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From smilebig on January 23, 2008
So cute
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From MichiTheThird on January 22, 2008
"Annnnd you just killed it." Naruto looked around like he was looking for something "Yeahhp�It's gone. You just had to go and kill the moment with your deathly death, didn't you?"

- lmao! I will remember those words for many, many years to come! XD

"It doesn't matter! Because yes, I am staying with Sasuke! In fact!" He sat up, yelling into the receiver. "We're dating now!"

- *squealing of doom* Eeeeeee! *coughs* Right, you didn't hear that...*scratches back of neck*

-Nuuuu! I throw Naruto's "you killed the moment" phrase right back at him!! :( Gah! He shoulda just said "yeah, we ARE going out now, AND what?" but nuuuu..

-Oh! OMG, you poor baby! Poor Sasuke! I'm sure Naruto didn't mean that when you were younger, he just panicked!!

-ARGH! I can't take it anymore!! D: It hurts, Naruto...*points to heart* It hurts DEEP! Poor Sasuke! Don't worry, he'll come around somehow! ;o; I hope and pray and beg...
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From ANON - animelover on January 22, 2008
awww, you weren't kidding about the WAFF were you? LOL! That was so sweet, and my fave line "he wanted it all....the full package.....But why does he only have the wrapping paper?" was sublime! i mean, who hasn't felt like THAT at least once?

yet another update worth waiting for ... and i can't wait for sasunaru to get together and make the sparks fly! lol!
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From nawatia on January 22, 2008
Just found your story - Love it - need another chapter now please.
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From ANON - Anon on January 22, 2008
1) Please have a point. I can't stress this enough people. If you think something sucks, there has to be a reason. If you have no point then there's no point in reading your review.[X](Check.)

- I'm glad you think I have a point in my rant

2) Post some literary venture of your own before you attempt a flame. Think of it as your resume. We need to see some credentials damn it! You can't just walk in off the street! How do we know if you're qualified to be making this judgment? We can't let people go around writing these things all willy-nilly. (If nothing else, it's bad form not give us something we can flame you back for.)[ ]

- not checked? are you sure you read the right hakai, dear? 'cause I have not one, not two, but actually three flamable fictions all for you. and MINE WASN'T A FLAME, I was just displaying my annoyance for a behaviour I consider rather annoying, that's all.

you went to Hakai's page, with the capital 'H'. I'm hakai, spelled all in 'little' letters. So, if you want to mock people, be sure to mock the real ones; because now the people that should laugh of me are now laughing of you. ^_^

3) Check your spelling and grammar. There's nothing worse then making a bunch of grammatical errors right in the middle of telling someone else what's wrong with their writing. You lose all credibility. Yeah... You hear that?... They're laughing at you! [ ](Whoo baby, you need to work on this one.)

- Oh god dear, sorry if my grammar isn't that good but English is not my first language! let's see... I will apologize for my english when you will answer to my reviews in Italian. or Spanish, if you prefere. I can speak French too, if you like it better.

what foreign languages do you speak? not trying to offend you obviously, but politeness would ask to not remark grammar mistakes of people who are not native speakers. If you wrote me a sentence in italian, I wouldn never be that mean to mock you for mistaking something...

4) Do it with style. You've heard the saying, I'm sure. 'If a thing is worth doing it's worth doing well.' If you're actually going to take the time to cut someone down, the least you could do is get their attention. A simple 'duh... it sucks George' is not gonna cut it. Seriously. If you intend to be mean, then at least try to come off like the villain, and not like one of his nameless henchmen. (think scathing)[ ](Didn't quite hit the mark on this one bud...I'm still smiling....@ least make frown a little.)

- As I already said, I was NOT trying to be mean. I'm sorry if it seemed that way.

5) Read summary warnings. Trust me. You don't want to go ripping on people for content that you were clearly warned about. That honestly only makes you look like an idiot. Wait, what's that?... Oh, they're laughing at you again! [This doesn�t count...but we�ll give you a check just for the hell of it! X]

- To be honest, I usually don't like Mpreg, but you put the warning, I read it and went on with the chapters anyway, because I liked your stuff. and I didn't flame you for this,so I deserved the check XD

6) Throw in some amusing word play. When you step into the arena baby, you want to show off you're skills. A truly good flame entertains the crowd. That way people don't just plain hate you outright. You want them to almost look forward to more of your acerbic wit.[ ]

- well, since I know more or less just the english I lerned in my high school, it's pretty obvious that I can't have a proper use of the slang and throw puns and other stuff into my review. I DON'T KNOW SLANG.

this 'light argument' is going too low... let's end this here.

let me say just that mocking my english skills had been a really mean thing from you. I'd like to see you writing half a page in italian. just half a page.

and go look the right page, I have literatures for you to flame, do what you prefere.

bye.

