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From Kerrisa on March 11, 2008
Alas... the chapter ended. *Slumps shoulders in resignation*

But what an awesome chapter it was!

Itachi is a dick! A creepy sadistic needs-to-be-tossed-out-of-an-office-window Jerk! I don't like him one bit! Grrrr he's so frustrating! Playing with Sasuke and Naruto as if they were toys to be discarded! And Sauske! What was up with that cold exterior!? He could have given naruto at least one soft glance while Itachi was elsewhere =( But i suppose i get why he didn't.. but still.. Naruto was hurting =( *sigh*

Darn Zetsu! He's gonna get naruto and Sasuke killed! *throws a mini-tantrum* I have so much love for Deidara, but i'm afraid he's gonna get killed T_T Stupid Itachi bastard! Grrr!

Lol well needless to say, i have more worries and questions then anything! SO you must update as soon as your creativity allows you! or i may be forced to wallow in a pit of pitful dispair!

Tehehe Love yooz! *glomp*
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From CianisDeRolionus on March 11, 2008
WHOO HOO!!! Update!!! I am so very glad that you have found the time with such a busy schedule to post this chapter! I love this fic and have been waiting eagerly for the next chapter!!! I really had hoped you didn't abandon it! I am very glad to see you didn't!!! Wow it just gets better and better! I hope the Hyuugas can help Naruto and Sasuke!! So that they can be together foreverz and Sasuke doesn't have to be raped by Itachi anymorez!!! I cant wait for the next chapter!
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From Selenia on November 23, 2007
Oh man... Jane Doe's mystery is closing in!!
Great work as always. The new spin on things with Sasuke's painting was unexpected, and although it may be a good thing, I can see it being a trap... hope not ^_^.
Thanks for writing and letting us read it!
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From Kerrisa on November 22, 2007
Yay updates!!! *glomps Hyper-sama* Lol i already said so, but i'm getting very suspicious about this Jane Doe character >=| Lol not suspicious enough that imma pester you to tell me who it is but suspicious enough to let you know i'm suspicious!! >=O!! Lol I don't know what to think about Itachi, he's such a twisted psychotic pervert... why the hell does he want Naruto to paint a portrait of Sasuke? Maybe so he can spy on them and confirm his suspicions (there's that word again!!) that there's something going on? And now Naruto has some kind of plan? o.O Aye ya! The tension is building, yup yup, ya most definately got to clue in your devoted readers! Lol update soon and i'll bake you cookies!! Any kind ya like xD *lots of hugz* I enjoyed this chapter lots! =D Imma looking foreward to reading more ^__^
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From ANON - nb22 on November 22, 2007
So sad :(
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From on October 18, 2007
wow love your fic you've been doing a great job although i don't really like neji/naru i prefer sasunaru and i'm glad you have it like that. keep up the great work!
update soon!
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From blueh on September 27, 2007
mmm... beautiful! ^^ I really love your style of writing. it was worth the wait. I'm very eager to read the next chapter. ^^
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From siriusfasha on September 19, 2007
I started reading this fic today (yay for 19 straight err... or should i say gay chapters! ROFL). I'd definitely love your story, i never read anything like this yet. so yeah, it's definitely not a repetitive storyline for me. but OMG!! i'm sooooo torn up! NaruSasu and Uchihacest are definitely my top 2 favourite pairs in Naruto fandom. So, ughhh i dont know who i want Sasuke to end up with though i always believe that naruto is the best seme for sasuke. But i feel bad for itachi too. I think he does love sasuke in this story. he's just tooooo harsh.

I'm scared for DeiDei. I think he's fucked up. I just hope itachi dont kill him!!!! NOoooooooooo.

anyway, i'm definitely looking forward to the next update!! Good luck!!
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From Kerrisa on September 18, 2007
*bounces* Yay!!! I love updates!! I love Hyper-chan!! Oh happy Day!!! .. er.. Night >_>... uhm.. whichever! >__< Damn Itachi-bastard! But that wasn't the case..Itachi was being nice, and Sasuke mentioned that not necessarily being a good thing which makes me uneasy I hope Itachi doesn't know about him and Naruto >_
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From ANON - qwerty on September 18, 2007
Nice job. I like it.
update!
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From Dragon7 on September 18, 2007
Grate chapter!!!! I'm so happy that you are back and writing again. I can�t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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From ANON - LLB on August 26, 2007
Nothing is so embarrassing as commenting on someone else's writing errors and then finding tons of them in your own review... :p Sorry. :) Don't just disregard what I said because I said it less than perfectly. ;) I really did enjoy the story (I stayed up until 6am just to finish all you had!) and I hope you continue as soon as you can.
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From ANON - LLB on August 26, 2007
I enjoyed this story a lot. It's got an interesting plot and lots of unanswered questions. Because I think there's a lot of potential here I'll give you a real review rather than just say yippy, write more! :) Don't be offended, I wouldn't nitpick if I didn't care.

