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Reviews for Who are you and what have you done with Sasuke?

By : knize16

From moodysavage on March 31, 2014
You never finished!!! And it's such a great story!!! Though I would hate it if Sasuke was forced to really have sex with a customer so maybe it's better this way.
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From bloodshound on September 10, 2012
This is great. I'm a sucker for a Cinder-fella story. Will naru get to have his way she sas Kouya? And will naru be able to stand back and let 'her' do the job?
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From ANON - Quinn on September 09, 2012
Good start
But why is Naruto weaker than Sasuke?
That is a old cliche, and totaly wrong.

Sasuke may have had a head start, because Naruto was sabotaged, but in sheer power and potential, Sasuke is an little lake, where Naruto is the wide sea.
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From ANON - G on September 08, 2012
This is pretty entertaining. I wouldn't have predicted the stuff with the mission. I thought they'd stick around Konoha and there would be trouble with Neji. But I'm surprised that they had sex so quickly, and as men. I can see the logic in wanting to get some experience because of the mission, but Sasuke is supposed to be having sex as a woman, so it would make more sense for him to give that form a test-run. (There's the hymen issue, him getting used to being penetrated, etc.)
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From Ihadadream on March 30, 2008
I love this story! Please continue! it's been soooo long without an update!! I wanna know what happens next, please???
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From ANON - Kang on March 07, 2008
Holy crap, I loved it! I expected this story to follow the typical cliche plot devices and extreme MISUNDERSTANDINGS (o noe!) that plague most gender-swap fics. So I was pleasantly surprised when Kouya came and revealed herself. Gee, imagine that, Sasuke demonstrated his trust in Naruto! You'd think all those lovey dovey fics out there might do something as simple and sexy as allowing the strength of their bond to shine through like this one does.

I also really enjoy how Sasuke seems to rather obviously be the one with self-awareness of his crush on Naruto. I love it when Sasuke is a bossy bottom--uh, I mean, a man who knows what he wants. He strikes me as having been the one on top 'cuz it was his first time, and Naruto will flip him over and have his way with the boy once he catches on to the hang of it. Poor Naruto has always been a little slow on the uptake. X) The sex scene was great, very action packed and descriptive, while avoiding flowery euphemisms or spending too much attention on "magical feelings". *thumbs up* Great job!

Hmm, I can't help but point out Kouya will still have her hymen and surely that would be a give-away at a brothel. Naruto should take care of that for her in the morning. >:d I'm not really into het, but you do a nice job keeping Sasuke's character still his own, even when female, so I'd like to see a Naruto x Kouya scene. ♥ Anyway, this is good shit. Hope to see updates from you soon! :D
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From nyan3 on March 06, 2008
Mmm.... Really nicely written lemon, I liked.
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From Revine on March 06, 2008
*holds a tissue to her nose* Well for being a tad bit insecure about your lemon, I'd say you did a damn good job with it! I really love this story, I was honestly surprised that they progressed so quickly, but even though I was surprised, it wasn't in a bad way at all. I enjoyed his story a lot I hope to see more of it soon. I think this idea you have is very good and I love the style of writing. Lol at first I didn't think it would be too good because, well honestly, the title isn't the best...but I fell in love with the plot, the style of writing, and now the lemon scene. I really do hope you update soon, but I don't at all blame you if it takes a while because life seems to have it's ways of interefering... and I think I mispelled that word, oh well. Anyway I enjoyed it very much and I'll be check out your other stories as well. Good luck with your schooling and hope everything goes well for you!
Ja Ne,
Revine
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From ANON - 1 on March 06, 2008
wouldn't make more sense for Sasu to bottom or be a girl when they had sex sense thats what the mission calls for.