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From DesperadoSweetie on January 22, 2008
As much as I love this story, I just have to confess that this chapter really confused me to no end. I thought that Naruto loved Sasuke and always wanted to be with Sasuke. So why did he run away? Man I just want to cry because Naruto is being a really ass of himself right now. He is making everything so confusing for us LOL.

I really want to slap Naruto and that doesn't really happen much with me. But seriously, what the heck is going on?

I guess I will just have to wait for those answers. But my heart bleeds for Sasuke. Poor guy just wants to be with the only one he really loves and can't seem to catch a break. Not fair at all.

Oh well, I look forward to your next update. :-D
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From Sayuri on January 22, 2008
Yays, I love this story. They're so cute with ears and tails ^__^
I just wonder why Naruto's crushing/rejecting Sasuke when he loves him himself. And I think a head-over-heels Sasuke is adorable, I love stories like that. But poor guy, he's so utterly in love yet Naruto is making it so hard for him.

Can't wait to see the next chapter, hope you reveal more of their past.
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From sakuyalove on January 21, 2008
By your demand I am reviewing. It's going good and I like the story but I'd like if you updated more often.
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From spoon10488 on January 21, 2008
very cute chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on January 21, 2008
sorry, how many times are you going to edit this story before you add another chapter? it must be the fourth time I open your story and read everytime the same chapter, and forgive me if I say it, it's starting to be annoying. you have had the twenty review you demanded, (since I'm complaining, I'll say even that demanding review had been a very childish idea, that doesn't fit you, whatever excuse of 'scheduling9 you're using, but this is your story, so you decide. in this way, however, you took away my willing to review your stories so probably it has been a little counterproductive, but still...), so why do you keep on editing to put your story in the first page? add a chapter OR stop editing... this is really strating to be annoying to me.

and since you're one of my favourite artists, (I talked about you in my ANs too,) don't answer like you use to do with people who criticize you, attacking me. I'm not criticizing your way of writing, (yeah, yeah, I know you're oversensitive of your writing), this is a criticism, expressed in a calm and collected way, of your behaviour. it was pretty obvious you were editing your chapters to put the story in the first page to make your story have more visibility, THEN, to get the damn 20 review per chapter; and this was very annoying for me, since I'm sure it has been at least four times I saw the same chapter and I'm beginning to loose my temper. I hope you'll add new chapters soon or stop editing, because I really like your fics, but I'm starting to loose the willing to read them.

if you want to, scream at me like you usually do to people who dares to criticize you. but if you want an advice, don't do it: it wouldn't be a fine figure for you. just take in the criticism and answer or not.

I really don't care.
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From DesperadoSweetie on January 21, 2008
Ahh shucks, I love this story and I thought this was a new chapter. Not that I am complaining at all because it is just way to cute.

I know that they both want to be with each other, so why can't they just tell the other that they would like to be together. But I have to say they are so cute.

I am truly looking forward to your next update. Soon I hope. :-D
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From hisoka on January 21, 2008
youd think theyd go for each other they practically confessed their feelings for one another.hope you can update soo
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From MichiTheThird on January 10, 2008
Gudammit!! Nuuuuuuuu! What are they going to decide on!? I hope Kiba and Neji STAY together and leave Naruto and Sasuke to themselves. T-T Guys, just FORGET the whole "friends with benefits" bit and become an official couple already!! >< I mean come on...it's been a long time and you two STILL haven't figured out you were meant for each other? Come on!
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From fangirlqueen on January 06, 2008
I'm absolutly in love with this story especially since i love cat ears ( i have a pair) and the way you portray sasuke is so cute and uke and naruto is all sexy and slutty but a warm non std kinda slutty.
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From ANON - fluffy_cloud on January 06, 2008
ehhh.... is this relationship possible? kind of difficult from my point of view. then they started to be jealous at each other. hmm.. i don't know. is there any chance even tiny measurement they both have feelings to each other? although i couldn't imagine naruto with kiba and sasuke with neji (because i'm a sasunaru die-hard-fan, that's why ^^), but i seriously do hope they will end up together. you better, or i'll ditch your story. you hear me?! ;P
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