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From jgoodman on November 26, 2009
love this story please update soon
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From LightLessStar on October 08, 2009
I love your story! It's great. I vote you put GaaraHarry (if you do you should make Harry a bit more feminine, SasukeSakura, NarutoHinata. Anyway...great job on the story. Also, for team seven, sense Harry's an extra you should just add him to team seven. TTFN!
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From ANON - Lizz on December 26, 2008
this is really good i hope you update soon
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From ANON - silver on January 16, 2008
I like the Cloud village angle. Harry shouldn't go back to the wizarding world though. There are too many fics like that. If I was a ninja first then everything (any abilities like magic) would be seen as a way to make me a better ninja first. I vote for a Harry/Sasuke pairing.
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From Shadi88 on January 01, 2008
Hi again hope your doing good. Me I'm fine not bad on the second chapter I like where your taking the story and hope that the seal your planning to give Harry is a dragon seal, please make it a dragon. With the subject of Harry's prefrince (sp) I know its misspelled I'm a little tierd, well anyways yeah bi ok and if you really want a Harry/Draco that's fine with me but while he expiriments I would like to see Harry date Hinata a few times with Naruto realizing he likes her and ends up being with her. Plus some of the things that um reflectionsofreality said if I wrote it correctly said were things I agree with not everything but a lot.
Well later good luck and best wishes.
Butterfly Beauty
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From Shadi88 on January 01, 2008
Well I thought your story was good. On Harry being a demon I say "No". What demons I like well I like kitsunes and dragons, snakes are good just about any animal can work if you do it right, but if you do decide on demons could you please do a dragon, thank you. I don't like too well that the Naruto gang will be having magic like Harry's because techniclly they already have magic of their own that's just diffrent. It's also limiting them to doing much less than they are capable of doing. On the Sakura and Sasuke I say yes not a problem there. I hope you will be doing the Naruto and Susuke rivalry I do enjoy it because behind it there is actully a very strong friendship that will last forever. Good luck, best wishes and happy holidays, & have a happy new year.
Butterfly Beauty
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From MistyMossflower on December 31, 2007
This is a great story and I can't wait for the next update. I can't wait to see how Naruto does on the the test and also see what happens next. When is Itachi going to kill his family? if he does. Keep up the good work and update again soon!! :)
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From oohshiny on November 23, 2007
i know you havent updted in awhile, but i encourage you to update as soon as possible, i would like to see harry & naru-chan interact XD i wonder how theyd like each other? my email is deannathx@comcast.net, email me when you update plz ^^
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From Rymika on November 04, 2007
Hope it's not to late to vote but I would like it if bouth Sasuke and Sakura went to Hogwarts with Harry and Naruto! ^_^ Hpoe you update soon!
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From ANON - Twig4 on September 30, 2007
plz no bi harry make harry date ino,herm, and tenten and kurenia and naruto date temari,luna,ginny and anko plz respond
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From ANON - Twig4 on September 30, 2007
plz no bi harry make harry date ino,herm, and tenten and kurenia and naruto date temari,luna,ginny and anko plz respond
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From ReflectionsOTR on September 19, 2007
You know it is quite frustrating to give Harry Naruto's history why not deviate from it? I mean instead of having the kage die in sealing the demon in a child have the child stumble across some forbidden summoning ritual, let's say a couple of the village elders summoning a demon in an attempt to create a new bloodline only to be discovered halfway through and botching the ritual. They panic and accuse the child of releasing the demon only for the Raikage to banish him for his own protection.

