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From Houseki on September 07, 2008
Review Ch1

Well, "mother-hen-Haku" is quite entertaining! lol Him running in on Sasuke.. and what is this? Kimi has eyes for Haku? *raises brow* lol or is he just trying to make Sasuke jealous? Cuz THAT surely worked! lol

Shizune feels no remorse for Naru-chan on his period! So unfair! Us girls have to stick together on our "stomachache" days!!

So Naru and Haku are a great pair... one they are what the other wants to be, so that makes things a bit more simple.. I guess >.> lol The changing on the bus had to be hard, especially without anyone noticing!

oh, lol at Naru's "testy"ness :p silly silly! good work though! Totally enjoying it! On to the next chap! Wait for the next review! lol

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From Houseki on September 06, 2008
Review for Prologue:

"yeah, I�m man enough to admit to penis envy!"

that's all i have to say....

yeah right! lmao... well, that sure was a bit of a twist at the end... he has a penis, yes/no? and on his rag? wtf?! hmm will continue cuz now i'm intrigued hehehe

so ya finally got me reading naruto again O.o big fucking shocker here.. it's been what, at least a YEAR or MORE?! since I've been into Naru?! lol for shame i know lol but again, watching it is getting me back into it so mayhaps tomorrow i might feel the need to work on MY Naru stories lmao... anywho.. ok I MUST move on to the next chap... await the next review ^__~

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From ANON - Ash; on September 06, 2008
Ah, I cannot wait for the next chapter whatsoever ^.~ . It's something about reading about such a clueless Sasuke that keeps me interested, LOL. XD. Your an ah-mazing writer, by the way. :3
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From Kimra on September 06, 2008
wow this story is going to be really long isn't it? i'm actually reading and and wondering how it will turn out. since theirs barely a blip between sasuke and naruto yet (relatively speaking) i'm really curious to see how you turn the story about.

keep writting, it's a great and an interesting read.
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From venia on September 06, 2008
I think the story is very interesting(I adore the way you write Naruto, and Sasuke still not getting it about Haku's gender lol XD) It makes me so curious about what is going to happen next! So I'm looking forward to next chapter! ^___^ On constructive criticism now, I think maybe you overdo it with descriptions? I generally tend to skip them if they're not essential enough for the scene.(same with the bleach movie, it was a nice and clever idea to have the characters compare themselves to another series and state what they liked about the movie plot,but maybe they didn't really need to keep it for more than 2 pages XD;)Apart from this though, I really believe your fic is very original and I can't wait for some narusasunaru to happen! Congrats ^^b

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From ANON - sasukeskyuubi on September 05, 2008

"Not that seeing his brother making out with another boy (with shirts missing and hands down each other�s pants) turned him on" *this made me think about itachi and sasori being hot *wipes nosebleed**
Sasuke was as relaxed as Sasuke-ly possible. HAHAHAHAHAHAHA *this made me feel laughter in the pit of my soul*
mmmmm gaara is coming into the picture... mmmm gaara *this made me tingle in some places*
�That�s totally cheating! You know I don�t have the patience to wait for a slow ball!� *this made me feel like hugging naruto*
The cute way Haku and Naru interact in the locker room is adorable. *this makes me want NaruHaku ficage*
and you know how i feel about Neji in this chapter... *Neji is my new lover*
i hope this made up for some of the assholes that dont review
-sk
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From ANON - sasukeskyuubi on September 05, 2008

Mikoto.. you write her so that i like her a lot.. *this made me feel like i am glad her eldest son is awesomeness* (insert sasuke hate lit here)
Naruto jumping on Haku's back was very cute *this made me smile*
�Not dead yet, eh, Uchiha?� *this made me feel very close to the blonde
"But not interesting enough for him to move from his perfect spot on the roof, nor to involve himself whatsoever in the situation." *this made me giggle..
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From ANON - sasukeskyuubi on September 05, 2008
ok.. well this review isnt going to be as awesome as the first one was going to.. stupid back button *glares*
even though i read/heard most of it already, i am going to leave you a detailed account of the way things made me feel..
-your foreshadowing of a kimi/sasu break-up perhaps? *this made me feel like i had chills..cause i did*
-itachi almost telling sasu to invite kimi...*this made me feel like itachi FTW*
-Itachi just... calmly walking away from his father... *this made me
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From ANON - artduncan on September 05, 2008
So, I lay awake thinking about this story last night (briefly obsessive) and I realized we haven't even caught a hint of Sakura's existence. I'm of the opinion that Naruto needs a new psychiatrist and I thought 'wouldn't that be fun?' Also, I don't know if you've already got a personal theme song, but I kept hearing 'Fall For You' by Secondhand Serenade.' I'm running on two hours of sleep since I stayed up to read your fic, so sory for the bizzaroness of the fic
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From ANON - artduncan on September 05, 2008
I absolutely love how you're taking your time with this and not rushing into the meaty SasuNaru interaction. There's so much to chew on we can really get a flavor for the other characters and the background. I dislike that you feel you have to keep attesting to Naruto's lack of 'ukefication' when your portrayal of him makes it clear enough. It's delicious
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From ANON - artduncan on September 04, 2008
This is fairly brilliant at this point. It's complicated but not, full of the intricate lies that muck up a person's life but are easy for an outsider to follow. Suzume thoroughly enraged me by her unbelievable close-mindedness as a student of psychology. I am absolutely thrilled to have found this.
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From ANON - Anon on September 04, 2008
Excellent story, first time I saw it here. Different from what I've read before. I was wondering how you were going to get Naru and Sasu together when they don't really have much outside contact. I see that lockeroom is going to be pretty useful for letting secrets out. I can hardly wait to see what happens in the next chapter.

