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From ANON - cirquegirl999 on June 19, 2007
Hey there!!!!! Absolutely loved the newest chapter! Starting with the funny bits. Man you had me LMAO when Naruto said-�I was totally not even scared for real ya know. I was just protecting you since you�re such a pansy.� I couldn't stop laughing, that was such a Naruto comment!!!!! Also chica, WHY DID YOU MAKE HAKU A DOUBLE FOR DEIDARA???? What did he need a stunt double for the upside down scene?lol Nah, I'm just pulling your leg. You did fantastic with the character developement concerning Neji; this is actually the first time that I definitely feel like Gaara/Neji can have the happily ever after ending all us loving yaoi girls dream about. ^_^ My only question concerning this is whether you're going to explain Neji's sudden realization that it really is Gaara he's ga ga about. I mean I just get the feeling that there should be a time when it's explained why he pushed Gaara away and was convinced he wanted to leave him. Do you get what I mean? I know that you explained with the whole pressure thing but it just seems like there was something else in the equation, like the fact that when Gaara loved him he felt like he was being smothered. Are these things going to be addressed in the heart to heart Neji wants to have with Gaara? OMG! What am I doing? I'm sorry for all the confusing questions, it's just like this chapter opened a can of worms (not in a bad way) and feels like it leads to something a lot more serious. Anyway just ignore my inquisitive/annoying side, that's too much tea and too little sleep kicking in. I thought this chapter was great and either my brain is too fried or I keep having blonde moments concerning this area in the story but this whole Mr.X thing has me for a loop. I think I should start watching the Naruto Shippuuden if I want to eliminate some possible candidates, I just don't know enough about Deidara and Sasori to peg their characters. I don't think it's them though, it seems to obvious, or maybe that's your intention, you know a slap in the face at the end XP .
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From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on June 18, 2007
That was a good chapter. I enjoyed trying to solve Orochimaru's poem. I actually go most of it, but I completely missed the first line. I didn't even think about tennis. I had some other idea going on in my head. I think a sidestory from Itachi's POV would be interesting since he hasn't had much time in the story. Then again, I like the idea of a sidestory from Mr. X's POV just because I want some answers. I can't wait until the next chapter.
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From on June 18, 2007
Well i must say your plot is amazing. Normally i can figure the plot but not on this story. I have no real advice or whatever right now, so i will end with the fact that i feel for Haku because i recently was put/are in his position. See you next chapter, Kat
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From ANON - Dancing Fox on June 18, 2007
OMG that was great!! YAY gaara and niji ^^
i love it so much, i read it i think last night but i didnt really
get it.....because i had a couple of drinks and so on, but now that i
understand it, its fucking awsome! *sighs happly* i truely enjoy reading
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From FathomX on June 18, 2007
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From Pho on June 18, 2007
I've only read the first four chapters of this story, but it's bedtime and I can't read any more tonight. So I'll go ahead and leave a review of what I've read so far. Great job! You have so many things going on here, I can't wait to see where they go...especially with Gaa/Sasu..always been a favorite crack couple of mine. And your chapters are so nice and LONG. It's great. I don't feel cheated when I click for the next chapter. I really like this! And I will read the rest tomorrow, I can't wait to catch up. Thanks for the story!
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From Anaheyla on June 18, 2007
I need to get around to reading the whole thing some time, it's very good. ^_^

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From ANON - jenny on June 06, 2007
Wow... I was so very confused untill the end. Ahh... but i loved it.
thanks. jenny@wauchula.net
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From ANON - cirquegirl999 on June 06, 2007
GAH! How could you do that????? Leave the story in the middle of such an important scene???? KNOWing you, you'll most likely pick up the story from somewhere else and let us get drenched in the rain while waiting for a recap or something to let us know what the fuck happened!!!!! GRRRRRRRR! It'd better be Sasuke that Naruto was referring to!lol I have to tell you I'm honestly lost, in a good way I mean. First with the whole Mr.Y (you called him X so I'm calling him Y b/c XY make a man!hahahahahaha-this is me on way too much sugar) threatening poor Gaara, who the hell did Nauto think it was??? Also, in that fight scene I was on the edge of my seat, I mean half of me was saying this has to be fake, this has to be fake, then the other half was like, man he's beating the shit out of Naruto! This has to be real!lol So I was so releaved at the ending of the chappie where they were all good, though I would have killed Gaara if I'd been Naruto (he may just yet) for using what I'd spilled to him against me. Anyway, now you seriously have me rooting for Gaara/Haku, Neji's just too damn smug to get what he wants. I'd love it for them to get together and then dangle it in his face, but don't have Gaara use Haku just to do that, I think it's time Haku got some REAL love, no strings attached. I love his response to Neji though -'and tell him I said he�s selfish and a prick and his head is huge and that he�s a horrible lover. Tell him he�s no good in bed either. Oh, and that I hate and him and I hope his car 360�s off a cliff and I hope he�s in it and sinks to the bottom of Lake Konoha.'-LMAO! That's so something I can picture him saying. Well that's all for now, great job Ane (figured out what I'm calling you yet?). Can't wait for more, especially b/c I think I might fall off the edge of the cliffie!
