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By : TRG
  • From ANON - Anon on June 24, 2008
    Chapter 18: (*whistles*) ¡°Sasuke was still lying next to him in bed in all of his alabaster, muscled nakedness.¡± ¢¾__¢¾ . . . . Ahaha, hickeys! XD . . . . Heh. The Kyuubi¡¯s feeling sorry for himself. ^^ . . . . (*snort*) ¡°Pay rent.¡± I love that idea. XD . . . . Wow, ¡°not anymore.¡± . . . . This is getting interesting, the Kyuubi feeding chakra into the YY child. . . . Love how Naruto is suddenly aware of all the accidents he gets into. . . . (Grrr.) Beat it, Jiraiya. . . . Heh. ¡°Sasuke could feel himself pale. ¡®He wouldn¡¯t.¡¯¡± >D . . . . I hope they can beat Jiraiya out of releasing the book (considering that Naruto has to be careful now). . . . (*snicker*) Nice threat, Naruto. I¡¯d listen to it, Jiraiya. ^^ . . . . Hah, that got his attention. >D
    ¡°Well, brat, the only thing I can say is that we¡¯re in some deep shit.¡± Love how mild he said that. . . . ¡°Then you can kiss your gonads goodbye.¡± XDDD

    I hope Jiraiya doesn¡¯t publish that book. Or if he does, then Naruto goes through with his threat. Also, if Jiraiya¡¯s not welcome at that guy¡¯s place anymore, what¡¯s to stop him from refusing to look at Naruto¡¯s seal?
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  • From hisoka on June 22, 2008
    the counsal really sucks to take someone elses life into their own hands to do with as they please, and even dirtyer to take someones childrens lives and promise them to someone else.im guessing the counsil needs a small army of its own to overthrow the hokage or something ne.too bad for sasuke and naruto their trip is waisted sinse that morio(sounds like mario) guy is dead already thanks to itachis anger, nothings going good for their team right now .well hope you can update soon
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  • From hsbs on June 19, 2008
    "ero-dobe" :snort:
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    The counsel of konoha are truly evil! They need to be punished!! Severely!!! Glad to see you back on this story. Welcome back!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 17: (*snicker*) “You could have knocked me up!” A little redundant now, wouldn’t you say? . . . . Hehehe, no more hickeys. . . . Hah! Too bad, Sasuke! Nyeh =P . . . . Embarrassment, okay. But why fear? õ_ô
    Aww, that was sweet: “Well, I’m the manliest pregnant dude you’ve ever met, right?” *nod* I hope Sasuke was honestly trying to make Naruto feel better, and not just being honest (because, how many pregnant dudes do you meet, manly or not?). . . . “It was all just another friendly argument the dobe and the teme enjoyed so much.” (*blinks*) Old married couple.
    HAH! Sasuke’s jealous of the ramen! XD . . . . You’re going to owe him big for this, Sasuke (carrying him off while he’s in the middle of eating). . . . Ooh, love the last bit of this scene and what it portends. (*drool*)
    Oh, shit. Not now. . . . He better not spy or eavesdrop on them. . . . Not cool, not cool, goddammit. . . . No, it is NOT hot, Jiraiya, cuz you’re watching them! (Grrr) . . . . (Sorry, I’ve got this big denial thing about Jiraiya being interested in anything that involves two guys getting intimate with each other. I’m more amused by him being homophobic. Sorry for the complaints.) . . . . Hey, um, you melded this scene from Jiraiya’s perspective to the boys’ perspectives. It was kind of confusing. . . . Heh. Even if he changes the names, those two are still going to know when they find the books. And boy, will they be mad at Jiraiya! ^^
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 16: (*in reaction to the A/N and chapter title*): Oh no.
    Love how fast Sasuke picked up what Naruto was up to. . . . OOPS: “Riki and Takashi . . . did next?” Got the “t” and the “k” mixed up. . . . Love picturing Sasuke as a wolf. (Personally, I see Kakashi as that, but it’s fun to picture Sasuke as one too from time to time.) . . . . Love the emphasis on how this is the point of no return.
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  • From LindyStar on June 19, 2008
    While a parthenogenetic embryo is produced without fertilization, this term refers to a solely maternally derived genetics; an androgenetic embryo is also an embryo arising from DNA derived solely from paternal origin, which might make more sense here, since Naruto is male. However, an androgenote would still require a "host" uterus for a baby to come to term and be born.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 15: (*blinks at the chapter title*) I have a book with that title. ô_o
    I wonder if that little single-quote mark at the beginning is a typo or if it indicates a story being read. . . . Yeah, this has to be an excerpt from Icha Icha. (I wonder what Kakashi thought at seeing a name so close to his in the book . . . though that really depends on the kanji used to spell the names, I suppose.) . . . . Hah! I was right. ^_^ (Actually, instead of the single-quotes, I think it’d be more excerpt-like if it was all italicized, but that’s just me.) . . . . Dang it! Jiraiya did write it! (Or at least, Naruto seems to think so.) >.< . . . . Sasuke must know what book it is. . . . “Brooding and walking at the same time? That’s a new one!” Since when? I would’ve thought it’d be easy. . . . Heh, I love how out-of-the-blue the question was for Naruto. ^_^ . . . . Wait. Naruto knew? Didn’t see that comin’. ô_ô . . . . Interesting name. (You gonna keep it that way, since we found out the real name, though?) . . . . (*snort*) Good one, Naruto, good one. I almost believed you for a second there. . . . “Sasuke liked living in denial.” That old masochistic bit, eh? Though I consider it a liking as a habit, though not enjoying it. . . . Okay, that was cruel of Jiraiya. You don’t force someone to learn sex if they don’t want to. And sexual drugs don’t count. I don’t think I’ll be forgiving Jiraiya at all in this story. . . . Enough with the “Uchihas this/that”. It’s a little too much. And [to Sasuke directly] you just thought not long ago that it wouldn’t make sense for Naruto to be interested in you since you ran him through; therefore, he’s perfectly aloud to fantasize. . . . Sasuke really is a bastard in this scene. He better watch it, or he might not get any. ^^