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From Deandraquin on March 06, 2008
Hi, love the story and this chapter. I think you did a good job. Most first times are not perfect and you put it just right, not horrible and not perfect. So again, great chapter.
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From ANON - WhenYouSayYouLoveME on March 06, 2008
I totally loved it! I thought Sasuke would be Uke ... but there is tons of time! ^_^ You did a wonderful job on your first lemon! I offer praise for a great bang! ^O^ I'm so dirty >.
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From ANON - Anon on March 05, 2008
Good job on the lemon! It was great! But what about tomorrow when Sasuke becomes Kouya again? Will you let there be a lemon between them? And what about the mission? Will Naruto really let anyone else touch Sasuke other than him? Hurry with the next chapter!!
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From ANON - Anon on March 05, 2008
(I review as I read.)
Chapter 7: Can�t really blame Naruto for being pissed. Love Sasuke�s point about why (s)he didn�t tell. . . . Erm: �Hmph. Then why the second date? [. . .]� You used single quotes for that paragraph; does that mean he�s just thinking it? . . . �Why do I get the feeling that she is trying to get rid of me?� So Naruto thinks of Sasuke as a �she� when he�s Kouya, huh? He still doesn�t see Kouya as Sasuke? . . . . Love the sentence about the flames in Sasuke�s eyes. I�ve got a thing for those types of images of eyes & light. :heart: . . . . Hm? What�s in his hands, I wonder? . . . . Yep, there�s the question everyone wonders in these cases: �What�s it like?� ^^ . . . . Okay, I like how Sasuke explains the difference between his male and female sides, but it seems kind of strange that he�d be talking about that out loud. I mean, I guess I think it would sound a little more reluctant or something. No biggie. . . . (*snicker*) Love it when Naruto thinks, �Good thing I don�t like the teme. I�m not gay.� Uh-huh, sure, Naruto. ^^ . . . . That�d make an interesting picture: Sasuke lying on his back, reading The Art of Seduction. . . . Cute, cuddles. ^_^ :heart:
(*giggle*) Love how Sasuke�s all content, then he realizes why, and gets his guard up. ^^ . . . . Also, I love Sasuke�s total focus on the book he�s reading; pure concentration.
Err, little whoopsie: You put quotes at the beginning of �The old woman looked like she would object further.� . . . . So? What�s wrong with the room? Aren�t a lot of motel rooms like that? . . . . Oh boy, the �two people, one bed� situation; those are fun. ^^ . . . . Whoa, Naruto quiet for 20 minutes? Wow, that�s impressive. o_o . . . . Love the part when Sasuke closes the book and gives Naruto the dead-serious look and starts explaining. Nice effect. . . . Oh man, that�s really mean of Tsunade to make Sasuke do something like this. I mean, flirting and seducing is one thing, but if it�s something else . . . �_� . . . . The characterization in this dialogue is pretty good. . . . Interesting chain of thought that led to �experience.� . . . . Naruto honestly has no clue what the favor is. . . . Love the intensity of those past paragraphs that make the suspense building up to the kiss. . . . Oh man, and that description of Sasuke! (*hearts in eyes*) . . . . Interesting. I wonder if Sasuke really wants to do Naruto, or is he just practicing his seduction skills. Maybe both. Either way, they might be working! ^^ . . . . (*snicker*) LOVE this dialogue! �Your first time should be with someone special.� �You once referred to me as your brother.� �That would be incest.� �Good thing we�re not brothers. I�d have to kill you.� XD . . . . Love how Naruto�s testing his desire. . . . Love Sasuke�s bluntness and Naruto�s hesitance. . . . Awesome depiction of the kiss progressing into something wild. Love the description of male instinct. And ooh, good one! �Perfect opposites that repelled as strongly as they attracted one another.� Excellent! =D . . . . Interesting little touch about not leaving marks. . . . Mmm, I always love the idea of Sasuke being quietly aroused. :heart: . . . . That�d also make a good picture -- the position they have exactly when Sasuke flips them over. . . . Yeah, he should not have been surprised -- so, what, is Sasuke like hard to get up or something? �_o . . . . Okay, I like how you said Naruto was �exposing� himself, but I think you might want to use a different word for �vulnerability�; it sounds to girly-uke to me. (*sweat*) . . . . �Half-hard?� After all this, he�s only half-hard?? . . . . Love Sasuke�s determination. But how is he doing this with such ease? I mean, genius or not, sexual stuff doesn�t count when it comes to learning experiences! �_� . . . . Love the way you describe Naruto�s thoughts during this. . . . Love the detail of Sasuke�s �daring� actions. . . . Love the paragraph starting with, �Naruto took this as a moment [. . .]� . . . . (*snort*) �That�s an exit only, buddy.� XD Great wording! XD . . . . LOL! �Aah, that�s better. I like this.� XD . . . . I thought guys don�t like teeth involved during, um, that. (*blush*) >_> . . . . Love how Sasuke�s trying to make it easy for Naruto, but it�s not totally lovey-dovey and, at the same time, not cold-bastard-let�s-get-this-over-with or grrr-hurry-up. It�s hard to get that just right feeling in here, but you did a good job; I like this calm, cool and patient Sasuke. =) . . . . Hee hee. �I am relaxing.� ^^ . . . . (*giggle*) Love how they�re trying to talk through intercourse. And the dialogue�s funny. ^^ . . . . �Long, stubborn bangs� is totally right. I love �em. . . . LOLLLL, I LOVE the ending dialogue! XD So cuuuute! ^_^ :heart:
Hell, no I wasn�t disappointed! If anything, I think this is the best chapter you�ve written! (Not necessarily because of the lemon, although it was awesome, but you seemed to have improved your writing.) . . . . Wait, seriously? You�re first lemon? That�s pretty damn good.
I hope you keep updating this! ^_^ (Wow, longest review I�ve done for this story. o_o)
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From susanna on March 05, 2008
Liked it - both the lemon and the rest. (There's few lemon that's not clich�d, but yours had some quite original moments.) Also Sasuke asking Naruto for a favor was great - and then Naruto finds himself as the bottom. (Guess he insists on changing roles soon.)
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From Dragon7 on March 05, 2008
The lemon scene did not make any sense. Sasuke is going to be top at some point if female Sasuke is going to be working at a whore house. I thought the whole point of them sleeping together was for Sasuke to loose his virginity to someone he knew and cared for. If you just wanted to make Naruto the uke then you really should rewrite the part were they're taking about were the mission is going to take place and Sasuke job for the mission so it makes more sense why Sasuke is not the uke. Other then that for this to be your first time writing a lemon you did really well.
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