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By : Hestia

From Inigeshi on May 12, 2007
oh and suggestion for yuri... stap on ? or maybe oral? i know it must be dificult with out a penis.... wow had the best mental image to throw at you. (came p when you said that you might have anko/hina apply for a membership) neji and hina sitting side by side at their master's feet neji collared and handcuffed while hinata is gagged and has her breast bound. yes i know i think of odd things.....

okay bye bye 'see' ya next update
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From Inigeshi on May 12, 2007
and i'm hyped! *giggless like some weird maniac* oh man complete and total sumissioin. the way tou described shino made me want to drraw him! But i cant get t right! *wails childishly* ah the mental picture you painted with shino, sai, shika and neji were so vivid i was estatic! ah man cant wait for more.
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From AnimeCookie on May 12, 2007
DANGER! Windbag review ahead! But I�m really enjoying how your writing has progressed and developed in this story. I like how you get into the detailed preparations that the doms goes through, but showing Gaara inner mind workings was particularly special.

Take that scene describing the history of that expensive sea �rock of ages� in Gaara�s garden. At first I wondered why spend nearly three extensive paragraphs describing some rock in Gaara�s garden. And that�s when it hit me; this is actually the process of how Gaara minds works, that �inner Gaara� of what he sees when he looks at that rock and makes him act and respond as a dom. This is a Gaara that�s so internally complicated that he actually contemplates such things of not just the beauty of such an inanimate object, but about the sea�s long historical process of transforming the simple hidden sea rock into a solid, enduring thing of beauty that now sits as an object d�art centerpiece in his garden that ultimately gives him pleasure and peace of mind. And this is the same garden, the representation of Gaara�s intimate thoughts and feelings, that earlier drew Shikimaru into becoming Gaara�s slave.

Then I liked how the first half of the chapter became a metaphor for the second half of the chapter. In the same way that the sea brought up the garden rock that now sits in that well-manicured sand garden, Gaara began the process of uncovering, shaping and molding his slave into becoming the centerpiece in his life. The fact that he was already thinking ahead to prepare Shikimaru before he even wakes up shows how �focused� Gaara already is with his slave. And how pleased he was with his �work of art� of having Shikimaru all trussed up in all those restraining devices, admiring every detail and interactaction that he couldn�t, um, �control� himself. But what really came out was that he was able to connect with Shikimaru�s fantasies, to know exactly what to do to push his pain and pleasure centers, knew that Shikimaru had a lazy streak in him that needed the right dom to mentally and physically push and challenged him properly on a daily basis. And that's when it really becomes confusing as to who is really in control because its true, that the subs are being at least, restrained and following the orders of the doms, but its the doms that do all the planning, work, and follow-up for the care of their subs making sure they are happy. Otherwise, its bye-bye master, the way Shikimaru left Neji in the first place!

I�m telling you, if you keep writing like this, I�m not going to be able to contain myself for the �big day on Saturday�.

Cookie ~

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From cynaga on May 12, 2007
I've always loved Kankurou. You've presented him at his most in character (imo) sexiest best.

Gaara and Shika, I mean wow.

I guess somehow once they fall in love I expect the D/s to tone done but I'm surprised when it's still there. I think I'm starting to get it sort of because of the GaaraxShika arc.

Hestia (Goddess of the Hearth?) more like Eros or Aphrodite in the writing at least! ;)

Thank you so much for sharing your talent!
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From llyoung on May 12, 2007
Thank you for the latest Gaara/Shika chaper. It was beautiful and I loved it. Looking forward to more of Gaara/Shika, Kankuro/Shino and Neji/Sai/Neji - actually I am looking forward to what ever you write (but please if you feel inspired more Gaara/Shika soon). Thanks again.
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From Allys on May 12, 2007
Wow, Soulmates :), these guys do seem to have the strongest connection. And you make it believable even though it's a totally crack pairing. Soulmates is a word I usually associate with Naruto and Sasuke :), if you read enough NaruSasu/SasuNaru it begins to seem like they've lived a thousand lives, in a thousand different worlds and that in each one they somehow come back to each other. Whether as enemies, friends or lovers, they always come together. But yet they always fight it, maybe that's it, maybe they're trapped in this never ended cycle until they learn not to fight it. If that's the case I see no end. Gaara is such a fantastic character. His eclecticism and his lethalness, combined with that beauty and sweet sweet heart. I will forever love what you've made of him. And Shika, this wonderfully cerebral character, that reminds me way too much of myself, that tendency to retreat into his head and disassociate from pain, from life in general, his propensity to daydream XD. We have a lot in common Shika and I. I love to joke with my brother (who incidentally is also my very best friend) that laziness rather than necessity is the mother of all invention and greatest driving force behind efficiency XD. LOL, Cause what is technology really other than us creating something else to do what we could do with our own two hands, if we wanted to, we don't need half the shit that floats around, we just don't want to do the work. Gaara and Shika are one of my favourite couples in this fic. It's amazing to me the degree of clarity they have in an instant. It was just right. And they've both embraced it. It gives me hope for those other two idiots, that when they finally do just embrace it, when Sasuke gets over himself, that they can be finally happy. I'm sorry I know I'm not focused like I usually am, but I'm at that stage where I'm beginning to miss people. How are Kisame and his big white whale? Iruka and Kakashi? And how are the two fools? Funnily enough you're beginning to remind me of Salinger XD. I think it's all the deep headspace we've been occupying. And how this story makes me think of life and every little thing. It's also the element of so many different stories, connected but separate. I love that everyone is on their own personal journey, toward a common goal of love and happiness. LOL, now your reminding me of pilgrimages and Paulo Coelho, you've found the language of the world my dear. Maybe I'm reading way too much into this, but it just seems so deep. It's not the kind of story you can wade in, you know. It's more like a strong ocean current that sweeps you away. Quote of the day ;D - "When you want something, all the universe conspires in helping you to achieve it." The old man from the Alchemist - Paulo Coelho.