    (*sigh*) Yeah, I admit I was curious about who Naruto lost his virginity to . . . though now I think I’d be happier not knowing about what Jiraiya did to him. (*depressed*)
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 14: (*snort*) That chapter title. (*amused*)
    Heh. I like that bit that says, “Sasuke Uchiha fit into that 1 percent.” ^_^ Even so, I like to think that he’d move from time to time. Neji – now, he I can picture not moving. . . . Heh, Sasuke’s been reading Icha Icha. ^^ . . . . Oh, that’s clever! Kakashi’s mask hides his blush! =DD . . . . O.O Naruto’s sleep-words. . . . “He only feared that the blond would leave . . .” I hear that people are always anxious when they’re in love, but really, that’s more of something Naruto would have to worry about than Sasuke. . . . (*snicker*) Love how you slipped in that Naruto was waking up. . . . XD S’okay about the blond joke. Actually, that line Naruto said might just be a turn-on for Sasuke. . . . Love the awkward silence. And then the awkward offer. (!) . . . . Love the erotic description. . . . Ooh, I like this part: “Years of forcing himself into asexualness had taken its toll on the raven-haired man. He had forgotten this feeling of his youth, his puberty. He had grown out of it, or so he told himself.” It gives a really good feeling of what he missed out on, what he was forced to miss out on. . . . Once again, the slow erotic description is really good. . . . Aww, damn. No reciprocity? Darn it. . . . Love Sasuke’s concern at Naruto’s morning sickness. . . . (*snort*) “Would you like me to play the mother?” He’d probably be good at it, wouldn’t he. ^^ . . . . Love how Naruto even tried to compromise and Sasuke still said no. And then Naruto gets that look that “scared the Uchiha.” ^^ . . . . Heh. Trust Naruto to win.
    Yep, knew his appetite would grow. I can’t wait to see him get the cravings for other stuff. . . . “Looking for something for your wife’s morning sickness, dear?” I guess 18 isn’t young to get married in this world, is it. (*amused*) . . . . (*more amused*) This woman’s lecture. I like it. =) . . . . This’ll probably emphasize the fact that Sasuke should be there for Naruto even more, just in case his brother shows up. Naruto and the kids are his first concern, and if his brother does put in an appearance and Sasuke has to fight, it should be more out of defense rather than revenge. (I’m beginning to wonder if this woman in the pharmacy is a plant or something.) . . . . (!) The Yondaime. Uh-oh. . . . Small world. Wow. . . . “That was the first time he had ever been chewed out like that by anyone.” Yeah, and with hardly any prompting, considering how he’s such a jerk. It’s funny, how he hardly said or did anything to aggravate the average person, and yet he gets this. But it was good for him. This is probably one of my favorite scenes. =D . . . . Wow. Is he really going to tell Naruto? And how will Naruto take the news?
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 13: Oh jeez. . . . He would make up a song like that, wouldn’t he? ^^ Cute. . . . Poor Sasuke. (*smiles sympathetically*) The song is cute, actually, but I guess you can take it only so many times before it starts to grate on you. . . . Hah! Love how subtly Naruto flicked him off! XD . . . . Eight hours? Sheesh. õ_õ . . . . (*snort*) He does it on purpose. . . . Don’t read too deeply into it, Sasuke. He just came up with that “insightful” reason because you asked. His real reason makes the most sense to me, though. . . . I like the bits about shinobi getting power highs. . . . Love Sasuke’s mild curiosity about “How do you annoy people?” Cute. . . . Lol about that event with Shino. . . . Oh shit, don’t tell me they lost the tents in the river. . . . Heheheh, now they have to share a tent. . . . Oopsie: “After the tents were set up and supper was prepared and eaten [. . .]” One tent, remember? You mean “After the tent was set up [. . .]” . . . . Heh. They’re both embarrassed. . . . “not the warmest thing ever invented, nor the biggest.” Thus, logically, the two boys will most likely huddle together to stay warmer, and also to conserve space (though there will probably be a good amount of blanket-filching anyway). n_n . . . . “The raven-haired man then stripped down to his undershirt and boxers.” (*whistles appreciatively*eyes roam*) 6_6 . . . . “Something felt so right to Sasuke when he said that. Come to bed.” (*BLUSH*) . . . . Love that part. Naruto just studies Sasuke for a minute, then settles something internally, and cuddles up to Sasuke. ♥ . . . . “[. . .] know the good, the bad, even the ugly traits they had.” (*giggle*) . . . . This chapter was aptly named. ^_^ It’s very on-topic. . . . I like this scene of Sasuke just musing while Naruto’s curled up to him. . . . And it’s not too sudden. For some reason, I can accept this scene very well. . . . I really like the last couple sentences. ♥

