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Reviews for Better to Reign in Hell than Serve in Heaven

By : Bouji

From ilovenaruto on July 12, 2007
hey! I read that you were looking for somebody to Beta your story. If you would like I would be happy to help you. I am a 3rd year English major so it wouldn't be a problem for me, and I have loads of extra time on my hands for the next year that I wouldn't mind taking on a new project. Anyway I love the story, it is so much fun to read. I am not sure if you will see my email address, if not email me at av9965@wayne.edu
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From DeviousLilDevil on July 11, 2007
"Will be with Naruto:
Ibiki, Orochimaru, Manda, Kabuto, Kakashi, Yamato, Raido, Asuma, Hidan, Kakuzu, Zetsu, Itachi, Kisame, Leader-sama, Tobi, Sasori, Juugo, Suigetsu, Kidomaru, Sakon, Ukon, Kimimaru, Baki, Kankuro, Gaara, Yura, Shino, Kiba, Neji, Shikamaru, Rock Lee, Chouji, Sasuke, Sai, Zabusa, Haku, and maybe more as I am still considering the 11�s parents. (See, there are reasons I can�t put pairings up"

not only are you giving us nice long chapters with a very interesting storyline so far, but you're planning pairing naruto up with almost every availible male in the series ... i wonder if you could possibly comprehend how much i love you right now? needless to say, i look foward to your next update.
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From Cepheus on June 27, 2007
i knew this chapter would need a review on its own O.o holy shit, this was O.O *shakes head*

so it's tsunade in your fic the cause of haya-chan's coughing? *feels a bit cheated since she usually likes tsunade* your portrayal of the three sanning grows steadily clearer and more detailed each chapter. you actually made them all sound like real ninjas. O.o awesome *the real sannin are quite... unusually... er... anyway*

though this chapter had a few more grammar mistakes, i wonder if you can search for a BETA. i have some, it's not hard to find one. i'd suggest i could help you, but english is not my first language, so i'd feel pretty bad if i were not to help you through the whole thing without a hitch.

anyway. surely everyone getting it on naruto seems quite one-sided with their mind. hell, hayate and genma are both hoping to get laid (genma i am sure, doesn't even know he wants to bed naruto, too). XDXDXD

for the pairings, with such plot development and characterization, i'd rather have naruto and his inibitions as helping for some stable "friend with benefits" decisions instead of mutual love relationship. naruto seems a bit too.. not innocent per se, but oblivious to what love would feel like and such.

i think he'd go more for sexual relief (something i think he's never had the pleasure to indulge into, himself. knowing only how to please, and not how it feels to be pleased... hmmm) and even if he were to end up with someone, i dont think he'd drop his many friends with benefits.

it's one of those fics i love the most though ;3 i am glad i stumbled upon it. ^^ i wonder if you could consider, since your comment on kakuzu (sorry, but i love him so much) some itachi naruto interaction as well. mostly for the stoicness of the thing, but itanaru is my OTP XDXDXD

aanyway. i don't know what your ryhythm for updating is, but... update as soon as you feel up to? ^^

SOY/MF

PS= forgot to ask you if kakashi will appear. forgot some other thing. but... i forgot.

PPS= =_= chapter three's title reminded me of a comic i saw with kisame and itachi fighting at battleship (dunno the english name for the game though, darn)... *cheap but fun all the way XD* "damn, you sunk my battleship" XDXDXD *snickers as she saves the fic in a link she can check for updates later on*
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From Cepheus on June 27, 2007
ok, i had to stop reading at the fourth chapter because I had to review. i simply had to. i don't understand why you don't get thousands reviews. i mean, this is genial.

and if goes off with many of my favourite characters that are not that popular amongst readers and writers, such as Izumo, Kotetsu, Genma and Hayate. I'd like to see Raidou and Ibiki too... *ish in love with all of them*

so as i caught on, this takes in a rather AT world, where orochimaru never left konoha, and where things seem to be really different from canon. there were some things rather confusing in the first chapters, such as why naruto would have to be examined by the Sannin (but i liked that part anyway).