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From ANON - Ariya on June 06, 2007
Yakatta!! I'm so happy you updated. This chapter was soo good! I think you deserve a cookie *give cookie* enjoy! And please update soon!!!
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From ANON - Dancing Fox on June 05, 2007
YAY i absolutly love reading this!!!
but i still think gaara and niji are a cute couple, but yes
you should really just keep writing, becuase i love reading it
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From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on June 05, 2007
That was a really good chapter. Talk about an emotional rollercoaster ride for everyone involved. OMG. The fight scene. I had a feeling that it would be fake because Naruto already admitted to Gaara about kissing Sasuke, but still! That was brutal. It contained so many different emotions that you can't help but get lost in the scene. Definately one of my favorite scenes even if it is one of the saddest.
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From ANON - phoenixfirekitsune on June 03, 2007
I just found this story and it is AMAZING! I absolutely love it and can't wait to read more. I really enjoy the way all of the characters are portrayed. The plotline is incredible as well. I love how everything is so complex and yet still makes perfect sense. Please update soon and keep up the good work.
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From ANON - cirquegirl999 on May 30, 2007
Oh forget about me being nice for not reviewing for so long, all that went out the window with the end of chapter 9!!!! You Fucker! I can't believe you just did that, the two of them were together, they love each other and it could have worked out! But no, you just had to have Naruto pull away, it wasn't enough that there's no Gaara/Neji going on right now, no, now there's no Sasuke/Naruto either, are you trying to be funny or do you seriously like torturing me????
> Okay, actually I completely understand the whole thing about Naruto turning Sasuke down. I mean Sasuke may have liked Naruto longer and let's just admit that Naruto's a bit of a dunce when it comes to the subtlies but really, it's more his fault for not admitting it than it is Naruto's. Of course I'm still under the impression that they both have brain damage at this point in time since they just keep missing each other. I like this chapter b/c now it'll get really interesting, I hope Sasuke will feal guilty when he does PDAs with Gaara so he's forced to go back to Naruto. (Notice the LIKE, in the last sentence, I honestly can't be completely happy when things are fucked up in NaruSasu land). Great job on having that confontation, I'm looking forward to seeing where you go from here. Oh and don't think I missed that Gaara in the basement thing, WTF is going on?lol You had me gasping though when Naruto said 'I'd rather he play Touch the Dick in the bathroom'-LMAO!
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From ANON - cirquegirl999 on May 30, 2007
Alright....I know what you're going to say.....ABOUT FREAKING TIME!!!!!! I know, I know, and I have unexcusable reasons for putting it off for this long which I apologise profusely for. Now enough with the kissing ass (ewww,lol) and on to the review. I loved this chapter, it's officially number one on my favorites list. Why you ask? In this one there was just so much depth I felt like I was drowning in it! Which is always a good thing, unless of course I burst into tears which is only ever acceptable on that time of the month. (What is it with me and the numerous references today?) Thank you so much for clearing up the whole Gaara-dad issue, makes sense of why he's so fucked up. Hell if I'd been in his position I would have slit the fucker's throat first chance I got! Your description of how he was feeling, the lonliness, the alienation, only serves to enchant the reader with his character as more than some kid who feels the world took a giant shit on him. I'm glad that Gaara taking into account now what dealing with Neji is doing to him and finally dishing back to Neji what he deserves for being so shitty. Now onto Haku, who since the last 2-3 chapters has come second on my fav list of characters. Besides adding even more to him, you're giving him a backbone and making the reader realize that he's more than just a slut (like moi, *slaps herself on the wrist for that idea now*). The whole realization thing on how Neji is just hurting everyone around him, regardless of the fact that he thinks its for the best, is just making me dislike him as a person right now. BTW, with the way he is now, if he doesn't have a major change I promise you'll be finding me on the fence cheering for Haku and Gaara to get it on. Just imagine it. *in a teleprompter's voice* "And now that moment you've all been waiting for.....the story of two scorned lovers, bound by fate to find happiness with one another, I bring you HAKU AND GAARA!!!!" lol, this enough to convince you that I love it and want more, more, more! Now I'm off to review the next chappie, but I just have to say bravo chica, bravo!
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