Adult-FanFiction.org : Naruto

Reviews for D/s Naruto

By : Hestia

From naracest on June 20, 2008
Waaaaah! I'm done!!!! Okay. I was reviewing more often at the start but i just got way to pulled into the story. So many pairings. So complex, so hot. I loved the complex network of characters. Seeing the shifts in personality was earthshaking to read. Okay, favorite parts...Shika and Gaara are so hot it should be illegal. I would love to read a one shot of the collaring. The intricate thread with Neji, Sai, Haihashi and Kimmimaru was amazing. I was wondering at the start if there was a line of abuse stretching back there. You wrote it out beautifully. I don't know why but i think that the HaiKim pairing was my fav. No wait...who am I kidding? I love KakaIru/Irukaka. Soooo amazing. God i almost cried when they figured everything out. I don't know what it is about those two that gets me every time. The intensity of their relationship is always so high. Even in light fluffy stories they seem so hopelessly in love, even if they can't admit it.
Okay,I usually am not a Kisame fan but you wrote him sooooo well, how could i not think that he was smokin'? Seeing Itachi break was a thing of beauty. He's always written as the dom. Always. Granted i don't read much KisIta but every other pairing he's the seme. Really really amazing. And not just how smolderingly sexy it was but so fluid and well planned. Your writing is a treat to the eyes, even when i've been staring at a computer screen for every free second for like...four days.
God...there was something else...Oh yeah. IbiRaiGen. Please write more. You could pump out oneshots for this story forever. Seriously. Wow. The three of them blew my mind. So indepth into the inner thoughts and turmoil in their minds. Amazing. God I wish i'd taken my time with this story now. I can't tell you how depressing it is to be done. HOWEVER...now i will be able to concentrate on my own writing for a while. I'm sure you'll be getting more reviews from me very soon. I know this deserves more than what a wrote but i have to be up in the morning and i pushed myself to finish the last chapter. Too good for my tawdry words to do it justice. Bravo!!! BRAVO!
Cheers
Meg
Report Review
From naracest on June 16, 2008
okay, shikagaara...soooooo hot!!! What a great pairing. I love to see gaara go through his change from psycho to sweetheart. I really hope you wrote Shika as his partner. Okay i gotta keep going. Very nice thus far!
Cheers
Meg
Report Review
From naracest on June 16, 2008
Okay i'm usually a sasunaru fan but that was amazing. really really good. I'm a little worried about starting this now because i have writing i should be doing but i'm hooked now!
Great so far. Damn Iruka makes a super sexy dom. Wow.
Cheers
Meg
Report Review
From tina21 on June 12, 2008
Dear God...i just love this story.....it took me 3-4 days to read all those chapters, but damn i'm happy that i was introduced to it....the scenes, the characters, their depth, how love is changing their lives I loved all of it...and from what i'm guessing this isn't the end right...???
Report Review
From ANON - tata on June 12, 2008
Hestia,

Are you going to still update this fiction. You told us that the original ending was just a post, not the ending that you planned since you continued the story. The ending you have now really has very little to do with the direction your story has taken a turn for. I hope you will continue this fiction. I love reading about gaara/shikamaru, hiashi/kimmaru was just beginning, and shino/kankuro. Please update soon. Please

tata
Report Review
From ANON - Anon on June 11, 2008
Wow, there's a lot of chapters to this. Since D/s isn't my thing really, I might not have kept reading except for the fact that there was a good deal of romance going on as well as the spankings, bondage, what have you. My favs were definitely Gaara/Shkamaru and Iruka/Kakashi pairings. Especially when Iruka lost it because he thought that Kakashi was just a slut who was using him rather than his loving slave. And when Shika went food shopping and Gaara wigged out - very cute.
Report Review
From ANON - asdfjkl; on June 08, 2008
I've thought of some more stuff to review about now. If you consider adding Pein to the story but would rather keep het out of it, Madara would be a good choice for him I think. Also, about the Sasuke and Itachi unable to cum for a week thing, I don't think anyone would hold it against you if you did a few time skips, or developed other characters during that time, or introduced new characters *ahem* while their cum-less week is counting down. Anyhoo, I hope to see more of this story soon, KisaIta in particular, and I'm definitely crossing my fingers for Pein. :D
Report Review
From ANON - asdfjkl; on June 06, 2008
I was shocked to see that Pein hadn't made an appearance in this story yet! You know what would be sexy as hell? Mistress Konan and slave Pein. I know this is a yaoi fanfiction, but god, that pairing came to me in a dream, and if you found a way to somehow put it in the story, it would complete my LIFE! No pressure though!

