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Reviews for Aims and Dreams

By : vinternatt
  • From ANON - Anon on January 25, 2008
    (I review as I read.)
    Sorry I haven’t reviewed in a while, but I was on vacation and hadn’t dared to log on at my relatives’ house. I doubted they would approve.
    Chapter 3: Nice ending of the first segment.
    Great imagery of Sasuke. . . . That line again, Naruto? I liked Sasuke’s line right after that, by the way. . . . Wow, nice effect of Sasuke’s exhaustion catching up to him. . . . I like how Sakura’s healing Karin first. Um, little spelling error: “the young woman muttered in a chocked voice.” I think you mean “choked.” . . . “Don’t let your thoughts pull you down.” Good line. . . . I also like Sakura’s diagnosis of Sasuke. “Forcing a rest.” Nice.
    I like the sudden feeling of Naruto realizing that he’s bringing Sasuke back at last. . . . Oh, those last two paragraphs of this scene were cuuuute. “Was the bastard snuggling up to him?” Few could word it so nicely or lead up to it so well.
    Hee hee, “Much to the annoyance [. . .] make everything even more complicated.” Yup, that’s what they’re there for. ^^ . . . I’m really curious about what will happen to the group as well. I predict that Juugo will have a large part in this story. And I wonder if we haven’t seen the last of Suigetsu.
    (*sweat*) I forget what “Oyasumi nasai” means. . . . Nicely phrased. The imagery is great. . . . Interesting note the leave off with. I’m anxious for the next chapter. ^_^

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  • From biiisti on January 11, 2008
    It looks very promising, well see what this turn out to be. I'll be waiting next chapter.

    Btw, i didn't even notice that english isn't your motherlanquaqe :) Good work.
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  • From bluegenjutsu on January 11, 2008
    Wonderful story!! I love how they are kept in character and that Naruto has Sasuke back in the village again. Thanks for sharing this story! :)
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 17, 2007
    Hey, thanks for the note. Yeah, I know it fits Sasuke's character; that's fine.
    So far, so good. I'm afraid I don't have much to say. But about corrections . . . how come you spelled Juugo's name "Yuugo"?
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  • From leanne on December 17, 2007
    Good beginning.
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  • From vanessaclarke on December 16, 2007
    Wow! English isn't your first language? You're doing a fabulous job! I never would have known. You shouldn't sell yourself short like that. Be proud Baby! Anyway I really like it so far and I hope to see more soon. ^.^
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 29, 2007
    English isn't your first language? Could've fooled me, that was pretty good.
    About the story so far... I like it. I don't go for angst too much, so I hope this story turns out happier than that. But it was a good start. Definitely.
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