Sometimes I'm not sure I agree with your take on the characters, are they really the characters or is it just a name? I'm rather focused on Sasuke in the anime and manga so I can believe that others interpret the characters differently than I bother to, but it kind of seems like some people aren't really defined. On the other hand you don't want to just rely on standard identifiers like Kiba has a dog, that's what makes him Kiba. What makes him Kiba? I don't really know except Akamaru... Shikamaru seems pretty good, but is it just because he says things are troublesome? I think there's more to it than that, you've captured something about him even in a different setting that makes him seem like himself. Maybe Neji has changed a lot from Chunin exam times and I haven't seen the eps or read the mangas. Deirdara seems like a strange choice for Sasuke's confidant, but I mostly know him from his untimely demise at Sasuke's hands and this story was probably started before that. I'm not sure how much I'm pushing my own thoughts on who should be where (Deirdara should be an artist! He's so all about the art! Maybe he's Jane Doe? But with Kabuto it seems Orochimaru would be the obvious person... But that first painting description so made me think of Sasuke! When will Jane be revealed??? The little cameos of other characters back at the beginning were fun! I think I just have different favorites than you so while you're focusing on so and so I'm like hey what about this guy and it takes away from my enjoyment but that's not your fault.) and how much is you not defining the characters enough. Also, too much sobbing. Guys just don't sob. I can see it once in a while, at a really powerful moment, there can be some sobbing, but mostly, not so much, it just takes all the force out of the gesture and makes Naruto seem wimpy and unrealistically fragile. He made it through a crack whore mom etc with an enviable smile on his face but now he's sobbing repeatedly? That's not to say the tears are out of place all the time, but there's a difference between a few silent tears slipping out and sobbing. Pick one tragic moment and let it have sobs, otherwise they need to suck it up a bit more and act like men. I was happy to see Kisami finally show up, if anyone should be at Itachi's side it's him so it's nice to see him as the loyal henchman. :) I like your Itachi even if I don't know that I'd call him in character since he seems rather emotional at times. I can imagine if you transfered him to a corporate setting and didn't let him go wandering and being mysterious maybe we'd be seeing him being crazy and possessive of Sasuke. I'm pretty sure he's responsible for his parents deaths just to get back to abusing Sasuke... Will we be getting more of that back story?

From your author notes people have obviously already mentioned spelling or word choice issues so I won't go into that, I'll just say my desire to know what happens is greater than any pain caused by errors. I don't know if you mentioned having a beta, but you might want to consider it. Just having another set of eyes read over something can help pick out the little mistakes that throw a reader off.

As you see in my little rant above I definitely am enjoying the art stuff and am a bit on the edge of my seat waiting for everything to be revealed. That opening however many chapters back just sounded so awesome! I want to go to an art opening... :( You definitely make it more glamorous than my experience with high school art shows. :)

I think maybe you've strayed a bit from your original intentions. You've said a number of times you're just writing whatever comes to mind which is all fine and good, but you make it sound like you have no idea where you're going which causes some concern to me as a reader who doesn't want the story abandoned in the middle. :) On one hand I think you've definitely tied the car stuff into the story (I've had to look up images of each of the cars you mention so I see what they look like! PS sometimes you spell them wrong) and I feel a bit like they're scenes from a movie, but I wonder if they're actually doing anything to move your plot forward. Of course I don't know what all is involved in the plot so maybe they're crucial. And I suppose they make for more rounded characters if they have interests beyond their stated purpose (gallery owner, businessman, whatever), but I kind of like the stated purposes and want more on them.

Oh man, I stayed up all night reading this! I had many more thoughts as I read but it's way too late or early to be thinking of them anymore. I hope you update soon, and that I ever think to come back here since I'm not sure how I found your story. Would you mind dropping me a note to say you updated? Keep on writing!
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From Kerrisa on August 22, 2007
Hyper-chan!!!! Lol I've been so busy with school/work that when i get home all i want to do is go to sleep, so the other day before i headed out to school i printed out chapter 18 and took it with me to class xD I shrunk the text to size 8 and got rid of the borders (for the document), my comp gave 3 pages and i almost wept when i found the third page to be blank Dx!! The two pages i did have were fun to read tho (Neji attack!! Sweetness!!) and disconcerting ( who the hell is texting Deidara such obscure message!? >_
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From ANON - The update monster on August 21, 2007
This fic actually got me back into reading and checking AFF constantly. Your descriptions of paintings are so stunning and detailed, it's almost as if we don't need an imagination to see them, they paint themselves in our minds. The relationship between Sasuke and Naruto makes me want to jump into their world and defend them. I'm sure plenty of people agree with me. As for your update speed, it will do...for now. You use to update faster. I demand more!
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