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Reviews for love is blind

By : vampireslayermoon
  • From ANON - Anon on November 05, 2007
    WTF is this? are you sure you didn't mess up with some html codes? sometimes the site cuts reviews and chapters for some problem with html codes without warnings or else.

    if it was what you originally planned to write, that's quite confusing, it's not clear who is talking and who is he talking to, there are no commas nor periods nor other punctuation marks, and personally I didn't understand a fuck about what you meant to write.

    Try to change it, if there are some signs in the point the chapter is cut, try to eliminate them to see if the html codes are screwing up the upload and search 4 a beta.

    good luck

    hak
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  • From KimiKumiko on November 05, 2007
    ..................I'm not quite sure what you hope to accomplish here, but........ I feel that since no one else has done it, I figured I'd tell you.....

    One) This story of yours is only five lines long.... Not really much of a story unless you were going for poetry or maybe a haiku. If so then you should give fair warning. But I have a feeling this isn't poetry.

    Two) The five or so lines that you do have here.......are kinda weak and confusing. Are you trying to suggest a story to someone perhaps? I don't mean to be rude. Just wondering.

    Three) I'm very interested to know what you had originally hoped to write here. There aren't many stories with a pairing such as this.

    Well, now... I think I covered all the basics without sounding like a school teacher. Whenever you fix this I'd be glad to read it and review again. For now......Good luck. And if you need any help or want any help just drop me a message or e-mail. Can't promise to come-a-running, but I'll make a quick tumble towards ya. ^ ^
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