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By : TRG

From ANON - AngelR on July 23, 2007
Love the story...keep up the good work...
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From ANON - Nanaka on July 23, 2007
Love the story, just got something i have to say... The final law said "For the sole purpose of preventing any chance of offspring under the Kyuubi�s influence, Uzumaki Naruto may never marry nor partake in the act of sexual intercourse".... loophole there, they certainly aren't maried and they didn't concieve the kids through sex, so technically he didn't break the law... it just says that he can't marry or have sex (though thats just cruel)... it says nothing about him havng children through other means... though im sure they'll just make another law to correct that, and will prolly try and kill the kids anyway, so going away for awhile is probably a good idea anyway
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From nekoleopard on July 23, 2007
awwww that was great i can't wait for the next update, i would give you a cookie but that damn roomie of mine keeps eating them hahaha ^_^

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From naruchan on July 23, 2007
Yay, I feel loved! XD *gives cookies* Thanks for the dedication, it rocks.

Aaaaand OMG, this idea is sooo different from anything I've ever read before! I still can't get over that. It's like, once you've read one SasuNaru fic you've read a whole bunch of them really, since they tend to follow the same rough outline, but this is so entirely off the beaten path that I can't even begin to fathom where it's headed. I'm really worried about the babies myself, and I'm worried about Kyuubi as well. I don't know why, I just am. *crazyness*

It's great that Sasuke and Naruto are gonna get some time away from Konoha, throwing them into new (or at least not-commonly-used) setting is bound to make things more interesting. In the fic I'm working on that sorta happens too... just in a COMPLETELY different way.

Anyways, I just hope that you didn't take anything that flamer-person said seriously. That was totally suckie of them. Tons of people love the story so don't let one person discourage you even a tiny bit ^_^

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From ANON - Ashlee on July 23, 2007
There is really only one way to get rid of those rules.

Get rid of the elders, xD

Great chapter. I have been hanging around in the male/male area waiting for your updated, lol
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From MissMayumi on July 22, 2007
eek! I've been looking forward to this new chapter!! I loved it! So Sasuke and Naruto are gunna leave in search for Jiraiya. Heh, maybe love will ensue? Hopefully they won't get attacked!
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From ANON - Anon on July 22, 2007
I knew Sasuke would step up to protect both Naruto and their children, but when are those two going to get together? Hurry with the next chapter!!!
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From naruchan on July 22, 2007
I apologize to everyone right now for reviewing twice, I know I shouldn't but... I have to.

tealeavesgreen - I'm Japanese. Native-born Japanese. If I can deal with reading some words that aren't used in the exact way they were intended to be then you surely can. I haven't seen Tiki Rane Gobell claim to be fluent in Japanese or even say that she understands it at all and unless she said such a thing you have to assume she's got minimal knowledge on the subject. People write these stories for fun, they write because it entertains people and because it's something they're passionate about. I think it's completely pathetic that you went out of your way to register here on aff.net just to post some stupid comment on a story that you probably haven't even read. The author doesn't deserve to see that when she logs in, it was an absolutely pointless thing to do.

As far as you and your friends on the fanficrants LJ community closing the window when you see "an unnecessary Japanese word" I just pity you. You're missing out on a lot of good plot lines, good writing and good stories in general. It's sad, really, because you seem to be literate enough... but no matter how literate you may or may not be the fact that you're being judgmental (and unnecessarily so) cancels out everything else.

Get a life, move on and don't bother harassing authors who are doing the best they can... especially when their best is as awesome as TRG's.

A logical perspective from a big fan,
Jun
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From tealeavesgreen on July 22, 2007
erm... there is no kanji for ramen. It's in katakana. ra-me-n. ラメン。

I'm assuming you've never taken any Japanese coursework, so I'll be nice, but. You shouldn't pepper your story with a language you don't understand in the slightest. Japanese has three syllabaries: hiragana, katakana, and kanji. Many words do not have kanji.

