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Reviews for Sanctuary

By : AkashaEmily

From ANON - ladymacabre on February 28, 2009
As much as it severely pains me to know that you’re discontinuing the stories Sanctuary and The Banks of the River Styx, more so the latter since it will not be rewritten anytime soon, I respect your decision since I myself am a graduating college student and do know how difficult it is to keep up with one’s academics when one is writing. Though I can’t admit to being a talented writer I can say without boasting that I know a good story when I see one and it has nothing to do with the amount reviews it receives. Your story sanctuary is a brilliant pearl in the vast sand and is my one of favorites. I find it perfect in every way and have been disappointed that it is severely lacking in reviews at fanfiction.net, I hope this was not one of the reasons that made you want to discontinue. I do apologize for not reviewing often, I was simply too caught up in reading your story and even though I know that’s not a good enough excuse my feelings are sincere.
In my opinion you’re writing is very eloquent and beautiful and your plots are exquisite so I was surprised to find out that you were disappointed in your work. I was jolted when I read your note and have been in shock all day, that’s how much I love your stories apart from it being well written it is one of the few reasons that have kept my wavering interest in naruto and fanfiction from disappearing. Still I wish you the best of luck and I will wait eagerly and anxiously for sanctuary 2.

Though I do hope that you will not alter its plot too drastically, I won’t begrudge you if you did, as much as possible if you can, please keep the plot wherein Naruto is abused, hated and becomes pregnant and maybe you can make the Akatsuki as his second family, instead of removing the Kyuubi from him they adopt him though that may seem ooc. Also I do hope that you include the scenes wherein Kisame and Itachi take care of him it’s rare that they are portrayed in a gentle light without being out of character. And above all please keep the scene where an injured and helpless Naruto pleads for a painless death from Itachi that without a doubt is your story’s most beautiful scene.

Also if it’s not too much trouble can you please post your authors note on F.F so that your other readers will be aware of your decision since I know that many are still avidly waiting for new updates and also so that they may send in their requests or ideas for your future story.
Take care and I do hope that someday you will be able to finish all your stories and when that time comes I am still an avid fan of naruto. May the muse of your art never leave you and may it constantly inspire you to create beautiful stories. Sincerely your loyal reader
LadyMacabre

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From pichugirl17 on January 26, 2009
So does this mean that Kana is dead? o.o
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From ShadowofLight on January 11, 2009
I am so glad I found this story but, I'm sorry but... I'm really confused. I'm trying to get what's going on but from chapter 7 to 9 I am confused. What is going on? Other than that this is good and I'm glad that whore pink bitch is suffering and frankly, I hope Konoha is burned to the ground hte Hokage mountain crushed into dust. For waht they've done, it has no right to remain standing or to be known ever again.
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From ANON - Sara on January 02, 2009
I love your story and I do hope you continue writing. And I'm not just writing this because you requested it. I really do look forward to every one of your updates. I just wish you'd update more frequently.
Sara
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From serenagold on December 02, 2008
Wow... redeemed and still evil! I think the newly risen godhead Kyuubi is going to be fast on its way to becoming a demon once again if it keeps up its plans of revenge.
Naruto needs to reclaim himself and take back control.

Keep up the awesome work!
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From ultistarmon on November 27, 2008
I'm thinking that Minato should be attached to a different bird. It might just be me, but a seagull doesn't convey Yondaime-ness very well. Your story is very much awesome!! Though I wonder what on earth made Jiraiya do THAT to Naruto. I still can't decide if Kyuubi is being evil or not. I hope to see more of this great stuff soon!!
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From Gwyllion on November 27, 2008
Oh yay!! An update! D:

I've been dying for this for a long LONG time. I had to go back and reread everything once more to grasp onto the storyline. And once more.....I had soaked my entire tissue box. The angst got to me bad...and I love every minute of it. Thank you so much for continuing this piece. Can't wait for more. Especially now that Naruto is with child, I want to see how Sasuke will react to this. Poor Naruto...he's been through so much.
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From CrazyInsane88 on July 13, 2008
i love this story and hope you continue it i find it really well written and it really grabs one's attention
do you have any artwork to show the changes in appearances? and is Kisame still male or was he turned female as well?
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From Rockyshores on July 08, 2008
I just found this story, and I absolutely love it. In most cases with stories in which Naruto has been abused the author makes him Mary-sueish and therefore very irritating, but you have managed to pull this off very nicely. I also find myself totally in love with Kisame's character, which I haven't been before. I wish I could help you with your story, but unfortunately I have my own huge undertaking to consider and thus am unable. Good luck, though, and I hope you find someone to help!
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From ANON - JadeTiger on July 07, 2008
To much and a bit to vague.

It took me a couple of read threw to actually understand what had happened. When I first went threw it I thought Itachi was waking up in the tunnels of Naruto’s mind. Then the room with the doctors and the flash back of the ANBU and the Hokaga had me thinking either they are in naruto’s mind and this is what he’s seeing, or itachi is picking up images from nartuos mind as to what HE thinks is going on around him?

