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Reviews for They Are Just the Cleaners

By : Raina

From ANON - akeria on March 29, 2011
awsome story cant wait to read more please update soon, love the way you captured sasuke spersonality
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From bloodshound on September 02, 2010
great stuffs... can't wait for more.
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From Management on September 01, 2008
Kabuto? Creeeeepy. Seriously! I love the beginning of the chapter though. Maybe the reason he became well... Creepy, is because he was called four eyes at school!!!! That would be... A very bad excuse actually...
So the stripper is Ino, easy enough, but I'm not quite sure who's with her. Choji? Maybe? Probably. I can't quite remember.
Oh, and I love the description of Gai and Tenten. That was the best.
And Orochimaru and Sasuke are coming aroud nicely I must stay. Still cold and Evil.
Poor Sakura though. I mean, I don't particularly like her in fanfics (although I do in the manga). I can't wait to see Sasuke's reaction when Naruto and Kiba come to dinner! That's going to be excellent!
Well, I'm glad you updated (I've been trying to imagin what would happen next all summer) and I have to say you're awesome. I mean, replying to reviews, and sending a message when you've updated! :O I am in awe!
Well, update soon! (please) XD I can't wait
XD LANE
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From Imagy on August 19, 2008
Another beautiful chapter, hun~!
I loved the interation between Sasuke and Naruto
and I must say that I was surprised
I did not think that it would go down like that
and I'm absolutely curious to see what will happen next!
'til next time, hun
~Nikki
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From ANON - Boo on August 09, 2008
You should write a book, I would buy it.
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From ANON - Lynn on August 06, 2008
I am squealing to the max!!!

I love this chpater so much, finally Sasuke and Naruto meet and Sasuke, what an asshole, LOL~ I can't believe Kiba held it together and I definitely can't believe that Naruto didn't hit him. I am starting to feel so bad for Sakura though, I couldn't be with Sasuke, no matter how much I liked him. Loved , whatever.

Kabuto is so damn freaky and so is Orochimaru!

Please update as soon as you can!
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From ANON - riddlestar on July 31, 2008
yay! you updated *giggle* and sweet heart i dont know whether its possible but it was worth the long wait. at first when you mailed the chapter to me, i was a bit rusty with story and what had happened before then, but i re read the whole thing, lol and i was reminded as to why i fell in love with this fic in the first place.

your writing is awesome as always. the attention to detail is amazing and honestly though i often get bored by most people's attempts at description, i find myself actually reading* yours and not skimming through it. for someone who has a low attention span, i think that shows how much i love this fic. *hug*

Kabuto is really creepy, i think ive mentioned this before but you've made the villains more formidable that they are in the manga. i and love that!! it just makes it all the more interesting.

oh, but the best part was the meeting of Sasuke and Naruto. it was perfect! They reacted to each other just as i expected them to. and Naruto was so adorable when he got so righteously anngry when Sasuke was rude to Sakura.

oh and that brings me to Sakura and Sasuke. wow, they really are one messed up couple. i actually feel sorry for Sakura and i felt like bonking her on the head and yelling at her to leave the sasujerk to Naruto to deal with! hehehe.

anyway, i could write more but i must go and do some homework. i cannot wait for the next chapter~ *muah*
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From spoon10488 on July 30, 2008
Awesome chapter. I loved the arguments between Naruto and Sasuke. They hadn't even known each other for 10 minutes they were ready to stab each others eyes out with spoons. Can't wait to read more.
=)
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From ANON - Lison Faye on July 30, 2008
Hey, welcome back from all the wood work. Once again though, hard work seems to be paying off pretty well with you. And, I'm glad you like my reviews.

I loved the opening scene, and the lookings into on the inner workings of Kabuto's mind. He's really underappreciated as a character in most of the fanfics that I've read, and it's nice to see some doing something with him.... other than being a lap dog that refuses to leave the presence of his master. Also, I thought Orochimaru was creepy before, but now I see him on a whole new level of creepy that only registers for one or two things that I had seen/read before. I love your take on who the characters are and how they would act in a situation that is in an alternate universe. I just realized that the common thing I'm always complimenting you on is character development. Understand something: to me a plot can be one of the best written in the world, but it is completely useless is there aren't good enough characters to back it up.

