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Reviews for Blackmail and Betrayal

By : Zrina

From marquesgue1 on June 10, 2007
Whoa - man things are not going well for either of the boys :s and Orochimaru made my skin crawl with what he said to Naruto, he really did *shudders* anyway :D cool chp. heh and I'm glad you decided to continue it because it's really interesting, it's a different take on them and you do it well ^_^

Hina xXxx
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From Allys on June 09, 2007
Damn, Wow - YAY!! I'm so excited!! This is really really Good. As usual you exceed my expectations XD. I like how you structured the base and that part of Naruto's life. And as usual Orochimaru is fabulously Horrible. I feel really bad for Ino, but damn, please don't let Oro get his hands on Naruto O.o ick ick, eeeww, bad images :S must. cleanse. brain. Sasuke bathroom scene. Sasuke all hickeyed up and remembering the feeling of being fucked, oooh :drool, nosebleed: That did it. That was so fucking HOTT, omg, hell even the sex with Sakura was strangely satisfying XD. Maybe cause he was picturing my fav blond :D That was awesome by the way, LOL. I'm also really glad Sakura fought him - Good on her, you made her a stand up chick. That's not something I usually associate with Sakura, at least when it comes to Sasuke. I have to disagree with her though - doomed to have vanilla missionary sex forever. I think, I'd die. Of boredom O.o. Are there really girls like that out there? I have to ask because I don't know any. I've met some that come close, but even they have a little wild in them, at least enough to change position! LOL, poor Sasuke - RUN, Baby! The hills are that-a-way -----> [ Mount Naruto ] pun fully intended XD. LOL, now comes the hard part - I have to be patient :(. LOL it's cool I can handle it. Thanks so much for the update Love, huggles and luffles, Ja, Allys.
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From Bluesake on June 09, 2007
Yay! you are gonna continue it. haha sasuke! love it keep going!
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From BishounenKrazed on June 09, 2007
oh that was so good!! i think this story is going to be another masterpiece on your part. i'm so excited about it! and when naruto thought that it could be just that easy to blackmail, betray, and gain freedom, i was so hoping that he had the idea to either blackmail orochimaru, or blackmail sasuke into helping him rather than doing it for orochimaru. i know this is going to be super sweet. and i know it might just be the sasuke-naruto fangirl in me, but i seriously hope that sasuke drops sakura soon. just get it over with. DROP HER.

anyway, i look forward to the next chapter! good luck!
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From Pho on June 09, 2007
Oh, I like this. I've read some detective fanfiction before, usually all having the exact same plot. But yours is so much more original. It's well written, well thought out, and still in character. To think I have to wait for two weeks before I get another chapter...oh the agony. But I think I'll survive somehow, as long as you DO update. Anyway, keep up the good work. You're a pretty damned good writer.

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From bluegenjutsu on June 09, 2007
Well that was a great chapter despite the SasuSaku sex in it. Poor Sasuke has it bad for Naruto! I can't wait till they meet again!! :)
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From DevilnBlue on June 09, 2007
That was simply amazing and the story held me spellbound from start to finish. Aww poor Sasuke is unsatisfied and that will ulitmately leave to his ruin unless Naru-chan has something up his sleeve. I can't to see what happens next. And is like Ino on drugs or something? I mean I heard of people being dependent on others but this seems far beyond the call od dependency. It's like she's high... why else wouldn't she know her cousin was in that room worried about her. She's like a vegatable. But I guess I'll have to wait and see what happens next.
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From Adi on June 09, 2007
lol your eyes might light up when you get a review, but it's just me giving you the same one so it's an official one XD

Ok review as I read once again XD

I love all the descriptions at the beginning, some readers may not appreciate it, but it really sets the scene for me

I vaguely know who Karin and others are from the manga because I don�t read it, but some spoilers are just there so can�t really comment on their ICness. The conversation between the S guy and Naruto made me smirk though, �loose ass� made me laugh at the visual image of it XD

Oooh I like what you�ve done with Ino, lol you know it only just hit me that she�s Naruto�s cousin because of the whole blonde hair, blue eyes thing *idiot*

Hints of OroNaru, oh that�s worse than Uchihacest!

