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By : animelovergirl
  • From angelsdelight on April 25, 2008
    Option 1: Have Neji scarred after his past and what this crazy bitch did to him affect his blossoming relationship with Shikamaru. Continue their struggle in "Fateful Nights" where Neji has been being counsuled by Tsunade. The stress of Neji's problems is starting to wear on Shika's nerves and Tsunade sends him on a C-Ranked mission. Shika get sent on a solo mission where he gets hurt so bad that he's in critical condition. Neji then realises his fear of sexuality is nothing compared to the thought of almost losing the love of your life before you got to confess it well. Shika and Neji talks about each other's feelings more in depth and them working his problems out with slow pasionate sex. You end it with Neji riding Shika like a cowboy and it makes the happy readers die from blood loss!


    Option 2: Allow the other authors to post chapters until it gets to a place where you want it and the remove the options to add chapters. This allows you to review what is written first and control where this goes.


    Option 3: Continue it in a 2 part chapter 8 & 9 so that Part A of the chapter deals with Neji's fears and his talk with someone like Naruto or Hinata because they can tell when something is wrong with him and they almost always have the best advice or have him talk to someone like Iruka or Genma who is just like Shika in a way. Part B would deal with Shika's way to advance their relationship and have Neji take control first and the Shika take control.


    I hope this helps cause I love the story! See if Prpl Grl and Kohaku Shadow can help . They have damn good Shika x Neji fics. They might be able to stear you in another direction. If you have questions, my email address is: bhubb88@hotmail.com
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  • From ladynuriko on April 23, 2008
    I agree with you that a lemon just wouldn't fit at this point. My vote's for a contination.
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  • From SeverusLutherinSalazarSnape on April 12, 2008
    Ok. Here's how I see it. See, Neji would be terrified of sex because of what happened, yet, this is Shika we're talking about. The one person that was there and that came to his rescue, the person who nearly killed himself looking for him, the person he looked up at when the pain finally stopped. He wouldnt get a feeling of dread when with Shika because of what they had been through together. Instead he would get a feeling of comfort and safety.
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  • From CinnamonStar on April 07, 2008
    *Teehee* Just read the first chapter and I'm already addicted. I think that your story is brilliant. Very well written with a true-cute-to-be-true Neji. I simply loved the conversation between Tsunade and Neji. So cruel, so funny - love her a lot! I'm off the read the next chapters... YAY!!
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  • From EstherJolie on March 21, 2008
    you should end it without the lemon and write a sequel
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  • From LadyWolf on March 20, 2008
    I think you should continue this into Fateful Nights. I agree that after what Neji-kun went through, I think he would be reluctant to have sex. Six months at least...

    I truly enjoyed reading this...Neji/Shika are my fav couple!
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  • From on March 20, 2008
    Hrm... *thinking hard*

    I'd go with ending it without lemon and make that Fateful Nights sequel ^_^ The only alternative I can offer is maybe you can tell the story of how the one year went by before ending it with a lemon? You can write them in one or two (or more) chapters, or just a chapter of mini-scenes that shows timejump (like what I did in UR chapters 3 and 9). Everything is up to you though. I mean, it's your story and when it comes to fanfictions, I think, you can write pretty much anything you want, right?

    Anyway, good luck and I look forward to see how it turns out ^_^
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  • From ANON - ydjessy on March 19, 2008
    while i would love a lemon, i think your right neji would definetly not be ready. Especially if you're trying to keep it realistic, and i personally don't object to a continuation.
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  • From ANON - ShikaBear on March 19, 2008
    I say: Don't force things just to put lemon into the story. It's a great story, and is great even without lemon- although I love your lemon. I agree that Neji would need time to recover from his tragedy, with Shikamaru's love and support- I personally would love to read a bit about that story too but understand that may be off the table.

    Then again, once he has physically healed, depending on the mood you have set- etc., is is possible to bring lemon into the story. Neji may be drawn to Shikamaru in a sexual way as a source of comfort- a way to wash away the bad memories and replace them with good. Or maybe he would need to be semi for a while to regain a feeling of control and then later be uke to relearn that it's okay- sometimes even great- to be out of control.

    Really I think it all depends on how the story is flowing out of you. :) Just don't forget that you are a great writer and we love your story so you should trust your muse and your judgement.
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  • From lazynara on March 19, 2008
    Leave out the lemon if you don't feel comfortable with it being there. It's best not to compromise the feelings of the characters in the story.

    Of course, you'll have to write the continuation with the lemon; we still need our citrus, after all.
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  • From ANON - Tyra on March 19, 2008
    Really awesome chapter!
    My oh my, I hope Neji doesn't die.
    Shikamaru just admitted he loved him, after all. xD

    Hmm, as much as I love lemons, I think you should write the lemon to the Fateful Nights.
    The title sounds so good. xD
    I don't know why, but the time jumps can be quite troublesome and all.

    I hope you keep writing and update soon again!
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  • From ANON - tina on March 05, 2008
    I LOVE IT PLEASE UPDATE AS SOON AS U CAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From on March 03, 2008
    update please!!!
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  • From on February 06, 2008
    GOD!!!!! you have to update soon!!!! i love the way this is turning out. cant wait for the chapter with yummy smex in it.
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  • From on February 06, 2008
    so far it's really good.
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