most of what you wrote was really promising, and i can't wait to see how things develop with naruto (i love him so much). even though, he's been away this much but he still has his birth-whiskers, someone is bound to recognise him or something.

but i love his slightly manipulative, slightly innocent but mostly not attitude. with jiraiya, with izumo, and now with genma and hayate, too. i wonder if even ebisu will relent. (at first i hated ebisu but now i like him a lot). and i wonder when naruto will see iruka again.

also, i wonder, since naruto seems to have been placed with the younger bunch of pre-genin, if any of naruto's same-age batch will make an apparition in this fic. not that i miss them, the presence of all the adults make me go giddy in happiness, but still the curiosity is there. i'd like shika to be there, for the others, i can do without just as well. ^^

gaara is still kazekage? that's great. so his father's death. i wonder what happened to make him take the position in there, since he's never met with naruto.

jiraiya's relationship with naruto seems a bit complicated and twisted. but since i can see naruto with basically anyone without stomach problems (apart Gai and the third Hokage, of course), i don't mind. about iruka's own relationship with naruto, i wonder what will be like now. naruto needs a real father figure, and it might help his messed up thoughts.

so, all of this and i still have one chapter to go. wonder what akatsuki will do. gods, the fact that you said most unusual people will go for naruto is making me giddy. uke!Naruto in ICism is what i love the most, even with strange crack pairings. i love him basically with everyone, even if with some other pairings i reserve to like one alternative only (like zabuza, i only like him with haku, but i don't mind seeing haku with naruto, or something but still).

i wonder if suigetsu will be there. he's the only one from the newest characters (after kakuzu-my-love and hidan) that i really enjoy. =_= heh. i hate karin. sorry if you're a fan of hers.

anyway, all of this, adding a good grammar work, awesome characterization and description, makes of this fic something i can't wait to read more about. i mean it. i love this fic. it's unusual and... awesome.

thanks for writing, and gambatte. ^^

SOY/MF/Ceph

PS= off to enjoy the last chapter.^^
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From littleolmee on May 20, 2007
Interesting chapter, seems like all the ninjas are interested in Naruto. Will Naruto start going without his mask soon? What about the other rookie ninjas from the series, will they be making an appearance? The name you are looking for is Teuchi and his daughter; who helps out at the shop is Ayame. Hope that helps. Thanks for the update, keep up the good work.
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From swordheartoftheforest on May 19, 2007
I give you props for the Paradise Lost quote as the title. Seriously. That is ultimate win.
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From DeviousLilDevil on May 18, 2007
wow, this is really good. im very proud of the fact that you made izumo and kotesu naru's frist buddies. i look foward to your next update.
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From blackpanzer on May 18, 2007
This was a very good update. I loved what you had Naruto say to Ebisu. I had always found it to be hilarious when Naruto would humiliate him in the anime. I am also glad that I had gotten the correct answer to your first challenge. So my pairing choice is, GenmaxNaruto. Though as I was thinking up pairings, I had wondered if you would except a three person pairing. If so my choice is for GenmaxHayatexNaruto, if not then never mind. As for your second challange, I believe the answer has to do with the meaning of Kotetsu's name, which stands for 'steel'. As steel is a main componet in the structure of battleships. Hopefully my answer is correct. I look foward to your next update, until then ja ne! =^,^=
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From blackpanzer on May 16, 2007
This is really good. I love how you changed the story line. It gives it an interesting twist. Also as to the guess of what your name means, my guess is, 'one's dead child' or 'sex/lovemaking'. At least that is what my dictionary came up with. I look foward to your next update, until then ja ne! =^,^=
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From on May 15, 2007
Yay, another update. I love powerful Naruto. Especially when its secret. Just knowing he's more powerful is so hot. hehe. I love it. Update soon please.
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From akume on May 15, 2007
I like it. It's certainly different. Anyway, please continue. Ja.
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From Finnel on May 15, 2007
~smiles~ this looks like it could be very interesting.
i hope to see it up-dated soon.
luck!
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From on May 15, 2007
Oh. I really like it. I can't wait to see where this is going. Keep updating i'll keep reading.
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