Oh and Thank you for the little bit about the rock. It was beautiful, and educational XD. Do you know how many things I've had to google after reading this story? LOL. Ja ne XD.
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From HumanInfiltrator on May 12, 2007
Oh god Mistress.

Thank you, thank you, thank you...
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From ANON - Anon on May 12, 2007
wow, that kank/shino chapter was... hot O.o So much for Shino thinking he was the dom. Heh, I don't blame him. I love these... amazing doms you've created. Not all of them are super dominating, but ones like Kank and Naru and Gaara... *rawr* I'd say Itachi, but Kisa has so got him whipped, and although Iruka seems like a tough guy, he's still not a super dom in my head, even if Iruka actually seems like he wouldn't switch at all. I really like the way you're able to make us/readers/me feel the way the subs feel. Not just that, but I mean the way we see how the master breaks down his sub, especially the ones in need of retraining or just those that are more stubborn. the way the dom knows how to break them just right to have the sub begging and sobbing and needing their master to make everything okay. it seems so easy to just wanna give into that fantasy. that's why i love those strong doms, because you feel like they really know what their doing and know what needs to be done, but in a responsible way that's extremely reassuring.

as for the thing about the yuri... ? that only confuses me as to how much you can do within the BDSM world besides strap-ons. i'm not always as interested in the other possible scenarios. i feel a little more interested in that than i do het, but... it feels more limiting. but ankohina is a pretty cool pairing to work with for it, so i'd definitely read it if you come up with something. yay, sparring match soon? that has to be coming up, right? or was it the interviews... mm but i miss gaara, too... he's so wild and out of control. and you know, also, about that nejisai chapter, it amazes me that neji wanted naru to pierce sai just cuz... would naru? i mean naru would cuz he's above not allowing neji in his shop... but i can't believe neji would go to naru. *eagerly awaits more*
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From HumanInfiltrator on May 12, 2007
Mistress the scene with Shino was just beautiful. I'm sure he'll be going to Saturday dinner. Oh, Kiba's face when he sees his friend entering the club behind his new master! And I know you are merciful mistress and won't let Sai and Neji suffer too much because of his 'owner'. Please?

Oh and Gaara taking Shika to the dinner, his family are in for a huge surprise.
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From Allys on May 12, 2007
Okay XD... That was everything I was waiting for and so much more!! How do I love thee let me count the ways, yes we're back to this again XD: Holy Shit. That... That right there... is everything I ever freaking wanted. Goddess the description! I never thought Kankurou could be so fucking sexy. God knows I love my men big. And Shino so beautiful, so clueless, I love when they fight it, it's so fucking true. So hard to just accept and let go. The olive oil - the aroma, the tattoos, beautiful. And the dream - gorgeous, a feast for the senses, you're having a time with the descriptions in this story. Everything is so tangible and thick, I love it. Goddess, Thank you. Thank you so much for everything, for writing, and for your descriptions, your theories of love and how to deal. @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,--- @--'-,---
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From Vague on May 12, 2007
Hello Author,
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From ANON - LindyStar on May 11, 2007
Oh the smex! Chappie 36 was pretty great for Neji! Keep up (huhuhuh dumb joke, my immature side is liao) the good work.
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From Inigeshi on May 11, 2007
how very intriguing...

swing fuck... I like
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From ANON - luna on May 11, 2007
Okay...I'm a believer in the Neji/Sai/Neji, hot dang! I'm so totally in love with them right now! Hoping Naru/Sasu figure themselves out, totally cheering Kisame on, loffing the Gaara/Shika!! Anyway, I love this story, because, not only is it freaking hot, but it's got enough plot and emotion to make it really, really, REALLY addicting!! I like the characters and I love their stories, so, anyway, just to let you know I'm addicted to your story and SOOO looking forward to the next chapter (and crossing my fingers for more Neji/Sai/Neji, leik omg).
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From llyoung on May 11, 2007
Those were 2 very sweet chapters (even if one isn't finished yet). Oh yeah, they were also hot. Thanks for the update.
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