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By : Mako75

From ANON - princessmerleen on February 17, 2012
I know you said not to ask for an update, but I look forward to the next ch~! Also is it possible for a prequel with Naruto's parents?
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From ANON - Kai on September 16, 2010
Geart job! I love your stoy, I love sasunaru XD so cute it made me cry alot I didit know what was coming next, Cant wait to read more keep up the good work, you got a fan ^^
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From ANON - blur on May 07, 2010
you know would be the shit?
if you did like a sub story of sasuke and orochimaru before everything
and they were still... fucking
cause i totally want to no how they acted around each other, haha
luve love the story, a lot!
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From DevilnBlue on July 08, 2009
I've been reading this story for the first time since yesterday and I really fell for this story. It's sexy, it's complicated with misunderstandings and bits of humor that makes the story seem so real too me. It's mordern slavery thought, but they are toys, ne? The toys are tricked, born and more into their current roles and some go with the flow and some resist until they are either broken and/or tamed.

It was really interesting to see that originally Naruto had been something other than toy. That his papers had been changed and he was having his whole Julia Roberts in 'Pretty Woman' moment where he let his masters have his body but not his heart. I sort of like how Sasuke was possessive sometimes but I swear to god those drugs make him way paranoid and it has obviously screwed with Itachi's head one too many times.

I nearly cried during the shower scene in Gaara's room with Naruto's insecurity because at the time I was listening to the song 'Dreaming with a Broken Heart' that John Mayer that popped on my playlist. I'm telling you sad combination but this story was really so amazing that I couldn't put it down and spent all night and most of the morning reading this. I just woke up from my nap now to write this review because it really does need to be written.

I like how your characters aren't perfect. They have major flaws and it's endearing how some of the toys seemed to cherish their master's even more for it. Like with Lee and Gaara. And the part with the music room... I know Naruto has whiskered scars in the anime/manga but I wanted to pounce those sound brats and start smacking heads in. I knew they were dead as soon as Dosu said for Naruto not to reveal it to anyone. And it's interesting how Orochimaru and Sasuke's relationship was and how it ended with Itachi. I like how you twisted everything around to fit this 10 years from now time.

I could see it with the three vice presidents which were obvious counterparts to the three sannin. I could see it with how even though Sasuke sometimes hated his brother he still yearned for his approval. I even like the acid scene where Itachi finally hugged him and Sasuke didn't know whether to be happy or worried.

It's interesting and a bit scary how Sasuke can black out and do something to Naruto then wonder the next day who the hell marked him. Or like when Naruto fingered himself and Sasuke thought it was something else. It shows how majorly flawed that he is that someone like Sasuke can be so possessive and jealous over something he once refused to see as human. I almost saw a chibi moment when Sasuke yanked Naruto from glomping Iruka. It almost made me picture Naruto struggling to get back to Iruka all chibi like.

I find that I can quite relax in your fic because it is full of so much suspense and moments where one understanding could turn a happy moment into one of tradgedy or something. You keep your readers on your toes, I can tell you that and not many fics do that nowadays. The only real reason I wanted to read this fic because one of my favorite authors IvvyMoon was writing a story somewhat similar to this one to get her frustration out about the updates. And I'm like if this person is half as good as IvvyMoon than I have to see and you're so much better. I want to gush over the whole thing and analyze every little bit of it from the way Naruto tries not to fall for Sasuke but does to the way Sasuke tries to figure out and realize that this blonde is so much different than the others.

I just love this story all over. Love, hate, jealousy, misunderstanding, insecurity, revenge, fighting (both physically and mentally), confusion about role placements and boundaries and so much more. It's amazing and I wanted to pinch both Jairaya and Tsunade hard for causing Naruto even more pain in the hospital. How dare they say he should keep fighting and keep his head above water. I can understand why they were made the blonde was trashing his father and slightly disappointed that their former student's son has been reduced to such status but they haven't really done something until now. And to rub salt into Naruto's wounds by showing him how much he missed... His pain was almost my pain for a moment.

Naruto is definetly a bird in a pretty, gilded cage who once knew what freedom tastes like and longs to taste it again. Sure he lacks for nothing and might on occasions have a kind master but is it really enough. I really wonder what happens when Jairay, Tsunade and Iruka fight for his freedom. Will he willing accept it if they do manage to or will he remain as a slave to stay closer to his master? Oh so many questions are bubbling up in my chest. Like why the hell could Itachi be such an ass and what does Sasuke expect Naruto to do when he fainted in front of his fanclub members but call who he thought he could trust. Sure in hindsight Neji is the obvious choice but you captured a moment that even the best of decisions when done in haste could slightly be wrong.

I really do hope that Naruto doesn't just settle. He deserves everything his little heart desires. He deserves his freedom and the happy ending he badly needs with the man he loves. He's been forced to grow up way too fast and he's been passed alround liked a used hankie but he's Naruto. I love it, he's still Naruto. So if Sasuke in the long runs decides the next day not to accept Naruto and his scars than he can suck a lemon for all I care. I don't hate Sasuke but sometimes he forgets how human Naruto is and that he isn't 'just a toy'. I fell hard for this story and don't mind if you took a while updating. Rome wasn't built in a day and true genius is never really rushed.

