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By : Hestia

From ANON - Anon on April 16, 2007
yes more chapters! i was sad there was an ending already... i think itachi and kisame should stay together. hmmm personaly i love garra/naru but that doesnt really work in this story, maybe? oh yes bring kiba in, the more the better!
KEEP WRITTING!
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From ANON - cfox on April 16, 2007
You write a very good story, and you really know your stuff, for the D/S scene. NOt many people know that stuff but you do and I like the realzism you bring to the story . Looking foward to more. For an idea about Itachi how about him getting anoyed that someone made his brother submit. Or what Naurto will have to pay for Sasuke to be his sub. Itachi would not let him go cheap. Also maybe some of Orochi, trying to take down Itachi's club or some such thing. Keep up the good work.
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From Digitalkisses on April 16, 2007
Hi there :)

Really glad to see that you decided to continue this story, I really like it and felt kinda sad when you stopped it like that, I feel that this has the potential to be a really great on going story if you feel like going on with it till you as the author feel it's really done, which hopefully for us readers won't be anytime soon.

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From yaoiismyantidrug on April 16, 2007
Woo-hoo! I read the epilogue right before I went to work, and I came back to review when I got off, and was very, *very* pleased to see that you would be continuing. Yes! Definitely more KisaIta (I love your Kisame, btw...sexxxy), the shopping trip sounds fun, and I don't know if it's in your plans, but - For the love of god, please more IruKaka! Hottest. Thing. Ever. I even have a metal-phobia, as strange as that sounds (can't stand to have it touching my skin, can't stand piercings for that reason), and thinking of slave!Kakashi with nipple rings and a Prince Albert makes me warm all over. Mmmm.

The revisions were very well done - the little extras made it much more interesting. I'm curious (hoping) whether you're going to explore Itachi's desire for Sasuke a little more.

This is an erotic, delicious fic and it deserves every single one of the 100 reviews it's gotten in - what? 2 days? Congratulations! Good job! Great work! I'll be looking forward to more!
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From Allys on April 16, 2007
LOL! :smirks: Where was I?? Anyway I'm really Really glad that continuing, this is by far my favourite story of yours, not only because of the pairing either, but because of the scope of it, everyone's in there and because of the world and the tone of it. This is the kind of story that could go on forever with little 'oneshots' of different couples or twists in existing ones and I don't want to see it end yet. XD and I'm glad you goof off even though bills are important (especially internet ones XD). I like the idea of the confrontation between Neji and Naruto and Neji leaving to be with Gaara, while Shika gets some action from Chouji. I'd also Really like to see one of those parties you/Sasuke was referring to. I know ass all about Judo, but my brother is really good at it, he's also a certified tournament referee, so I can find out for you. What would you like to know? It would be interesting to see you write a fight scene, not to mention that what I do know about Judo is that it involves a lot of grabbing, controlling, and rolling around on the ground XD. LOL, and actually Kakashi makes a lot of sense as a judo master sub - Ju - Do = gentle -way. The good practitioners are usually quite passive, it's a reactionary sport, you use others force against them, instead of your own to dominate. I guess it can be considered the martial arts equivalent to topping from the bottom. Hmmn, I guess I know more than I thought O.o LOL my brother would be so proud of me I actually listen to him occasionally. As to what to do about Itachi... I'm not sure, I've been reading Matriculate This [ http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600091803 ] which is an awesome (but twisted) story about control. It's all the ways D/s can go wrong, it's scary like that. So that's twisted my view of Itachi recently, but there's also a really awesome story called "The Jutsu of Surrender" [ http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=544195899 ] that you can check out in reference to unscary? Uchihacest. SapphirexKat2 [ http://naruto.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=1296765028 ] is also awesome with that genre, if you haven't read her stuff you should check her out. I adore your Kisame though, and there's always Orochimaru to someone to complicate matters if you don't want to use Itachi. I see you have Zabuza lined up to create some complications of his own. I'm not sure if any of that was helpful, maybe the judo stuff, but meh... As for personality wise you sound like a lot of fun. As for me I'm a Sasuke type character - I would love to find someone to Dom for me, but I'm a scary sub, you gotta work for that position, topping from the bottom is my favourite pass time - passive aggressive much O.o. Oh well, Huggles to my guy who's been around for 9 years now and still has no idea what to do with me, I know I scare him sometimes, but I'm fucking hooked and can be a possessive little bitch. Oh that would make for a good story line run - People proposition him all the time and it annoys the hell out of me - he's a lot like Naruto, he fucking leaks charisma. It causes people to do stupid shit like strip in the middle of january at 3 in the a.m. outside a night club, so you can also complicate matters with people trying to get a piece of Naruto - I mean fresh meat Dom who likes to sub, who's tamed Sasuke. It's been my long standing experience that no matter the rules set for them, most people have no kinda fucking behaviour. When did this turn into a rant? Anyway - would love to see you continue - cause you know I adore you - Hell where are Ibiki and Sai? As a couple or seperate they could also make things extremely interesting around the club. Okay I'm done, luv, huggles and luffles, Allys.
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From ANON - sharingan.swirl on April 16, 2007
Wow! I love ffpanda's Depravity story.... omg!!! That is really hardcore. No updates in like forever though... *cries*

