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Reviews for Blackmail and Betrayal

By : Zrina
  • From Adi on July 07, 2007
    WAH! I added more on but AFF decided to cut it off, *kicks it*

    uh anyway, I reread the edited version like 3 times and I still couldn't find the differences because my mind kept going all mushy brained XD I can't remember what else I wrote but it was definately a lot of fangirling XD lol if I was your beta you'd have to sack me, I'd never spot the differences when you've written smut *one track mind* XD

    need water again. XD

    Have fun at the party!
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  • From ANON - hina88 on July 07, 2007
    O_O

    O_O...i think... i'm dying of blood loss here...I can't even believe my computer's still working. That was just WHOA

    *composes self* right uhh, the review lol well no need to tell you that was hot as hell as you probably know that already. What I will say is that I hope Kabuto dies a very very painful death along with Orochimaru - but if you can't fit that into the story (when you know it reaches the part where you wanna take care of the pricks) some pain at the very least would be very appreciated for what they're doing to Ino and Naruto *glares* bastards!!! *sigh* seems like this fic really isn't going to be an easy ride but XD that just makes it even better heh

    Thanks for the update and can't wait for the next one ^_6

    Hina xXxx
    (p.s. sorry for rambling lol)
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  • From Adi on July 07, 2007
    Hey hon, erm I read that end scene too many times to count XD I think that scene is a close second to the first smut in SoD, freaking good

    “when everything in his little world came to a complete halt” lol! that made me laugh at Sasuke being dumbstruck at the sight of Naruto when he was fully dressed, hot description of Naruto though all suave and cool, Naruto will slip at some point though XD

    It’s a good thing you put all the plot stuff at the beginning of the chapter otherwise I wouldn’t have a clue what was going on if you put smut first, I’d just be rereading the smut :D

    KAKASHI! you knew it was coming, that little scene with him was priceless, I love his sales pitch, so freaking funny (YAY FOR ORANGE LUBE! mmm XD)

    You see even though you’d already told me just how the scene was going to be set up, my mouth dropped open just like Sasuke’s did when I read about how Naruto was positioned. lol! I love that Naruto is such a tease. Wonder where he gets that from *squints at the author* XD

    Everytime I go back to remember something I wanted to comment on, my mouth goes all dry again, the smut is literally hypnotising, I need this brain! I do! It’s vital that it stays functioning XD

    “They both moaned as those tanned digits disappeared into tightly encasing heat” Ok it’s not just them moaning as that happened, it’s every single fangirl reading it

    LOL! and Sasuke thinking he had control! XDXDXD silly boy. Neon pink. *snickers* it’s neon pink and it’s still really fucking hot. It still cracks me up that when Naruto asked to be turned on that Sasuke automatically went to his pants, seriously, my mind is screaming at me to stop laughing and get on with reading smut. Adi wanted smut and she’s pretty damn pleased.

    “While that is very hot, that’s not exactly what I meant,” I LOVE NARUTO. Your torturing of him in this fic is completely forgiven with this smut. Naruto can learn to take the pain, he gets to screw with Sasuke :D

    I need water.

    And then enter in the remote control. I’m so glad you let Sasuke play with it. I love that they’re watching each other. This is the hottest smut, and I still can’t believe they haven’t touched. They haven't touched and it's as good as if they had touched! O_O!

    Good finishing line, you know why? because I WANT MORE. lol I think the more you write the more I want. I’m such a demanding fangirl. The world needs a Zrina strapped to a computer desk. Mm yeah. Definitely
    *squeezes the life out of you* SMUT SMUT SMUT.
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  • From Kimra on July 07, 2007
    Okay I give up. I put my faith in you from now on and I'm just gonna read anything your write. I read the first scene for this story ages ago (as in the first segment - I can't recall if it's all a single scene or not) and I loved it. But didn't want to read the story when you added more becaues I was concerned it would be all about Naruto being a bit more of a bastard than he should be and somehow sex and love and all that would end up interwined, but I suspected it would be more deceptive.. or something. I didn't think I'd be happy with it. But I read it today despite everything and am happy to say I'm overjoyed with it. :D

    This was... as always brilliant, and well constructed, and I still like Naruto which is always important. :P Was a bit distrubed by and skiped through the Asuma blow-job scene... But that's not the point. :P I love this story, and I look forward to future updates. :D

    Kimra
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  • From llyoung on July 07, 2007
    Really enjoyed Naruto "dance". Thanks for the chapter.
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  • From Allys on July 07, 2007
    Holy Shit Zrina!! That was... Gah!! :faints from the hawtness: :blink blink: you're just trying to kill me, in the most pleasurable of ways XD. Damn. I can't even think to give a proper review, I've been staring at this stupid screen for about 9 mins now, and I just keep flashing back, and embellishing :drool: LOL. God, :shakes head: Thanks for the update sweetheart, I think I'll revisit it XD.
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  • From ANON - fangirl on July 07, 2007
    NO!! NO!! IT ENDED TOO SOON...MORE! NEED MORE! LOL Seriously, nice as all your smut is, I was really looking forward to those two actually planning and working together. You make them such a great team in SoD so I can't wait to see them actually interact a bit like partners here. As always, can't wait for the updates, with this or SoD...thanks!!!
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  • From ANON - amberblood on July 07, 2007
    *dies of bloodloss* not only is this incredibly hot, I'm loving the plot as well. Please continue! This is too good to be one of those fics that dies away only half finished!
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  • From Rosebud on July 07, 2007
    OH FUCK!!! THAT WAS HOT!!!
    PLEASE update soon!! I need more of this story. It's definitely one of my favorites!!!!

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  • From ANON - beautifullove348 on July 07, 2007
    Whew!! **Wipes sweat off forehead** That was hot, hot, HOTT!! Now the story is definitely getting VERY interesting! I love how it is developing and I love your usage of description. It allows me to picture the scenes in PERFECT **Wink** detail. Somebody got a fan around here?? PLease update soon :)
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  • From Pho on July 07, 2007
    Haha, what a wonderful way to end it. That was really hot. I shouldn't read stuff like this so early in the morning. Now I'm going to have mushy brain for the rest of the day. Good chapter, I hope that together they can totally bring down that Oro bastard. And I hope they do other stuff together too....yum. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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  • From Onawa on July 02, 2007
    OK, I've just read everything you have posted on AFF. Each story is tight, and you usually have me hooked on the first chapter. This story is tight, dark and compelling. I am looking forward to see where you take this. Also can't wait for the next chapter of SoD.
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  • From onobaby on June 28, 2007
    "His sinuses had felt fucked up for days afterwards"---Christ! Is that fucking possible. I totally got the most vivid, mental picture of that. I laughed so hard. That shit was C.R.A.Z.Y. At least he didn't fuck him in the ass. Naruto would probably have to do more than breathing exercises for that one...probably have to learn yoga or some shit. Dude...is Sasuke a little bit of a kinky bastard in this one? I feel kink in the future...Hmmmm? Little spanking action or some HANDCUFFS (waggles eyebrows). Looking forward, as always, to next update.
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  • From ANON - dangerprawn on June 26, 2007
    *ahem* I was staring at the screen and once I realized what was happening it was too late. I drooled all over my keyboard. No joke. Hahaha... your writing is damn good.
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  • From kaesaku on June 25, 2007
    nice!
    good chapter~
    m'excited as to what naruto'll plan w/ orochimaru..
    write soon!
    ^_^
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