    Lol about the ramen song. ^^
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 12: Hey, Sakura’s seeing them off! That’s nice! =D . . . . (*snicker*) Kakashi’s so-dry line. ^^ . . . . I’ll bet Naruto’ll get cravings for other stuff. . . . Heh! “I sealed the rest of my stuff in scrolls!” Clever. ^^ . . . . I wonder if Kakashi and Sakura are going to find out later. . . . Oh, jeez. She’s still pestering him about that. u_u . . . . (*giggle*) I think I prefer the idea that she just does it to annoy him. Though I can actually imagine Ino doing that more than Sakura. . . . Hmmm, Kakashi’s exit . . . I wonder what his gifts are. . . . No way. Somebody else probably wrote it. Hell, maybe Kakashi wrote it. (I don’t get where everyone gets the idea that Kakashi is a pervert, though. *thoroughly confused*) . . . . I wonder if the guys’ll end up showing their gifts later.
    Love the swirl of leaves. . . . Ooh, I like this! He doesn’t know what’s up, but he knows something’s up. =D . . . . I like how Kakashi is slowly walking through his thought processes. I can hear and see him doing it. . . . And I like his foresight. I’ll bet we’ll see Itachi in this story, and Sasuke’s choice put to the test. . . . Well, I know one thing I would like not to see: Jiraiya supportive of two men having sex. If anything, I like the idea that it might turn him green. ^_^ . . . . Ooh, yeah. I like the ending line of this scene . . .
    . . . and the beginning line of the next scene. Really good transition, there. ^_^ . . . . Yeesh, this kid’s a walking bust, isn’t he. Just goes to show how risky this pregnancy is for him. . . . I gotta say, Sasuke – Naruto’s got a point about the ground suddenly giving way. . . . Oh, shit. He’s gonna take off his belt – this could be bad. (*sweat*) . . . . Knew it. >.< . . . . Wow. Sasuke had a good point when he said, “You have to promise to be more careful from now on.” But Naruto’s feelings also make sense (though it sort of clashes with his attitude in the earlier chapter). . . . (*giggle*) “An asshole and a bastard.” “Maybe.” . . . . Well, that’s not too much to ask. (Yet.)
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2008
    Chapter 11: WARNING: More criticism than usual below; not all of it is very nice. (One of the problems of trying to be honest, sadly. *sigh*)

