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Reviews for It wasn´t meant to be

By : Yourangel
  • From dragon04 on October 13, 2008
    PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like the story and would like to see what happen.
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  • From ANON - a random ff.net authoress, m.t.h. on August 22, 2008
    I really like this story but could you please make the chapters longer? Please? I want more!
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  • From ANON - a k light on April 17, 2008
    I like it, but it's going a bit slow..
    hurry please!
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  • From lovel3ssangel on April 15, 2008
    the chapters are too short, but i like it. keep at it!
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  • From dragon04 on January 03, 2008
    PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next.
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  • From ANON - Miranda on December 14, 2007
    =_=.....please don't take this as flaming, because, regardless of how it may sound, I really don't mean it that way, but the chapters are ridiculously short. A decent-length chapter should take about an hour to read and should have a complete idea central to the story's theme; it should be impossible to read 4chs in 10mins. For example, the first chapter should include Naru-chan's capture, the relationship between the captors (not necessarily Uchihacest, just how they interact with each other, do they get along? do they fight? is one coercing the other to help him rob?), mention the little bag again (whether it's Naru trying to find out what's in it or him wondering why he hasn't seen it since the robbery), how do the Uchihas treat Naru (as just a tool to be used to ensure their safety from the cops or as a sex slave or wherever you were planning on going)? Try not to end the story until the reader has a definite idea of what Naru-chan's life's gunna be like from here on out.


    Again, I'm REALLY REALLY SORRY if you were insulted by my comment......(sorry!)
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  • From alleycat88 on September 16, 2007
    ooo...me likey...
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  • From dragon04 on September 08, 2007
    PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next to naruto and can you make the chapters longers.
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  • From on August 27, 2007
    Please update soon! I can't wait to find out what happens
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  • From TseuTsumi on August 25, 2007
    Awwwh...sort chapters. But I'm hooked! I cant wait for the next chapter. I cant wait to see what happens next.
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  • From dragon04 on August 24, 2007
    PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I like to see what happen next.
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  • From spoon10488 on August 18, 2007
    very cool can't wait for next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Debbie on August 16, 2007
    Alright... Good story. You have really short chapters though, can't be more that one page in Word. Please, try to make them longer. It's no fun reading stories with this little chapters. Anyway, great plot. I've never seen it before^-^
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  • From yeagerbomb on August 16, 2007
    well. um... this has an interesting plot. i want to know what happens, but i'm not real "in to" your style. the chapters can't be more than a page long, and the abrupt change of pov and back was odd. you could certainly find better ways so that it flows more smoothly. if you would like, i can try to help you, but it's rather difficult when i can't sit and explain what i mean directly to you.~
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  • From dragon04 on August 16, 2007
    PLEASE UPDATE SOON. It is a good story. You should put some sexual things in soon.
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