WOW! I got to say, that is some dark stuff that is rising up out of this growing plot. The new neighbor and the dojo move-in scene was just the right amount of humor to have a person come away from this chapter and not feel totally pessimistic, but at the same time it doesn't take away from the integrity of the other scenes. Also, with all the references now, I want to know whose picture was in the red envelope. Darn you for making you fic so addictive.

There's not much more I can say, other than keep up the spectacular work; I certainly have no complaints. Also, any further reviews you see from me will be signed Laurelle Sagara (which is my pen name on here, since I finally made an account).

Have fun and see you when you post another chapter.
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From ANON - IvvyMoon on July 29, 2008
Yeah! You finally posted. I was wondering if I'd somehow missed it or something. *does a little happy dance*

So first off, as a beta, I have to say that I noticed a few more things that I obviously missed the first time, but no biggie. Just a few comma things here and there. However, the spacing in between paragraphs changed a few times - which is totally weird - but all in all, I think lex(have no idea how to spell all her name) and I did an okay job. :)

Now as a fangirl, *SQUEALS*! It's about time you finally updated, woman! Have you started the next chapter yet? *pokes you* Haha, why do you know so much about pole dancing? What kind of research are you doing, Aikage?!?!?!?!? And the plot is moving along so nicely! Of course, Sasuke's being an absolute bastard - although the part where Sakura is dragging him away cracked me up - so I can't wait until Naruto shows him a thing or two. And the Orochimaru thing...eww...gross. And yet somehow titillating... Hmm....

Anywhoo, this was just as much fun to read this time around. I'm looking forward to more, more, more!
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From Management on May 29, 2008
Woot! I like the story! It's really aweome!!!
I can't wait for the next chapter... Will they be meeting? I suppose so.
Anyway, my email's blackasarose@gmail.com
And I really can't wait for the next chapter.
By the way, Sasuke is evil, cruel, and very very cold.
And Orochimaru is as scary as ever...
Good job!
XD
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From KageKitsuneXXX on May 23, 2008
Hey love,
So I finally got here, and managed to catch up with what you have written so far. It's a hell of a set up.
FBI, spy games, torture and all that jazz. I like that you are being careful to flesh out the story, instead of rushing things. That being said, I will be anxiously waiting for Sasuke and Naruto to finally meet up. I am curious as to how the first meeting will go, how you will go about building a relationship and also the nature of the relationship they will have.
I angsted hard at the Sasuke/Suigetsu, since I have labeled Sasuke's ass as belonging exclusively to Naruto. So there is simply no pleasing me on that front. I felt sorry for Sakura, being in that kind of relationship; but I completely buy into the dynamics of her marriage to Sasuke. I honestly can't imagine a marriage between the two going any better than that, despite knowing that Sasuke really does care for her.
Naruto as an FBI agent- I can dig it. The new rookie nine, the code names and Ibiki (got to have Ibiki there, man), it works. I am wondering if you did a lot of research, or are you winging it based on spy-thrillers. Either way, heck of an attention to detail.
There are some minor errors in some of the chapters, but nothing to call the FBI about, or Sasuke. He is a scary bastard, isn't he?
I give whole-hearted love to any story where Naruto is not portrayed as some idiot. So thanks for that, love.

So, bottom line so far: It's an interesting plot with great potential. I am hoping I will get pulled in as the story progresses. Update me when new chapters come out, I will keep reading and reviewing.

Much Love,
KK
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From bluegenjutsu on May 19, 2008
Thanks for the new chapter! Looks like Naruto and Sasuke are going to be neighbors! I'm glad that they are getting closer to meeting. Sasuke sure is heartless when it comes to torturing or killing people. It's hard to see how he can get away with it and not go to jail at least, at the end.
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From MichiTheThird on May 19, 2008
Come home and people whine* Bah, can't type. While I'm here though, do you have a mailing list for this fic?

yuurimaoh@gmail.com
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From MichiTheThird on May 19, 2008
Damn. This is getting good. Curse you for updating when I have to go to work. D: I know how Sasuke feels. One minute to breathe, come home and people white, sit down for a minute...and then you get called in to work. XD It's a vicious cycle. You can never really settle things with the people you live with and you never have time to do what you really want to do. Yep, I totally feel connected to Sasuke in this fic. I feel your pain, Sasuke! I'm feeling it! Lol
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