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Reviews for Best Laid Plans

By : inediblefrogs

From ANON - eve4mem on September 20, 2007
I like it I really do. I've only read some of your fics in the line mostly the ones that involve Iruka. I love uke Iruka and the emotioness that is him. And while I do like the Kakashi/Iruka pairing Kakashi makes me very angry in your fics O_O He's a total horny jerk and doesn't deserve someone like Iruka. I like this fic cuz it's nice to see Iruka attempting to get some back bone but on the other hand it bothers me that everyone is in on trying to change him and his views. I just hate the feeling of him being manipulated and helpless. Though I like that you choose Izumo for Iruka's little experience he seems the less harmless out of the rest and someone that Iruka can relate too in a way. I just can't help but hope Kakashi gets some kind of punishment for being the selfish bastard he is >_< Great fic you're making me go through so many emotions and also keeping it juicy with the citrus ^_^
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From ANON - Ebaka on September 17, 2007
god, that was an amazingly hot chapter! *drool*...i so loved all the small details and insinuations))) ok, i'll try to organise my chaotic thoughts right now...

kakashi - it seems he's discovering a brand new feeling, seeing the person who belonged to him only, who had always been a strong supporter of monogamy, getting so expertly sucked by one of his friends (who hasn't ever sucked kakashi himself before XD)))...what could this be...hmmm jealousy?...

iruka - well, i'm glad he finally got rid of that stick up his ass and is now discovering the pleasure of cheating XD))) as a matter of fact, i think, iruka's cheating even more, that kakashi has ever did to him...people don't usually make impersonal sex (or oral sex) so emotional or intimate (with all those tender touches and kisses)...just my thought, but it's no wonder, kakashi's feeling kind of uncomfortable...i don't think he has ever been so close with his *caugh* partners)))

izumo - god, how i loved that freaky littly exhebitionist! hoping to get more public, throwing glances at kakashi, while pleasuring iruka...he IS a perfect person for that complicated plan)))

shikamaru - damn! i loved that piece...i knew, shikamaru was a real pervert behind that lazy and indifferent exterior XD)))

ibiki - yeah, who's the smart ass here))) it feels like he's going to fulfill his own best laid plans with those three confused shinobi)))

god, you're amazing as always! i loved, loved, LOVED it!))) even though i'm going through an iruka-hating phase XD...but i love the way you put all the characters! can't wait to read the next chapter...
love!
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From ANON - u no me on September 16, 2007
OMG That was fucking HAWT.

UPDATE SOON KTHXBYE
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From llyoung on September 16, 2007
Forgot to mention in my previous review that I was glad you brough Shika into the story. Hopefully we will get to see more of him in the future - he certainly seemed to like what he was seeing. Thanks again for a great story.
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From kakashizgirl on September 16, 2007
Oh, oh, oh. I forgot--Shikamaru licking his lips while he was walking by their little public display of affection...very hot! I like Shikamaru he reminds me of Kakashi (lazy genius).
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From kakashizgirl on September 16, 2007
Shik, you rock my world everytime...Kakashi is such a bad bad boy. He needs a good whipping. I think I see where this is headed and it serves Kakashi right. It is my sincere goal to one day be able to write smut like you--very artistically written. I so love everything you write. Voyeuristic static--heh. You have made Izumo into one loveable perverted little character. Sweeeet.
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From LindyStar on September 16, 2007
*Squirms in seat* Oh I love this! I love what you've done with the characters. I don't know why people get so bent out of shape if you don't adhere to the 'canon' I take the view that the characters are like actors, and fanfic allows you to cast them in whatever role you want to see them play. And, just because you like certain actors, certain character roles or certain situations doesn't mean you can't open your mind to new posibilities. Anyway, I love Shikamaru in this chapter. And Jealous!Kakashi is nice too. He's finally getting a taste of his own medicine.