I tried to squeeze as much love, praise and awe, as well as frustration and eagerness I could into this one little review. Sorry if I rambled and hoped around points in the story but I wanted to badly review. And this great story obviously can't bee summed up in just a simple 'love it please continue' or 'update'. So hear I am, wearing my heart on my sleeve, wanting to see what you come up with next. Please e-mail me when you update if you can. It's simplywandering@yahoo.com and I can't wait to see how this story ends.
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From ANON - Yami no Ite on June 03, 2009
GahhH!!! I was pointed in this direction by a picture off of Y-gallery, and I'm loving it. As I haven't seen a date as to when his was last updated, I hope it comes soon. I can't wait to see people's reactions when they learn Sasuke is going to keep Naruto. Not to mention I wanna see if anything comes of the talk Jiraiya and Tsunade had with Naruto while he was in the hospital.
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From ANON - Niecy on April 15, 2009
What the fuck?? I'm not saying any of the nonsense like "update soon" or whatever... but what the fuck? No update since September??
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From ANON - angelboy on January 25, 2009
I just re-read the last few chapters. I really enjoyed reaquainting myself with the story. I also read the reviews I posted. I noticed a pattern. I tended to mention the negative more than the positive aspects_though I did mention positive aspects. I think I was being too critical. Yes, there were flaws in logic; but I was thinking with 'reality logic' and wasn't thinking 'alternate reality/fiction logic'. And I read all the chapters_so I must have enjoyed the parts I thought were good more than I didn't like the parts I thought were off. So if any of my reviews offended you or disinheartened you_it wasn't intentional. I'm glad I came back to check for updates; otherwise I would not have seen the error of my ways. Thanks for sharing the story and look forward to the continuation.
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From Ikippiki on December 19, 2008
I can't wait to read the end of this story! I hope you talk a bit more about Gaara and Neji, you keep hinting intersting things about them, and then leave us hanging there waiting for more aaaah! But anyway I love the way you write and this story is great! Please continue to keep me on my toes!!
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
Oh, I'm so glad to read that you want to add some more to the story. I was kind of hoping it would have a more romantic ending_=where they were more partners and not master/slave. I was so happy when you had Sasuke go into Naruto's room and look at him while he slept; touching his face_and telling himself what a fool he was to think that he wouldn't want Naruto anymore. I was also kind of disturbed by Itachi thinking that Naruto made Sasuke weak. Obviously that's untrue. Sasuke was able to fix the problems in Europe and kill Orochimaru while he was still undecided about Naruto and missing him. And Itachi needs to have absolute understanding that Naruto is not to be played with. I look forward to continuing the story. Thanks
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
I don't think I've read a story where so many of the characters are so fucked up. Glad to see the tortures and deaths--would have like Orochimaru to go through some torture though. You can certainly imagine some sick stuff. Yeah for you?!
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
Sasuke, Sasuke, Sasuke_because you didn't take care of your dirty laundry when you should have (Orochimaru); he hurt your precious person (or in your universe-sex slave). This is kind of funny--Fugaku is sending Sasuke to Europe early because the strikers are getting violent? What's Sasuke going to do about that? fuck them into submission? Glare at them? This whole Europe business thing is kind of a ridiculous plot point-but I mentioned that in a previous review. So there won't be torture to find out who was behind Naruto's attack_they're just going to kill the 3? Torture before hand would have been so nice. Gaara could have done some nice cutting into them like they did Naruto. Having Gaara willing to buy Naruto to keep him safe from other buyers was sweet. You never let us know why Sasuke would turn away a bed slave for having a scar. And the only reason Naruto is scarred is because of Sasuke-so I'm assuming he'll set Naruto free and they will still love each other--that would be a nice ending. You mentioned that Sasuke might give Naruto to his mother. What for? I feel so bad for Naruto to be left in the condition he's in--and who knows how long he'll have to suffer alone and thinking/knowing that Sasuke will not want him. Will he go back to school? Will the Uchia family still take care of him? Lots of stuff up in the air and only a couple of chapters to finish it. Guess I'll have to read them to find out. Though I think some of the stuff in this story is weird_it does keep the reader interested enough to want to continue to read. The drug thing between Itachi and Sasuke hasn't come up that much-and you never really explained it all that well-and it's only come up a couple of times_so I was wondering why you even bothered to include it. Oh well. Thanks for sharing the story with us.
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