I have read a few stories where that was where the more original blood lines came from, the demon is bound to an individual whose children would then have a unique bloodline from there on out combine recent work with a medic nin on Harry's eyes and the healing he has gone through to repair the damages that the Dursley's did and Harry's magic and it might mean that a new dou-jitsu might as well as regenerative abilities might surface in Harry himself without having to wait for his progeny. If I were to give him any particular eyes maybe something like Death sight (both medical applications and a form a foresight where he could tell how close to death a person was and maybe even be able to alter that fate by making suggestions that would alter missions more advance forms could include more specifically how a person would die) or Soul sight(would be able to tell what type a person an individual was and a more advanced form would be able to tell what type of person an individual would become if they continue on the current path they travel and the step beyond would be able to figure out what actions and directions could alter that fate, this ability would also be able to tell when a soul is in a body that it is not meant for and probably could be used to 'see' Hocruxes and maybe even follow the thin threads that would connect bits of a torn soul together) It could take years for a dou-jitsu to surface so it might not be something that you would have to decide on right away and there might not be any foreshadowing of it in the story at all just all of a sudden Harry's eyes would go infinite abyssal black and he would no longer just see the real world.

When Harry does go to Hogwarts maybe you should take a more realistic twist. Instead of him being tracked down by Dumbledore or one of his associates make it so that the Dursley's moved from the country or died in a house-fire so as that when Harry does not respond in time Dumbledore thinks he is either lost or dead. Harry still being on the list to go to Hogwarts still gets an invitation only it takes several months for a persistent owl to finally make it to the hidden countries and even when it finally gets there the poor bird is offed by a kunai when it flies across a training ground of a genin team. So Harry eventually receives his letter, middle of September way past the given deadline. The Hokage of course would not send qualified ninja (even genin if you were to have Harry graduate the academy before he was 11) into unknown territory on their own without at least some recon (if I were him, going on the premise that the British wizarding world was not known of before, I would first send in an ANBU team to analyze the threat that wizards pose and to gather some more specific information) and even once information was known you would think the mission would be for Harry's team to infiltrate the school while avoiding detection... maybe have the Weasley twins be the first to discover the team and what would Kanoha do if they had the Philosopher stone? Ironic wouldn't it be if Harry stole it where in cannon he saved it?

Please what ever you do don't make a four genin team as there were other genin that passed the Academy but failed the jounin instructors' tests and were forced to try again the following year so it could be easily said to shuffle one of the cannon Rookie 9 into one of the failed teams to keep the numbers even. There is a suggestion that the reason Naruto could not make the Bunshin is that he has too much chakra hence why he was able to master the Kage Bunshin combined with his lack of focus on theory and he was dead last in the academy, if Harry were to have a similar problem with chakra but studied his ass off with encouragement of his mum then it is possible that he could take Sakura's place on Team 7 or if he were to persevere maybe Sasuke's. I do like the idea of when it comes time for Dumbledore to investigate the team that is sent that Naruto is told that he can do magic while Sasuke is informed he is a squib (able to see magic but not able to cast) I really like the idea that magic and chakra are totally different systems though they could still effect each other and even be used to imitate the other in its most basic ideas.

Personally I would really like to see a Harry/Naruto pairing(even if it is just experimentation or for occasional comfort) though I think if you were to do a Draco/Sasuke the sheer mass of their combined egos would form a singularity where no matter what they are told their belief in their superiority would be absolute.

I will try to read regardless of what pairings you use though I would end up skimming any graphic heterosexual stuff. I really hope you don't fall into the standard cliches,

~Reflections

PS please feel free to write me if you want me to expand on any of my ideas though also feel free to ignore me if what I wrote seemed to arrogant or condescending
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From sharem on September 13, 2007
I do like this so far. It's a rather interesting premise with Harry being found by the Raikage. Many Harry Potter/Naruto crossovers I have come across have Harry starting out in Konoha. If the pairing is het, I'd like to see Temari/Harry. Yaoi/slash pairing I would like to see Harry with either Kakashi or Shikamaru...I just love that lazy genius...XD
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From TheLastVampire on September 04, 2007
Hi, I know my last review was...clipped, to put it nicely, but I was in a bit of a rush to leave my house. Anyway, this story is well written. Just wondering, would you like a Beta? *is offering* sorry if you don't. As for the male pairing: Naruto, Sasuke, or Kakashi would be good. Get back to me sometime

Ja ne
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From TheLastVampire on August 29, 2007
demon sealing: yes, phoenix

Harry and Team Kakashi go to Hogwarts: yes to both
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