I like what you're thinking for future chapters; shopping, piercings, judo... all great! As far as couples go... Neji/Gaara..... that would be damn hot! Shika/Chouji... i can't imagine a D/s relationship there, but who cares? Keep Itachi with Kisame though... especially since you talked about how risky it was for them. Why else would Itachi stick around if he didn't love the guy? Maybe a glimpse into IruKaka D/s play.... or a chappie from Kakashi's point of view... that would be awesome!

Ok i'm done. :) I look forward to more!
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From Sapphirexkat2 on April 16, 2007
Ah, thanks so much for this wonderful story! you deserve a break. I hope that you do write more dom stories though, cuz they're f***ing hottt!
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From ANON - Mystic_Neko on April 16, 2007
I was kinda hoping that we'd get to see how their pairing developed. I was a little suprised to find that it was already finished. After all that talk about piercing's and new clothing. I kinda thought that we would find out what happened with them shopping and piercing in the next chapter not find the ending. It was a good story but the ending seemed a little fast. I mean they meet, do the whole D/s thing, then the end their together and have been for a while...
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From Selow on April 16, 2007
Oh, this is a very nice fic :)
The sasunaru action was very intense because you paid a lot of attention to the inner workings of the characters. But there were times when the fic got a bit weaker, usually when there were more than two characters interacting outside a sexual situation. Sasuke suddenly losing his cool in a public place still seems a bit incredible, even with all the prompting on Naruto's part. Maybe it relies too heavily on the dialogue without stopping to introspect to make it more believable? The sex scenes were very well done for that matter.
I agree with you that this is a good place to end the fic, it is a whole. But I'm still very curious to see Naruto subbing for Sasuke. So, um, a sidefic or a sequel maybe? *doe eyes*
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From ANON - sharingan.swirl on April 16, 2007
WHAT?!!!!!!!!!!?????????!!!!!! it's OVER?!?!?!?!?!?!? *bursts into hysterical tears* Wah!!!

But really... I LOVED IT!! And yeah, it could stand as is.... That was one hell of a twisty plot in the Epilogue though. I would love to see more of the shared D/s of Sasuke and Naruto. *drool* *Not so subtle hint to KEEP WRITING D/s DAMMIT!!*
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From yaoilover07 on April 16, 2007
You just got to add a chappie about sasu being dom. When I saw a new chapter up I was so hoping to get to se sasu dom but the chapter you wrote was good for an ending. If you can write the chapter for sasu being dom I will give you a cookie. PPPPPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Dayakara on April 16, 2007
WOW I really liked it....-blushes- I'm a sub myself so I really enjoyed every detail that you managed t ofit into this story. I would really like to know more about Neji if that would be possable? As well as hearing something about Shino or Kiba but Uhm...really really loved it ^_^

Dayakara~
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From narutovixen383 on April 16, 2007
When I saw that was the epilogue I freaked out, although I thought it was hot how Naruto finally collared Sasuke....BUT, you must write about how Sasuke is the dom and Naruto the sub! It would be hot and definitely worth the wait. Maybe even a sequel cause I want to know about that 2.5 million dollar blue diamond....and what about those piercings?? The shopping day is a must!
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From ANON - Pic's Pixie on April 15, 2007
aww luved it, but still really really REALLY hope you write a few more chapters, really wanting to see how u write about a sub naruto and dom sasuke hehe i can wait till thursday i can wait till next thursday lol just please write some more *puppy eyes* lol
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From ANON - T.L.A.M. on April 15, 2007
Usually I don't respond to the usage of such vulgar language as what appears in this fic, but I must say you changed my outlook on it. It was implemented very, very well. I commend you. My yaoi fanfic obsessive friend sent me this at random after she said it was 'so...freakin...HOT' but I must say that that is an understatement. I am looking forward to any and all updates from this point on.

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