And I know that this is mainly a NaruSasu fic, but I must admit, I enjoy the KisaIta scenes the most. NO ONE ever does uke Itachi. And I can't even possibly begin to describe how completely refreshing it was to see that in this story, Itachi was the one who had been victimized by Sasuke, not the other way around. I hope you're planning on having Sasuke regain some of his memories, because it would be really interesting to see how he reacts.
Report Review
From ANON - JaeFire on April 18, 2008
AAaaaaAAahhhHHhh!!! I'm going so crazy waiting for an update! Are you really going to write any more of D/s Naruto or are you majorly blocked? Because you don't have to give a blow-by-blow about what every couple does--like your block about Naru/Sasu since Sasuke obviously has a piercing so no sex for a week. Like you said, if Itachi isn't allowed to cum during the week either, you can put these two pairings by the wayside and concentrate on others. You can just bring them back on the last day of their restrained weeks, and give a decent recap of the week but still give us a bit of their experience by going over the last day and what kind of mental/emotional/physical state their in. Itachi would be completely desperate and comatose, I would imagine, and I'd love to see how Kisame would bring him back to life, so to speak. Or you know, you could just go over Naru/Sasu with obviously no full orgasmic sex--this could be a chance to go over their feelings for each other without consummating sex, and what that means for them, and do they really feel something for each other, etc.
Report Review
From ANON - JaeFire on April 11, 2008
Wow, it's clear by the rapid increase in hits for this story that other people are getting just as crazy and anticipatory as I am. I check to see for updates like 10 times a day, and I can't stop myself. OooooOOooh, I really hope that we get more Gaara/Shika and Kankurou/Shino--the former because you've made me love this pairing, and the latter because you stopped at a really interesting spot in their relationship. How will their relationship progress? How will Shino adjust to being a sub on a more permanent basis? And what about Shikamaru's parents?! Will they like Gaara??? Ahhh!!!
Report Review
From ValheruYaoi on April 07, 2008
Hm. interesting. though you started to mess up the dates at the beginning of chapters. after we got past sun the 17th it was mon the 18th and then sunday the 18th and you kept switching.

Though looking at it i think you over did the smut scenes. well not really. but timeline wise. I thinkg you needed to do less chapters per day. 86 chapters of sex for 3 days timeline? kinda of extreme.

if you are planning on doing anything with the plot. keep the smut scenes the same or however you plan them, just add a couple extra paragraphs to move the storyline along at the botom of future chapters. and you can spread out the experimenting different styles over separate days, (cause i doubt anyone could come up wiht that many ideas that you have a couple come up with in a day. it reminds me of the TV show 24 Hours. it takes longer then that to get everything moving.

Well goodluck on future fics. and does anyone know how to reply to reviews you recieve on stories? (i put my e-mail in profile so that i can be contacted) but it seems impossible to contact other members on here. Can't even use a profile to send a PM. (though i guess i could check out forums for that?)
Report Review
From Raholea on April 03, 2008
*shudders*
i know this line is not exactly new, but i couldn't help flipping through your stories, i think i've read about every story you have posted on this site and this one, of course, took the longest to read. I LOVED IT!!!!
and btw... while there may have been a couple parts that on their own would have been squicky, the rest of the story created a balance and i couldn't help but read it to the end. and i'm happy that naruto and sasuke finally managed to "get together" somehow!!! *whines* too much hot stuff and wild sex and gorgeous bodies. too good!!!
*faints*
Report Review
From ANON - Silence69 on March 23, 2008
Aw, dude, you're amazing. It took me three days to read ALL of this (thus far...and with seemingly never ending objections) and you are AMAZING! I found this link in one of the stories i found on fanfiction.net and Dear lord, my thanks to you for gracing me with boredom, if not...I wouldn't have been able to read this. Dude thats horrible! Lol. Anyway, I loved it. The Hiashi(not quite sure how to spell that) Kimimaru(same with this one) freaked me out a little bit in the begining, but i got used to it I suppose; My favorites though are all the Shikamaru/Gaara scenes, provocative(sp?)innocent, and just so damn sweet! Thank you once again, and i'll be checking for more. Lol, in total, how many days have passed in this story?
Report Review
From ANON - JaeFire on March 14, 2008
I would just like to comment and say that I hope, whenever you decide to continue "D/s Naruto," that you keep the versions you wrote after your laptop was stolen, especially the Gaara/Shikamaru parts. I loved what you did with them, and I feel that those versions have a certain depth to them that the original ones lacked. They resonate more with a sense of love that is quieter, yet more powerful, with a stronger sense of who Gaara is, who Shikamaru is, separately, and how they're growing together as a couple, growing into a deeper understanding.
Report Review
From ANON - Lynn on March 01, 2008
Oh, I really love the NarutoxSasuke scenes, especially when Sasuke is being so uncertain. Submissive Sasuke is so poignant. Even when Naruto subs, you write it so it's just a role for him to play, not what he really needs. But when Sasuke subs, he just throws his whole soul into it. More, more, more please!
Report Review