Ja
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From ANON - sasukeskyuubi on January 25, 2008
holy....shit dude.. i am ROLLIN about S2's penises comment.. wow....awesome. he always WAS a bit strange.

anyway...awesome chapter dude..even though i had been reading pieces of it randomly, it is so much cooler to be able to read them all at once.
in the correct order...

I LOVE Mr-Prefect-Prissy-Pants... that is soooo awesome! I love Tobi wanting to get his whole face tattooed...i love Kisame thinking that a Shark with mom and a heart below it balances things out in the creep department.
i love the hot mini lemons, and understand why they were mini..i LOVE your portrayal of Deidara and of Sai. I love Itachi wanting a red scorpion, i love the way the chapter ended...but MORE THAN ANYTHING ELSE...

i love the brotherly love that was evident toward the end when itachi warned sasuke about their father being home for dinner. i know that you know that i loved that...but i needed to tell others.

and that is another thing...this fic is way too damn good to get spurned all the time with reviews...to the other people reviewing this, and seeing it....congrats..you are awesome. to the people who arent reviewing, and arent going to see this anyways.... you FUCKING SUCK....chumps.

love you lady.
-sk
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From ANON - Anon on September 27, 2007
I apologize for not reviewing earlier. When I read the first three chapters and clicked on review it turned into downtime and I forgot to go back. Anyway, ugh, this story is so much heavier than I even anticipated. Like, it reminds me of college when I was doing a story on a lesbian couple who had adopted kids and the state was making it like impossible for them to actually have real guardianship of them. I just feel like Naruto's situation is so hopeless. I mean there is hope. But if they were in a small town, there are just so many things going against Naruto already. Being a girl biologically, living with lesbian parents...just the social issues surrounding all that, I'm waiting for this to set itself up where it turns out like 'Boys Don't Cry' and Naruto gets bashed in the head with a bat or something terrible.

And I'm so mad at Sazume (sp?). I just can't believe she could get away with being so prejudicial that out of spite she'd slap more medication on Naruto. But I don't think it's implausible at all which totally makes me sick. The idea of hormone treatment really bothered me, and though Tsunade is trying to rationalize it by the good outweighing the evil so long as Naruto can stay with them just ... grr... it's frustrating. Because I'd be calling up like the ACLU and getting that bitches license and credentials pulled. But it just depends on where they live, because if it was like a Southern state or something, I would believe that if the adoption people came around or whoever and saw that the kids weren't being 'treated' for their 'problems' Naruto would be sent to an institution. If it was like NY or Calif I'd be like nah...

grrr... And Sasuke and Kimimaro. I find it interesting how afraid Sasuke is to come out of the closet. His situation also makes me nervous. And Kimimaro is not a bad boyfriend at all. LOL but I love how you pointed out how oblivious Sasuke was about Haku, because Sasuke's trying to live in this world of denial and it just shows how out of the loop he is in regards to accepting his homosexuality and even wanting to be a part of the gay community.

I'm waiting for Sakura! Anyway, good luck with the rest of the story, I hope you're still enthused about it. I'm interested to see how Naruto and Sasuke could possibly interact at all, but I like slow development XD

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From yeagerbomb on September 12, 2007
yay new chapter!! i'm totally loving this, and i hope to see more, but don't over-strech yourself. i'm really happy with their gaurdians, because kakaxiru really is WAY overdone. i looked at the layout of the apartment before i started reading, and was like 'noooooo! i just spoiled it!!!!' but it was okay. and sasu-chan's so dumb, i love it. and i like the sasoxita too! i haven't seen any of that before!
i like the detail, maybe not the specific shoe... i don't know what the word is. brand? because, just reading it, i don't really understand. though after thinking about it later, i realized i own black converse hightops. that was sweet.
anyway, the description of oto was a little slow while reading it, but when i finished i felt it was right. it was showing the city. a movie would do the same thing, while we listen to the basketball and skateboards, only much faster. like in eight seconds instead of a page. but that's okay! when i was done, i liked it that way!
great chapter, i really love this story, and i can't wait to see what itachi says/does to sasuke to figure out what's going on.~
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