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Reviews for The Only One

By : Rokugatsu
  • From InsaneSeaTurtle on July 17, 2008
    Your overall story idea is good. The only thing that really bothers me is the abruptness with which everything happens and the way nobody uses their common sense (example: Gaara hasn't come back, better go check. It takes more than a few minutes to rape someone. Or, in the previous chapter, Dad's got a pillow on Gaara's face, let's just stand here and watch.) Also, your sentences are very choppy and sometimes confusing to read.

    Other than that, it's pretty good. Go you.
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  • From katsuyo on July 10, 2007
    wow - this story kinda reminds me of the opera Elektra in that it has the benchmarks of greek tragedy written all over it.
    The heroine is not unlike your portrayal of Gaara in that they both never seem to catch a break for too long before something sinister happens to them.
    I have enjoyed reading this but I must admit that I have felt my interest wane slightly as I read later chapters as I have noticed that Gaara's character has not developed much further than the helpless victim.
    I am not getting a true sense of him rising above extreme hardship here... the story, particularly in the later chapters just seems to floundering with no true direction.
    I am curious as to how you plan on ending this story because even Elecktra, despite the rapes, loss of family and her sanity...managed to find redemption in the end.
    Good luck on future chapters for this story and thanks for reading my 2 cents worth.

    sincerely,

    katsuyo

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  • From Amarukoira on April 28, 2007
    FIRST REVIEW!!!!!!! FUCK YEAH!!!!!!
    I lurve this story omg!
    Itachi is such an evil S.O.B!!!!! I want to choke him and say, "Get the fuck off poor little Gaara!" I also like that there are other characters then just Neji, Gaara, Naruto and Sasuke. Hell yeah! Kiba!
    Kankurou! I missed you so much *Glomp*
    Hinata acts like she has a crush on SOMEONE!!!!!!!! That dream was freaky...i liked it. UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!
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