Itachi is immortal where does that leave Naruto, since eventually one day he would have to die? And I definitely think the issue of what to do with Kiba now that he nows will be interesting, since they didn't kill him obviously they have to do something with him to make sure he doesn't 'talk' or whatever. I don't think they trust him like that for him to keep quiet or something and would take extra precautions. To be honest I think the only reason why Itachi hasn't threatened him yet was because of fear of hurting Naru and because he is still dealing with the fact that he loves him. Hmm maybe he could live with the two of them or maybe Kiba would be 'assigned' to someone. Anyway great chapters, this story just keeps on getting better and better!

****Edit**** IT WASN'T UNTIL I WROTE ALL OF THIS THAT I REMEMBERED THAT GAARA IS WITH KAKASHI ISN'T HE (THE FIC RED), BUT YOU KNOW WHAT I BLAME YOU FOR ALL THE GAARA/KIBANESS AFTER ALL YOU KNEW IN THE BEGINNING THAT I WANTED GAARA/KIBA AND YOU INCLUDED THEM IN HERE! SO IF YOU GET TO THE END OF THIS REVIEW AND YOU START TO THINK, 'AAH DIDN'T I MENTION THAT GAARA WAS ALREADY TAKEN' YOU HAVE NO ONE BUT YOURSELF TO BLAME FOR ALL THE IDEAS WITH THE TWO OF THEM GOING ON IN MY HEAD RIGHT NOW, LOL!
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From mrk33 on March 29, 2008
Are we headed towards Naruto becoming immortal? I hope so.
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