((But Gaara didn�t want Lee to feel uncomfortable)))___what does cutting him up, bleeding him, scarring him, causing him to cry out in pain do if not make him 'uncomfortable'? And Sasuke says Gaara's not cruel. You need to explain why Gaara is not cruel-because he sure comes across as a psychotic, sick fuck. If you are writing him with some kind of mental disorder, maybe mention it. I bet Naruto will feel foolish about telling Sasuke that he could take care of himself when Sasuke told him about the people that wanted to take him into the music room and rape him if he didn't go to Europe with him. It would be nice if Naruto remembers the people who did this to him and you write about them getting punished. Fugaku also knew about the music room and its reputation from when he went to that school probably 20+ years ago_and they still don't have security posted there.Students have been getting beaten and raped in that room for more than 20 years and no one does anything about it. This is some sick, twisted, fucked up 'universe' you created for this story. So Sasuke is blaming himself for leaving Naruto alone for 1 day and this happens to him; but now Sasuke is going to leave him alone for 3 months-where's the logic in that? I also hope to read of Orochimaru's most painful and terrible punishment he receives for his part in Naruto's tragedy.
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
I hope you plan on the 3 people doing this to naruto to be punished_otherwise it's stupid that you let him see them and even stupider that they all said their names. The whole school knows the music rooms are used for students to assault other students__why wouldn't the faculty put up hidden cameras or even better a hall monitor. If the music room escapades were a secret-i wouldn't say that--but you wrote that everybody knows what goes on there. I'm guessing you're not going to have Naruto rescued from this-but i'm also guessing that sasuke won't leave him because of the scars. Sasu and Naru both knew that the fans girls and boys would be out for Naruto when they returned to school_1)because of the kiss and hickey Sasu gave Naru in the parking lot and 2)Naru throwing the whore out of the bedroom at the party__you would think that Sasu would have called his friends and had them stay be Naruto during school to make sure he was safe. Can't wait to read about the aftermath.
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
(((Show me your pleasure and it will give me pleasure))) (((I want you to beg because you want it; not because I want it)))___these little insights along with Naruto's possessive jealousy-throwing the bitch out of the room. Sasuke's jealousy and trying to bury it in meaningless sex...and many more things__why can't Naruto see that Sasuke cares for him more than just a toy. He even said that he feared if Naruto was free that Naruto would not allow his touches; would not allow Sasuke in his life. Can't Naruto see how big of a thing that is-especially for Sasuke to say. I thought Naruto was bad for playing sex games on the dance floor-then bitching Sasuke out for doing the same thing. I hated that their supposed friends were trying to push other sexual partners on them: Kanky telling Sasu to leave Kiba and Naru alone and Neji providing Sasu with a whore. If Neji has known Sasu since they were 3 (14-15 years?)_shouldn't he see the change in Sasuke's behavior and the way he acts with/around Naru? He should be the first to recognize Sasu is falling in love with Sasu and should help him out with it. I'm pretty certain that Sasu will have to free Naru before Naru submits 100% to his love for Sasu_but that will be hard for Sasu to do; for fear of Naru leaving. So Naru needs to convince Sasu that he would be happier staying with Sasu of his own free will and not as some toy--but hopefully he'll keep that Uchia fan (minus the drugs/killer injection trigger). Brava on the scene when Naruto storms through the house looking for his Sasu and giving that whore the riot act. I know I already mentioned it_but that was a great scene. Well Done. There's little parts I don't like and you tend to repeat Naruto's emotional turmoil quite a bit--but overall, it's a riveting and entertaining story.
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From asm613 on December 19, 2008
This chapter had some disturbing qualities to it. Itachi half rapes Naruto/forces himself on him. Naruto doesn't seem to fight him off to seriously. Itachi threatens to do more to him next time. And Naruto doesn't seem to want to tell Sasuke about it. Telling Sasuke everything would put him on Sasuke's good side. By hiding parts of it it seems like you have Naruto wanting to get raped by Itachi. What's the deal? What's the deal with Lee being physically tortured? You had Jarayia bring in Naruto to tell him if he wasn't being treated properly that he could go to him. Why can't lee go to him? Why didn't Naruto tell Lee to go to him. Why is lee defending Gaara's torture of him? Why didn't Naruto tell Sasuke that Gaara sexually assaulted him in the hallway? Do you like forced sex and physical abuse? Do you like writing about people being victimized? It's very distasteful to read about it_especially when you don't let the characters get justice (at least not yet-maybe they will in later chapters?). Fugaku sending Sasuke to Europe for months to fire a board of directors, replace them, get the workers off strike, etc...this makes no sense. He's a 17 year old high school student. Sasuke himself says that he has no idea what to do about such things. Fugaku doesn't seem like the business genius he's supposed to be by putting the future of his European company in jeopardy like that. What's the deal with Orochimaru? Sasuke was voluntarily with Orochimaru in a sexual way-like in a relationship. That's just disgusting. And if this 'toy' thing is a cultural norm_why does Sasuke keep leaving his toy in positions where he can be assaulted by others. Neji even points out how stupid it is to do it-but you have Sasuke leaving Naruto alone and then having Naruto sexually assaulted_like Sasuke doesn't know it will happen-when obviously he should know it happens_Neji and Gaara and Itachi speak of it as it's the norm that toys should not be left alone or things happen to them. But you keep having Sasuke leave Naruto open to these assaults_when he should know not to in this culture__which is why I asked if you enjoy writing about people being victimized__you should put a warning in your summary about that. Other than that, the story seems fairly entertaining. Thanks for sharing it.
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