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Reviews for Measuring Up

By : ursweetheartless
  • From ANON - Anon on July 03, 2008
    (I review as I read.)

    Nice opening paragraph. I like how it sets the stage. . . . I like how you portray his bitterness. . . . Ohhh, he was in luuuv, wasn’t he? . . . . I love how you portrayed Sasuke’s worship of his brother. . . . Wow, he was damn near choking himself! For a minute there the words sounded really erotic, and I was thinking, “Wait, wasn’t he touching his neck?” Not many people can mingle pleasure in danger, and here he was, practically unaware of it. . . . Love how suddenly comes the realization that he’s turned on. . . . Love the dark vulnerable feel of Sasuke’s POV. I haven’t read too many fics that actually describe it as directly as this does. It’s got a lot more dimension to it. . . . This is what I call “dark poetry”. :heart: . . . . Sasuke’s kind of a masochist, isn’t he? An emotional masochist. . . . I also like how this smoothly turned into a fantasy. There’s not a definite line of distinction indicating where he started fantasizing. And it makes me wonder if he and Itachi had ever done anything before the massacre. . . . Man, that’s so creepy how he unconsciously keeps choking himself. I keep trying to imagine what it must be like for a nurse if she were to run in here and see Sasuke choking himself with his own hand, and with a faraway look on his face as his other hand strokes himself. They’d probably bring out the straightjackets. . . . And he’s not forcing the fantasy; the fantasy seems to have a mind of its own. He just let go of his neck, and already he’s falling back into the fantasy. It’s eerie. I wonder if this is what it’s like for some of the more mentally unstable. It keeps describing what Itachi’s hands are doing . . . and it kind of melds in there that it’s Sasuke’s own hands that’s doing it. Very smooth. :heart: . . . . He has vivid fantasies, doesn’t he? No wonder his expression is so faraway most of the time. ^^ . . . . Ooh. (*shiver*) Was that fantasy brought on deliberately by Itachi, or was Itachi just observing from the sidelines? I wonder. . . .

    This is going on my Rec List too. ^_^ :heart:
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  • From kakashizgirl on March 22, 2008
    This was very VERY good. Very well-written, and so completely believable. Sasuke would do this. He really would. And then Itachi on the windowsill watching. Nice touch. I really enjoyed this story!!
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  • From Dream2010 on November 04, 2007
    I really enjoyed reading it, and wanted more.
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  • From BrucesGirl on November 03, 2007
    I was really pleased with this story. There's been a sudden influx of shit on AFF (go figure) but I was pleasantly surprised with your story. The emotion was very palatable, not to mention the fact that your usage of the English language far exceeds most of the kids on this site. I'm really very impressed.

    My favorite part is how Sasuke associates pain with Itachi. It's even a canon point that no matter how Sasuke remembers Itachi, there is always some sort of pain involved, emotional, physical, or spiritual. I also think that's why Kakashi seems to be so careful of Sasuke...because he understands his pain.

    I think that you should join Y!Gallery too. I think that it would be good for you to meet some of the authors on there and get into the community. Y!Gallery is committed to some of the best art and fanfiction possible. If you're there, you should hang out with us.

    http://yaoi.y-gallery.net - Try it out.
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  • From MibuWolf on November 03, 2007
    Wow... that was just... wow! You are an amazing writer, ya know? Great Job. I hope you get over your angsty moment and feel better, yeah?
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