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From sakuyalove on April 24, 2008
Sasuke killed Sakura!! It's mean of me and I'm not a Sakura-hater, but YAY!! KEEP YOUR MAN, SASUKE!
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From lexjamandme on April 24, 2008
Sasuke, Sasuke, Sasuke... when are you going to learn that Naruto doesn't like it when you make his decisions for him.
I can't wait to see what he does next.
As for the comparison... I love this story and have little doubt that I will feel the same about "The Agreement" once it really gets started. Your Sasuke is just so awesome in both of them. Stoic, arrogant... I wish I could keep my Sasuke that way, but he ALWAYS goes mushy whenever Naruto is around. Drives me crazy!
I can't wait for more of both of them!
:) M
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From MichiTheThird on April 24, 2008
Oh damn! No offense to Sakura and all, but I hope she realizes that Sasuke and Naruto were meant to be together, even more so than herself and Naruto! If she really loved Naruto, wouldn't she WANT him to be happy? And as much as I'm totally rooting for Sasuke, even when he's in his dark side...knocking Sakura out like that after nearly giving her an heartattack was a bit much! Lol! I hope he doesn't do anything crazy and really just talks things out with her!

-yuurimaoh@gmail.com
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From littleolmee on April 23, 2008
It is so nice to read this story again. Leave it to Naruto to be so blunt about his situation (He was married to Sakura, but he had to let Sasuke ejaculate into his ass in order to live.) My favorite sentence in the whole chapter! Oh just where is this going to lead? It's obvious the Sasuke's love for Naruto and his worrying about loosing him is driving him up a short wall. What will he do to Sakura? What is this 'cure' she has found? And would it also work for Sasuke's chakra problems? I mean even if Naruto would be faced with a 'cure' for him would he turn his back on Sasuke and let him continue to suffer his side effects of his chakra issues? Will Sasuke kill her to keep Naruto? Hmm, is that a touch of the same madness Itachi suffered from manifesting in Sasuke? And Naruto has been informed of her coming return so what will he do? Will he realize what Sasuke has done or is doing? How will he react? Has his 'love' for Sasuke grown over this year and how will he choice, does he have to choice?

I've read both stories, 'Mine' and 'Agreement', I don't have a favorite between them though. I really love both for different reasons.

I like 'Mine' because of the whole yin and yang chakra deal; that Sasuke and Naruto both need each other. I like how Tsunade has seemed to pull for Sasuke and Naruto to be together through it all. I like how Sasuke had tried to sneak around and still help Naruto. Sasuke showing an almost timid side, afraid to be rejected or to loose Naruto, his need to have Naruto give him a purpose is entertaining. And the battle over Naruto between Sasuke and Sakura is strangely satisfying; since Sakura was so gaga over Sasuke and turned to Naruto only later on while Naruto had bugged her for so long. The whole love triangle is just so interesting.

I like 'Agreement' because Sasuke is so devilishly clever in his planning and moves. That he enlists Hinata, using her 'love' for Naruto and hurt over loosing any chance to be with him to Sakura to convince her to help him, even if that means marrying him. For whatever reason, can't really put my finger on it, I like this teaming up between Sasuke and Hinata in order to make sure Naruto is 'happy'. In this story Sasuke is very self assured, he just seems to know he can make Naruto happy and give him a better life than Sakura and that assurance comes through as very sexy. Hinata is no wimp either, she is willing to do what she can to help insure Naruto has everything in life she believes he deserves. I like how you present her, she is ready and willing to step up and be the surrogate mother cause Naruto loves kids and he'll never have them with Sakura. She doesn't even care that they will be Sasuke and Naruto's children, she didn't push to make them her's and Naruto's. That shows how much she feels for him and I love it. The idea you came up with that Sakura is unable to have children, can't even donate the egg, is gold. Going back into the original storyline and pulling the incident that happened with Gaara up is fantastic.

Not sure if this is the type of opinion you were looking for about the two stories or not. But it's the truth. While you might have meant them to play off of one another they really are worthy stories in their own rights. Each has a pull, not just the same idea or story just redone. While yes the ideas behind them are similar they stand by themselves as good reads not just copies reworded. I personally think you should be really proud of both of these. You are doing a tremendous job with both and I look forward to reading more of both stories.

Take care and keep up the great work.

littleolmee
littleolmee2002@yahoo.com

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From MissMayumi on April 23, 2008
Woah..that was..different..

I wasn't expecting Sasuke to hurt Sakura..did he kill her?

*sigh* he's gone crazy..
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From ANON - hpn on April 23, 2008
YES!!! I mean, Sasuke how can you do that to Naruto (can't stop grinning). Seriously though, the only thing I have against that, is Naruto's reaction. I really don't care (hate) about Sakura but she is his precious person & I don't want Sasuke to look bad.
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From LadyWolf on April 23, 2008
OMG!!!! Wow!!!! If Sasuke wasn't a damn coward in the beginning he and Naruto would be together!! I've never been a Sakura fan, never! But in this case, I'm glad she found out how to cure the blonde and sad that Sasuke is being a psycho. Naruto is going to be the loser when all this is over. I can see him now, sitting in a little white room, he's wearing a straight jacket mumbling, '2 loves 1 heart....' Poor Naruto....:o(*
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From ANON - Ivy on April 23, 2008
That was some craziness but really good! Guess Sasuke is removing the threat to his happiness ^_^ I was excited to see that you'd updated!
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From ANON - . on March 24, 2008
i've been following this story closely. so much that i notice when you get new reviews/comments. please, please update soon. i'm looking forward to it very much.
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From ANON - Ivy on March 23, 2008
I really like this story! Hope you update soon!
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From knize16 on March 17, 2008
I've been following this one for a while, so sorry if I didn't review sooner. I love this fic. It is written so well that I regularly check for updates. I'm definitely hooked. I would get worried, wondering if Naruto would give in to Sasuke and realize that they need each other. Yeah, Sasuke is a bastard for keeping it a secret(and what a secret it is) so long. So when Naruto finally realized in the throes of sex that Sasuke was fucking him--I was like, damn, no you didn't. But you did and it was awesome. I can't wait for the next chapter and see where their 'relationship' goes...
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From DreamsOfShadow on March 11, 2008
This is an awesome story so far. I love the way you explained the imbalance of chakra in both Sasuke and Naruto, it sounded so logical, and like something that could actually occur. I'm anxious to find out who Naruto chooses, and what everyone's reactions will be. Wow, this is such a gripping, and thorough story. Great job so far, I'm looking forward to reading more of this fanfic. I hope the next chapter is up soon!

-Shadow
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From MyOuTeRiSaLiAr on March 08, 2008
I'm so in love with this story and your other stories but this is my favorite. It was dramatic as a oneshot but I think it's even better as a multi-chapter. I can't wait to see what becomes of Sasuke and Naruto's relationship and how will Sakura cope.

Waiting for your next update for this and any other story...

Kismet
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From KyuubiKit on March 05, 2008
Gyah.... you are evil... making me cry like a little girl... teme.... Please don't kill Sasuke, it's so crazy as much as I despise him in the anime/manga-verse half the time, I love him for bringing such passion out in our precious Naruto .... and the two of them are just the perfect contradiction ...
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From on February 29, 2008
*explodes*
How do you writers do it?
I mean this plot is like to awesomely amazing for words, so I am like not even gonna try.
*gushes* I am totally in love with this. I hope you continue to the end of this.
Or I will hunt you down.
Kidding.
Oh, the amount of smut in this is like perfect.

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