I'm still a bit confused about the Sasuke thing. Did Kakashi and Sasuke have something going before Sasuke defected to Sound (I think that's right)? If so, when did Sasuke tell Kakashi to figure things out? Is Kakashi still hooking up with him on the sly? And what does the tape Iruka gave Kakashi have to do with Sasuke leaving?
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From DuosAngel on September 15, 2007
Wow, I just want to kick Kakashi's ass right now. How could he get Iruka drunk (because I know that was phase one of his plan) and lead him into all this? What does he plan to say when Iruka's sober: "You can't get to upset about this anymore, look what you were willing to do last night."? I almost hated Ibiki until he showed up there at the end. *Sigh* You said at the end of Conversations that this story would b angsty but so for it hasn't been. Does that mean we'll be getting a very sad ending?
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From yaoiismyantidrug on September 15, 2007
Oh, Kakashi, you manipulative bastard...^_^ Love it. Izumo really was the perfect choice, wasn't he? But I'm thinking maybe Kakashi hadn't counted on his sweetness... Yay for Ibiki showing up at just the right/wrong moment!

Kakashi's plan intrigues me. There are a lot of ways it could go wrong... and it seems like it is already. I'm sensing that it might just backfire on him, or complicate what it was supposed to simplify. It might also teach him more about himself and his feelings, which would be good, him being the mixed-up guy that he is.^_^

Oh... public sexin... *drool* I loved Izumo and Iruka sneakily groping each other down the street. And then making out with Kakashi watching... the interaction between Kakashi and Izumo was very well done, the way their voyeuristic/exhibitionist tendencies complimented each other, and the way Kakashi *knew* they would. ^_^ And - oral in public - very, very hot. I want a sexy little 'Zumo of my very own!

Hmm... I'm wondering just how far they're going to go before they get somewhere a little more private. Also wondering just how far they're going to go, period. And how will Ibiki's arrival change the game, I wonder? This is great, Shikyaku!
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From llyoung on September 15, 2007
I was pretty positive that Kakashi had some sort of plan with Ibiki (hope it actually backfires on Kakashi in some way).
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From realnobiki on September 13, 2007
excellent, fabulous, and terrifyingly true-to-life. it seems iruka was totally set up, but for good or bad? izumo's inner monologue had me laughing and squirming because it's really amazing what you can justify to yourself at the right moment. can't wait to read more *mwahahaha*
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From MikaSamu on September 11, 2007
A wonderful demonstration of Ibiki's specialty. A new perspective for Iruka to consider, but I love that you have not let it be that simple a matter. Now with Kakashi's grand entrance, I can't wait to find out what happens next.
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From BrucesGirl on September 11, 2007
I love it. The POV is really good, not ot mention the fact that the sotry just makes me giggle. The whole awkwardness of it makes me smile, and I love how Iruka fights his exclusivity and wants to find another way to make himself happy. I think that Kakashi doesn't mean to make him miserable. I think that Kakashi-bastard just is so fucked up in his own mind, he can't see Iruka's pain.

Anyway, great job... I like how you made Ibiki reluctant and aloof.

Bravo, love! Bravo!
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From Hen on September 11, 2007
YOU CAN'T END IT THERE!

You're evil.

Update soon?
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From kakashizgirl on September 10, 2007
Okay, I haven't read this one yet, but I am going to in the next few hours, but I just had to give a word of encouragement. I read the little notes at the bottom of the page, and dude! Your writing is a freaking art form, and it inspires me probably as much if not more than anything I've ever read! This stuff is not easy to write, people think smut, oh any fool can write smut, but it's not true, it takes a special gift to be able to write it and make it where people can become part of it like any excellent storytelling. You have the gift. Hey, anyone who makes you feel like crap about ANY of your stories, they don't know what the hell they are talking about...your stories ROCK period. That's my personal opinion, if it counts for anything. I will review the story after I read it, but I can already tell you I will give it a RAVE REVIEW!!!!
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