Then this ‘thing’ pops up and another random character drags them off and .. attacked by ANBU?? Hun? Where they come from?
And how come Tsunade doesn’t seem to know about that later on? And why is there a dog demon thing?
And why are they on some stereotypical island in the middle of nowhere with some monk guy who knows the secret of the universe? Let me guess, he’s some kind of demon thing too right?(please tell me I’m wrong)
And what happened to the nurse back at the hospital?
And how did itachi end up out in the hallway in the first place? And ANOTHER Sauke/Naruto dream?
They are getting redundant after the first one and the sex part.
And why is itachi standing naked on the beach following a hallucination of the Fourth Hokage?
And what happened to the other characters in the waiting room at the hospital? You seemed to put a lot into their development just to toss them out after a few chapters.
You’ll probably have more of the special skill that Naruto was talking to Sasuke about come in to play later on down the road, I can’t wait to se how that turns out!

And I’ll just be honest, I hate Pallas and her brother. I hate fics that add more demons or beats or creatures to things that don’t need it. It just takes away form the ‘specialty’ the original 9 beast have.. It’s like having a child jump up and down screaming ‘I’m special to!”

I don’t mind Itachi’s and Kisame’s …’new looks’ though not my favorite, I’ve read worse. (kisame will always be blue in my eyes). I can’t see how your gonna make Naruto and itachi hook up now though… unless you turn this Yuri… or give him back a dick later on… (and NOT a strap on!)
I cant believe you actually knocked Naruto up though. I’ll have to wait and reserve my judgment on that after I see how you play this out.

I never intended for this review to be a flame, but this chapter has so many holes to me it’s like Swiss cheese. Not just ‘plot’ holes but like… detail, and explanation on scenes and acting events. And a change of background that basically says, ‘ok disregard everything in the last 7 chapters except emo Naruto and off we go again!’

I do blame most of my reaction on my own expectation of this story. I wasn’t the most patient fan of yours waiting for an update and finding myself literally checking every day to see if you updated. My expectation were put way to high by my own imagination of what the next chapter might be about, basing it off the first 7 chapters. I was expecting more character and plot development, rather then a couplet overhaul of the story direction.

I felt this chapter really took it out of the ‘naurto’ world completely and its now more of an AU fic.

I know its not right to voice such an opinion on something your working so hard on which is suppose to be ‘your’ entertainment more then mine.
And I have no right to put pressure on you to create something that will please everything single person who reads this fic. (its not possible I know!).
And I hope my big mouth won’t stop you from continuing to write and develop this story which I know many do love so much.

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From ANON - lonelylulaby on July 07, 2008
Wow, this story is just getting better and better. I wonder how Kyuubi could have missed one of the sperm she was trying soo hard too.
Also I can't wait till Kisame and Itachi have their little talk, cause I want to know what the opposite of a demon is.

ja ne till next time and keep up the good work

p.s. can't wait for your other stories either, but take your time I'll be there when they're updated
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From snnj11220 on July 07, 2008
Wow I really love how you've written Itachi and Kisame, especially this chapter its one of the best ones yet and very well written. I think you are one of the few people who actually bothered to give Kisame's character some depth so he doesn't come across as just some sidekick. Anyway loved everything about this chapter and how everything played out!

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From serenagold on July 06, 2008
Ok, first up, congrats to Trulywicked for second place. I like her updated colored version. ^^

Secondly, what the hell? I won the contest and you didn't tell me? I'm all like, "who won?" Then saw it was me in your profile. Thanks for the update. >:P lol When its all said and done, you need to send me a pic of you wearing your shirt. You've got my email. (You can thank me by updating Bared Naked. hehehe)

Third: Yay! Updates!!! I had to read the whole Sanctuary story through in one sitting since its been a while and enjoyed every minute of it. So Naruto and Kyuubi merged? Or something similar? This is an incredibly awesome turn of events. Kana turning out to be a guardian spirt was a bit of a surprise but an interesting one, none the less. The more Naruto comes out of his/her shell, the better this story will get. He seriously needs to have a one to one with the fox to discuss whats going one once he gets his head straightened out. Oh yeah, and Female Itachi and non-sharked out Kisame?? Its truly hilarious. The chapter got a bit confusing there for a minute or two, but I'm sure it will clear up as the story goes on; your stories usually do. What was up with that bit about Minato though? I kind of love the fact that Itachi is remembering his encounters with Naruto back when he was still a leaf-nin, but I'm still a bit confused here and there as to where all the pieces fit.

Either way, excellent update. Keep up the (as always) fantastic work. =^^=
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From Gwyllion on July 06, 2008
OH WOW!! An update! Thank you so much! I teared up so badly here on this one. You did such a beautiful job. It filled my heart with so much angst and sadness. Poor Naruto! I really hope Sasuke can bring him back to himself. Those dreams between those two were so heartwrenching. *shows soaked tissues as proof* Dear lords.....I can't wait to read more! I can def see your hard work in this, and hearing that you have 5 different versions of this...I'm not surprised. it must've been difficult to decide what is best. But once again, wonderful job! And thank you so much for updating! This has GOT to be one of my favorite fics of all time!
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From ANON - animelover on July 06, 2008
well, this was a weird read ... COOL!!!!!! i'm kinda getting used to the kisame/naruto interaction. still a little confused but am getting the hang of it bit by bit.

see ya! oh, and sasuke's nightmare was an awesome piece of writing. ;-)
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