It's a small step from assuming that everything has a kanji character to assuming that Naruto characters other than Lee speak to each other in desu-masu form, or assuming that people actually use the noun "koi" to reference anything but carp, or committing any Fangirl Japanese atrocity. Please nip this in the bud. If you don't know Japanese, don't use it in your fic. If you want to use it in fic, take a few years of Japanese classes first. Most colleges offer them these days, especially if you attend a larger university.

Just a warning; I, and just about everyone on the fanficrants LJ community, close windows at the first sighting of an unnecessary Japanese word. In our minds, any author who doesn't care enough about her fic to write it in one language doesn't deserve to have her fic read. If you want to write in Japanese, you'd best write the whole damn thing in Japanese, and I do not mean in romaji (roman characters used to transliterate Japanese).

Sorry for the ranting, but misused "Japanese" bothers me.
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From TheGingerLady on July 22, 2007
I hate cliffies!!!! Gahhh!! you beter update soon!!! 'cuss I'm realy curious!
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From HumanInfiltrator on July 22, 2007
Ack. I feel like you are teasing me. Thank you for updating even though it took you away from HP.
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From naruchan on July 22, 2007
......... SQUEEEE! xD

I was sooooo hoping that the title of the chapter ("Jealousy and a Sober Kiss") was actually referring to Sasuke getting over himself a little bit and... well... doing THAT. I think he's adorable when jealous, and this chapter just made my obsession with jealous/possessive!Sasuke even worse. I know I said it before but I think that your strongest point of all is how you manage to keep everyone so much like their true selves, it's something that a lot of people can't do or don't even try to do.

I've been giving the idea behind the story a lot of thought (all the science, which I actually seem to understand for some strange reason o.O) and I think that it's the most original ideas I've seen before. I mean, I've seen M-Preg via Kyuu's influence, but never something that seemed so... genetically possible? I don't know if that's the right term, but yeah, just... go you! lol

I feel the need to offer some kind of constructive criticism... but I can't really think of anything *sweatdrop* Uhh... Well I suppose it wouldn't hurt to see a little more of the other characters, but I don't think it's really NEEDED. It would just add a little more depth to weave in some sub-plot-plots. But at the same time I don't know if it would take away from the main plot, so I'm at a loss as to whether I should even suggest anything like that.

ANYWAYS, I really hope you keep updating at this kind of speed since normally I have to wait like... two weeks or so between chapters of a story that's this well written. I mean, there were some grammar mistakes, but in all fairness you did warn us and they were hardly noticeable with all the stuff going on. And I just got the new HP book too, so I think it's fair if updates are a BIT rarer xD

Much love and praise,
Jun (aka naruchan)

(P.S. I mentioned you when I wrote my little bio-thingy for my Profile, hope you don't mind. If ya want I can take it down, I just didn't think it'd be a big deal ^^)
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From ANON - Anon on July 22, 2007
Wow!! Didn't see that coming. Hurry with the next chapter!!!
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From MissMayumi on July 21, 2007
haha, i started laughing when Naruto said he would "Woo his own lover..." I dunno, it just made me laugh a little! Please have a new chapter soon! I like how your approaching the whole Naruto/Sasuke relationship. Hmm..but if Sasuke and Naruto fall in love, then find out that Naruto is pregnant, then the baby dies, will that make Sasuke reject Naruto?..Surely not. I'm positive you've got a trick up your sleeve!

oh, and I added you as an author I liked on my homepage!

Ja!
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From naruchan on July 21, 2007
Eh, my last review got messed up but I'll try again now.

Basically... I LOVE this story. My favorite part must be how you've kept everyone acting in such a believable manner. I mean, I love Slash, but normally it's not exactly something that you can really believe. Most characters are just straight. The way you're playing Naruto and Sasuke though, it's actually making me think 'Hmm... maybe?' and that's not something a lot of stories are able to do. I actually registered here just so that I could review you (though maybe I'll post something of mine eventually) since I think you deserve a lot more ^^
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