    The title sounds really good. =D
    Love the second paragraph. ^^ . . . . “[. . .] I would have left Konoha for good a long time ago.” I believe it, too. . . . Naruto had even got as far as packing his bags. Wow. . . . “I don’t need someone to want me, Sasuke.” Hate to say it, but I don’t believe that, and I don’t really think he’d even say that. He seems to know how much people need each other, and wouldn’t pretend otherwise. But anyways, I like Sasuke’s retort about using Naruto “as a scapegoat for all their problems.” . . . . Ahhhh, more like sacrifice. I see. . . . I’m a little impressed that Sasuke was even able to do that. . . . Hate to say it, but the “hatred of the villagers” seemed a bit overplayed if you ask me. And Naruto’s no saint. . . . Yeah, I’m with Sasuke on this one, Naruto. That is messed up. . . . Intelligence and empathy. Too much, if you ask me. . . . I do like Naruto’s lines: “There’s nothing fair about politics [. . .] Someone always has more power, and someone is always neglected because they’re the minority.” . . . . Naruto can be a martyr. . . . “The laws can be changed.” Ohhhh, good. I thought they couldn’t. . . . (*snicker*) “Not that it matters anymore now that you’ve already knocked me up.” X3 . . . . Heh. “It was then that it hit Sasuke.” BANG! Wake up! >w< . . . . “You’re not allowed to be all . . . expressive and shit.” XD

    Alright, I didn’t totally agree with this chapter, but it was alright.
    What would I like to see? Hmmm. Them having sex of course. (*cough*a LOT*cough*) And, uh, yeah. I can’t think of anything else now, but I’ll probably come up with something later. ^_^;
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  • From koorimesbabygurl on June 18, 2008
    awesome tsunade show konoha's whose the man...i mean woman woman ....lol...um yea glad to see you back in action and i must say things are starting to heat up wit our pair of lovers and i cant wait to read wat happens next. and great just wat we need the akatsuki are in town. damn cant out heroes get a break ^^ update soon i will be looking for it
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  • From bluegenjutsu on June 18, 2008
    I wonder what Tsunade's plan is? Sasuke and Naruto would never give up their babies to Danzo! Great new chapters!
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  • From ANON - Damp` on June 18, 2008
    Is she being serious about the mud cannon???!!!

    -Damp *sweatdrops. PS nice to see this story updated again!!!*


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