I see the situation you�ve put Naruto in, it�s pretty difficult for the poor boy, since he�s a hero at heart!! Aw you write Naruto angsting really well, especially since he�s agnsting for someone else and not himself, Naruto wouldn�t angst about him self *babbling*

SASUKE JERKING OFF IN FRONT OF A MIRROR! Where do you come up with this stuff? O_O seriously.

Mm Sasuke�s already hooked on Naruto, you can�t deny it Sasuke, hand your ass to Naruto, by right, it belongs to him.

I love that Sasuke is imaging Naruto while smexing Sakura. It�s practically canon!

�That�s it, little slut, take my cock!� Oh he�s gonna get beaten� O_O

I liked the argument between them too, it sounds pretty much how a relationship between the two would go. *nods* I�m actually quite proud of Sakura, even though she�s in love for Sasuke, she knew what she wanted and she stood by it. So exit Sakura enter Naruto? *looks imploringly at Zrina* *sigh* yes I know, silly Adi for jumping to the smut, the smut will come later, plot comes first XD

*hugs you to death* (ok not completely to death, we need Zrina alive to lead the NaruSasu revolution XD) I honestly am over the moon you decided to continue this, and I firmly believe it�s because I begged and not because of the other 40 reviewers *wishful thinking*

*loves on you*

Adi XX

ALSO I was thinking about this story, and this is just me wondering what kinda plot would unfold, would Naruto try to blackmail Sasuke, and then they some how hatch out a plan to blackmail Orochimaru, and then it backfires because Naruto betrays Sasuke for some reason because Orochimaru binds him to him some other way?

Oh I don't know I'm just very tired from work :( and I'm hungry and bah! *goes off to sulk*

lol I LOVE YOU!
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From Jelp on June 09, 2007
Hmm...it'd be interesting if Sakura ended up knowing Naruto and Ino when they were little. Naruto goes to find Sasuke to make him get Ino away from Orochimaru, and instead, Sakura recognizes Naruto, and they start talking. Thus, an utterly jealous Sasuke! Or not...I love your stories, and I love all the possibilities that you create that make me keep on guessing. Another great chapter! Keep up the excellent work. ~ Jelp
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From ANON - beautifullove348 on June 09, 2007

Oh my god! That was just so amazingly fantastic! Yes, me too i don't condone SasuSaku but for the developement of the story I accepted it :P Anyways I feel so bad for Naruto and Ino And I REALLY hope that when you made Naruto say ' it was that easy'...I REALLY REALLY hope you are going to make him betray Orochimaru and notSasuke. ACK! The suspense is killing me!!! This is a fantastic story and with only two chapters it is already one of my favorites! PLease update soon and keep up the excellent writing job!
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From onobaby on June 05, 2007
Coool. what a great start to what could be a really good fiction. I love fiction's where sasuke and naruto see each other on the side. nobody can get between these boys. Looking forward to next chappie
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From ANON - armina on June 01, 2007
Okay, I like that. I like that a lot. If/when you have the time/incentive to continue it, please, /please/ do! That was really good and you left it on a damned interesting note.
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From ANON - kaesaku on May 30, 2007
huwhaat?!
one-shot?!
noooooooo~!
please, please.. a sequel!
it's so good, ii deserves one!
^_^
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From Bunni07 on May 29, 2007
Oh wow!! You're friggin' amazing!! ^_^ I wana run up and hug the life out of you! There are so many yet so few of great great NarutoxSasuke fics out there....and I've been wanting to find another awesome story to read and have it worthy of waiting for!! ^_^ HERE IT IS!! YAY!! I only have 4 right now, counting this and SoD..! Thanks so much for sharing this, we're all excited for the next update!!
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From PassionHeart on May 28, 2007
I must say this was good. I am not sure if you sould continue, its hard to say. I personaly would like you to continue in respect to seeing an out come of what happens to sasuke and naruto. It would be cool to see you find a way to get them together. So if you continue good luck and I wish you the best.
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