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By : dutsada
  • From LadyRonin on September 17, 2007
    i so liked this chapter. it was great the way you had kakshi and jiraiyaswitch his clothes. when i read that i was rolling. i can't wait to see the way you descibe the different outfits (if you are so inclined) because i can't wait to see them. i feel like an idiot for missing the thing about gaara and neiji after ereading the first chapter. a couple hours had passed before i read the first and reviewed so please forgive me. but also just because gaara is hooked up doesn't mean that naruto can't attract another demon holder especially with him being in the heat and no limited to the village. are all of the members of akatsuki dead or just itachi and more than likely kisame. did sasuke ever form hebi and if he did i think it would be interesting if suigetsu showed up and even might be competition for either sasuke or naruto although i choose sasuke but that's because i think that possessive sasuke is the shit. not to leave sasuke out of the jealous games if say pein was to show up or deidara maybe as itachi's lover looking to make the past live on with his beloved younger brother wouldn't be bad. how about having a plant molest naruto. i saw this one with braches that was touching people in places that shouldn't technically be touched by salad. that's a real picture to see getting you salad tossed by salad. random animals attacking sasuke and spraying naruto would be a hoot. i can't remeber if kabito and ochimaru are alive or not but if kabito was to show up in the nearby village that wouldn't be bad either. thanks for the great update and can't wait til the next one.
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  • From Kuromei on September 11, 2007
    Chapter three had me giggling like a schoolgirl. *giggles more* Sasuke's not going to let Neji hog Naruto for three weeks. X3 lol XD

    I'm glad my advice could help you. I look forward to the next chapter! ^o^
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  • From LadyWolf on September 09, 2007
    I'm ready to read more.....this is gonna be so good!!!!! Please post soon!!!!!!
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  • From sethian on September 09, 2007
    Oh oH! Nice fic!! I like it a lot so far...it's quite promising XD
    I hope you're going to write more to it cause I strongly believe the best is to come! ^.^
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  • From LadyRonin on September 09, 2007
    i guess naruto is about to get a change in escort (yippe. are you going to have neiji have romantic or friendship feelings. if friendship what did neiji do when naruto and he was together. is the safe house in suna the same question applies to him as neiji (friends or wants more). does naruto being in heat effect gaara at all. i can't wait to see the next chapter.
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  • From Kuromei on September 04, 2007
    Eeeek! Update please! What's happening to Naruto? I have to knooooow! DX

    As for bold and italics, you have to used html coding. < i >Italics< /i > < b >Bold< /b >. Take out the spaces inside the brackets and there you have it. Hope that helps! ^w^
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  • From TseuTsumi on September 03, 2007
    AAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Evil Cliffie! Good job. You are now one of the masters of the cliffhangers. THis story has me hooked. I cant wait for the next chapter.
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  • From Loupiotte on September 02, 2007
    Please do continue with it. The beginning is rather funny and I want to know what's coming up next! And SasuxNaru is my favorite pairing.
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  • From spoon10488 on September 01, 2007
    Yep it's worthy. ;P
    It sound really good please continue.
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  • From cerismea on August 31, 2007
    u definitely should continue this :)
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  • From TseuTsumi on August 31, 2007
    This story shows much promise. I'm guessing its after Sasuke comes back from Orochimaru. Please continue. please. Dont make me use chibi kyuubi-naruto on you. I will. I an that evil!
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  • From xenawp532 on August 31, 2007
    I'm looking forward to reading more.
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  • From katsuyo on August 31, 2007
    You have a good lead in but it definitely needs some work. The first chapter is a little clunky in spots in terms of your structure and plot.

    Naruto comes across as a little too whiny and this raises the question of his age.
    If he's 15/16... then a little bratty behavior is acceptable but if he's older... it may be construed as OOC behavior for Naruto as an adult.

    A summary for your story is crucial. It's the first thing readers see. If you have a tough time writing summaries... keep it simple. Put up a short description of what is going to happen in your story. Some authors use this section as a chapter lead in... just don't put up I suck at summaries. There is no bigger story killer than that.

    If you need someone to read over what you have or just offer some common sense advice - just drop me a line. My email address is on my author's profile.

    - katsuyo
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