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Reviews for The World Was All Before Him

By : SuishouTenshi
  • From Starryeyedstar on April 22, 2007
    Promising start. I am enjoying it. It will be interesting to say the least. I cannot wait for the update.

    Thanks for the great read,

    Starry
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  • From KiaraNxiar on April 20, 2007
    I like the story! So, please update soon! Hopefully as soon as you feel spirited!
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  • From PieldeLava on April 20, 2007
    Thanks for updating so soon. Holy s&%$ 29 hours without sleep, wow. Through the village knows about Kyuubi being inside Naruto at least he has his father. I agree with Kakashi, Yondaime could of just said Kyuubi was gone. I really dig that you quoted the bible in a yaoi story nothing wrong with that in my book at least anyway. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Hope your well rested. Take care and god bless.
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  • From roely on April 20, 2007
    i hope you continued to amaze me!
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  • From roely on April 20, 2007
    it is rare to find someone who has read both novels! I'm glad that i'm not the only one! love the chapter.
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  • From Reyn on April 20, 2007
    Good news! The next chapter of IYPI should be up by this Saturday! YaY! And in celebration, I want a nice, well rounded, totally fangirly review from you! LoL. Jest kidding.

    I stick by what I said on FF.net. I LOVE Kakashi in this chapter. I have no real idea why, either. (decides to blame all the ANBU Kakashi merchandise she owns) I also like how Yondaime so easily jumps into fatherhood with the bright orange crib in his office and pacifier in the mountain of scrolls. I hope your chapters continue to get progressively longer. It's more fun that way.


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  • From jinE on April 19, 2007
    god is Merciful he shall not smite you for such frivolous things!^_^ at least i don't think so^_^ anywho lovin the story. i was wondering how you were gonna make a kaka/yondy work if you intended on having naruto as his son but i see you've covered that already.
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  • From ClaireBear on April 19, 2007
    Finally got a chance to re-read Chapter 1 and read Chapter 2.

    Chapter 1 pushed the story off to a great start, was very touching and at times a little heart-rending. Chapter two was hilarious and heart-warming and as I read I could actually see Yondaime looking into Naruto's eyes as Naruto looked into his...it was a beautiful image thank you for inspiring it.

    Loved the fan fic of Naruto stuffing his finger in Kakashi's nose, I laughed out loud when I saw it (the little imp). You did a good job MakoRedEyes and you did a fabulous job writing this fic, Suishou Tenshi.

    Oh, before I finish, I also like what you did with Naruto's mother and the backstory you hinted at, and even though the story surrounding her is unfortunate, personally, I don't feel too sad that she's passed on, besides...Kakashi makes a great substitute mother...yes I said it! XD
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  • From YamiKaeko on April 19, 2007
    I was looking up naruto information and it said that Arashi was his (not proven but not disproven) name. since Yondaime was Jiraiya student It makes since that Jiraiya would have him contracted to the frog summon. I would use Arashi. Anyway....I like the story. update soon! Je Ne!
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  • From yaoiismyantidrug on April 19, 2007
    I liiiiked the chaaapter.... I am reviiiiiewing....

    Hee hee. A cradle in the Hokage's office. ^_^ Loved the conversation between the Hokages. The way you described the Yondaime's smile made me smile myself. And I am really liking your Yondaime (kind, but resolute!) and your Kakashi (quirky, but sensitive!). Again, great chapter. (Am wondering how long this fic promises to be? Because I think I could read a lot of this.) I look forward to the next update!
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  • From Reyn on April 19, 2007
    “Six months,” answered Kakashi as he pulled Naruto’s finger out.

    I love this line, simply because it implies that in the conversation following up to it, Kakashi was speaking to the Hokage with a stubby little finger still jammed up his nose.

    As for IYPI (points accusing finger) Dembo has it. I wrote out the next TWO chapters before Christmas (it was supposed to be one chapter, but she decided to cut it in half), and gave them to her to work on...but...yeah. She's been busy with school, and my odd hours mean I'm never online when she is for us to actually discuss it...or in my case, bug her to open the doc in the first place. LoL.
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  • From PieldeLava on April 19, 2007
    I always wonder how the Naruto story would have change has the fourth Hokage lives. I love your story has developed so far. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Take care and god bless.
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  • From Onyxwillo on April 19, 2007
    Aww, that's sad about Naruto's mom but I can't wait to see how you develop a family centered Naruto.
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  • From Dragon7 on April 19, 2007
    Great chapter!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so and UPDATE SOON.


    P.S. Were's BABY Sasuke??????
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  • From ClaireBear on April 19, 2007
    You know...I've noticed that too and I kept asking myself, did I miss when Yondaime's name was given in the manga or anime? Anyway, I did a little looking around and 'arashi' also means 'storm' or tempest' in Japanese which the fans probably use as a play on Naruto's name which is a reference to 'Kamaboko', (a topping used in ramen) and can also mean 'maelstrom'. It's a really cute idea but, yeah...I just like calling him Yondaime.

    Anyway, love the story idea and I'm so glad to see Yondaime (and Kakashi, drool) in a fanfic because I don't think I've ever read one with him that's not an AU fic. I love your composition and it's kinda...despondent? (for lack of a better word) ...like it's sad to read but you can't stop. Everything is coming together nicely so far and the story is VERY promising. I haven't read the next chapter yet because I just HAD to stop and review the first one, which I'll need to read again since I'm rushed cuz I'm getting ready to go out now.

    I'll get back to you later with a better review though, sorry.
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