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Reviews for To Love and be Loved

By : ringpop
  • From ANON - Lady Kaze on November 03, 2007
    First, you shouldn't demand reviews for you to post a new chapter. It makes people think that you only write for the reviews and nothing else. You usually get very few actual reviews that will help you improve your writing or offer suggestions.

    Second, it really throws off the flow of the story to have the inserts of things like umbrella-ella-ella-ey-ey-ey and the over exaggeration of Hinata's stutter. You don't want to be grouped with those humor fics or one of those 'randomness' stories that are so prevalent on fanfiction.net.

    This story does have potential, but you should really think about cutting down on the playfulness if you really want your work to be taken seriously. One thing you may consider is just finding someone to bounce ideas off of to make sure that the story flows or outline what you want to happen in the chapter, maybe a few things that you want a character to say and then go from there.

    Seriously, I'm not trying to be mean, but as I said, this story has a lot of potential and its even greater that you're making this mpreg because they have the potential to be filled with warm fuzzy moments and just overall cuteness. Please, just consider it. If you want a good mpreg to check out just to see if that helps you develop your flow, you should read 'Below Zero' by Trollmia or the unfinished story called 'Self Reliance' by Imbrium Iridum.

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  • From Mignonne422 on November 03, 2007
    That was so beautiful, poignant really.

    I loved this last chapter. I love how you're developing the Gaara/Neji attraction bit by bit. I love Sasuke being Sasuke, the king of denial. I loved the last line.

    I can't wait for more. Lovely!
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  • From ANON - RSlover on November 03, 2007
    Awww you are such an angel
    you didn't have to do that,I greatly appreciate it ^_^
    This story is so adorable I'm excited for the next chapters
    I just love how Naruto and Sasuke act around eachother
    It's absolutely the best and with your creative unique style, it just makes me crave for more
    Keep up the awesome work angel you're doing an awesome job
    and remember never give up, especially with the talent you have
    you can go very far and I see a bright future for you =) (Lots of cookies filled with love for you)
    Look forward to the next chapter
    Ja'ne
    oh and what is it you would like for us to vote on? ^_^^_^
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  • From lexjamandme on November 03, 2007
    Ah, so cute! Poor little stunned Naruto. I wouldn't be able to look away from a half dressed Sasuke either. In fact, I dare anyone to try. ;)
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  • From masteryoshi88 on November 03, 2007
    Sorry about my last comment. Its not a bad fic.
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  • From KoibitoFemme on November 03, 2007
    Yup you would be right I am the infamous yuri beta that somehow got suckered into becoming a temp writer. I am really liking it so far but don't forget your other stories
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  • From ANON - Minako on November 03, 2007
    Awww, Naru-chan gets shy with Uchiha! LOL, slamming the door on his did get a good reaction from him! Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - DesperadoSweetie on November 03, 2007
    So Sasuke has a crush on Neji but he is starting to think about Naruto. I wonder why he never really noticed him before he heard those girls talking about how cute Naruto was. Well you did mention that he was attracted to him when he first met him, but I mean he didn't really pay much attention to him until then. Could it be because he thought he had a thing for Neji?

    Hmm, I must say, I'm glad that he isn't going to be with Neji because I just can't seem to see those two together. To me that is way to boring. Not that I have any thing against Neji at all.

    And well Naruto it seems always had a thing for Sasuke. I look forward to those two getting together. Will this have a timeskip or will they be together at their age now?

    I really like this, and I look forward to your next update.
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  • From ANON - unknown person on November 03, 2007
    Hey, I started reading your fanfic and it sounds so interesting. Sasuke is right, Naruto is kawaii. I'm glad someone made a fanfic like this (been thinking of making one with the cute ears and tail) but never had the time. Please update soon. I'll bookmarking this
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 03, 2007
    Im a general liker of your fics, and youve got a promising start, so youve got yourself a reader for ths one should you choose to continue!
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  • From blueh on November 03, 2007
    T.T Did I make you angry? I wasn't listed in the nice ones. So I'm so sorry if I angered you. I really like your story. And the ears and the tails. Now, males can give birth too. So happy. And Sasuke is having an interest in Naruto. Wee!
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  • From ANON - animelover on November 02, 2007
    Oh, this is so cute!!!!!! And I absolutely love your humor. you know, the "by the way, did i mention both males and females can have kits?" thing; oh and sasuke's self talk when he's checking naruto out. hehehehe! so is this going to be a sasunaru with some nejisasu mixed in for angst? geez, i hope so. LOL! i'm down and all that with the waff but ya can't have a sasunaru without a touch of angst. awwww c'mon, just a little? oooh, and maybe some lemonade with that? ;-)

    well i anxiously await chapt 3; drop me a line when it's up and ready! see ya!
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  • From nyan3 on November 02, 2007
    Moarrr? *purr* =^.^=
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  • From MissMayumi on November 02, 2007
    Zee Zee! update!!

    Or I'll kill you!! *death stare*

    Jokin!! I love youuu!!

    xDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
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  • From solitare1 on November 02, 2007
    This could be so totally interesting. The different directions this could go is fantastic. I hope this is going to be a full length story don't shorten it for anything!! Oh the angst!!
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