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Reviews for Shadows of the Past

By : RavenShantor
  • From ANON - john on April 18, 2007
    Excellent story i am amazed at the detail in it. PLease continue
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 18, 2007
    Well the story ends and i am sorry to hear that your beta has to leave you. I must congratulate you on a job well done for this story. Your chapters are short enough to read in a sitting without taking too much time. Your chapters also reveal alot of information about some of the characters. All of the genin you made for the story sounded alot like they were plucked right from the world of naruto. I will continue my support as long as you write. Keep going with what you have. I look forward to more stories surrounding Raven, and perhaps the new chuunin team. -Botched
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 16, 2007
    Well that was a bit unexpected for me, but i suppose that the tension was always there and i should have realized that it might end up like this. This story just draws me in more and more. I found a few errors in the last chapter but they seemed minor. Such as Raven hearing his brother and his fiance talking about the future when you pointed out earlier that with his special vision he couldn't hear anything. Yet another interesting chapter for a series of stories that has come a long way since the beginning. Although i'm unsure of what will come next for Raven, i'm sure you probably already know where you are going with this and i am glad to have found this series. It keeps getting better and i can't wait for more. -Botched
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 13, 2007
    Two new characters. I assume Kimiko (hope i spelled that right) is Ravens Sister and i would guess older by the looks of it. Raya must have been Koga's wife since she did die with his unborn child. An interesting side story, one that may need to be told in the future is Koga's story on what exactly happened out there. Although you broke from some of the original story on this side tangent i still liked the way you opened up another piece of history and some more information about ravens family. This story is getting more and more intriguing by the minute. Also it seems that ravens Decisions seem to be sound decisions i would definately expect of a jounin and his team should be interesting when they finally do make it to the chuunin exams (although i expect that to be a long way off). Another great chapter for a great story. -Botched
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 11, 2007
    Hmmm the language notch was turned up just a little bit in this chapter. These genin seem to be an interesting team and if they work together they might just get the scroll from raven. Rinoa seems to have a short fuse on her temper if she has a fuse at all, i expected the hyuga and the hiroku (hope i spelled that right) to be at odds with each other, but i didn't expect both of them to be able to use their kekkei genkai so soon. Well i suppose when you want to live up to your idol you have to try your hardest. Another great chapter and although i was a little dissapointed in not seeing exactly what they were up to, i think i will be reading alot more about them and their interesting ways. Another great chapter and i hope to read more about this new genin squad and their trials and tribulations in the future. Although it makes me wonder if Hinata ever had a chance to teach any of these kids and what her thoughts on them would be? Well anyways, another excellent chapter from an excellent writer. As always your speed amazes me. Keep writing. -Botched
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 10, 2007
    The dinner with Hinata and raven was interesting and excellent to say the least. You kept it simple yet with meaning which is difficult to do at times. Ravens new team seems to have alot of hero worship in it and i'll be interested to see if you will use the bell test or create a new test of your own design for them. I would definately like to see how this team turns out on their first mission when or if you get to it. As for sucking at coming up from names, fear not your not the only one that has that problem. I will be interested to see what there test is and if the group will be able to work together in order to complete it or if the two boys will be at odds even though they have the same goal. Your description is excellent on everything that has happened and it leaves a picture in my mind that almost seems too real. Keep up the good work. -Botched
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 09, 2007
    Ah what can i say, i've been away from the computer for a while and neglected my duties as a reviewer, For this i must ask your forgiveness. Well, perhaps my review of the last few chapters will make up for it. The courtship ritual was absolutely perfect and read like it was proper and yet complicated like the courtship rituals of old. The fight between neji and raven i expected to a degree and i think you nailed neji's personality in the fact that he values honor and honor can be shown between an exchange of blows. The letters from the various people also seemed to be right on target with their respective personalities. I wondered when i read that Kiba had sent the letter what kind of response he would have as he is very protective of the various things in his life. I'm not sure what i can say for improvement, the slight mix of common japanese words with the english fit very well into the story. i am interested to read more about not only hinata and raven but you introduced a new character. Ravens older brother, i didn't know he had an older brother and i wonder if he would give his little brother any brotherly advice from time to time. As always your speed in writing amazes me, i will check back from time to time on your stories but if you ever decide to write a book or more stories somewhere else send me a message at Botched88@hotmail.com . I would be the first in line to read your new stuff whatever it is. Keep Writing. -Botched
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  • From ANON - Botched on April 05, 2007
    Well this first chapter was both intriguing and nice. although i expected nothing less from an excellent writer like you. I can imagine why raven would be tired but i think that since you first introduced him you pinned his personality as not only being mysterious but one that doesn't give up no matter how tired he is. I was surprised on how quickly you put up a story since i just read your last one yesterday. i have a feeling though that this S rank mission may be more than just a simple escort though. i could be wrong but i look forward to seeing more on raven and this storyline. I find your writings on naruto more than just a simple fanstory i tend to think of them as another type of chapter to the naruto Manga. I hope to read more about raven and hinata's relationship, even though i'm not big on romance you have me captured with these stories. -Botched
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