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  • From AngelTalion on March 25, 2011
    really hope there is more to this is... beautiful and precious and I love how Sasuke and Naruto don't even realize they are falling in love. And are both already enthralled or in love with Itachi... is Itachi amassing a harem?
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  • From ItaAngel on September 19, 2010
    Can't wait til the next chapter ^^
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  • From riddlestar on October 05, 2008
    i remember reading the first few chapters of this fic a long time ago.. i cant believe i totally forgot about it. im so happy you updated. it just gets hotter and better with each chapter. i love the interaction between the three, especially that you added the special relationship between Naruto and Sasuke. i cannot wait for more, update soon please! :)
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 31, 2008
    Chapter 7: “Uncharacteristically sulky.” I think I know what you mean, but it’s still kind of a funny statement. I guess he’s more “broody” than “sulky” usually, but still they’re close. ^^ . . . . “It was hard to tell with Itachi anyways.” Yeah, being a little psycho would make someone uncertain. . . . I wonder if Itachi’s relenting towards Naruto has to do with the fact that Naruto made it possible for the brothers to get together. I hope this good feeling lasts. . . . Well, DUH he looks like a kicked puppy! That’s pretty accurate in this situation! õ_õ . . . . “There was another door leading out the other side, but he didn’t take too much notice of it.” Because of that sentence, I did. . . . “Relax, Naruto-kun. I’m not going to hurt you so just relax.” Oh sure, don’t hurt the one you’re not in love with, while you practically beat up the one you (probably) are in love with. 9_9 (Or is it because Naruto’s got some type of protection, being a prostitute?) . . . . I like Naruto’s POV of Itachi, though I’m hoping that he’s not lessening his feelings towards Sasuke. I mean, it would really suck if Itachi got First Place with both Sasuke and Naruto. . . . Man, that’s mean. Itachi’s deliberately making Sasuke feel more insecure and hurt now. Yo, Itachi! That’s pretty pathetic of you, considering that you already made your “lesson” clear to Sasuke last chapter. . . . “Still, he knew what being left behind felt like and he was quite certain that he’d rather face an angry Itachi than bring that to Sasuke again.” Hell yeah. >:D . . . . Interesting. While Naruto’s exploring Itachi’s bite marks, Itachi’s roughly kissing Sasuke. He’s sending a message in that: You’re mine. Naruto’s here with you because I allow it. . . . . Still, despite my disapproval of Itachi’s treatment of Sasuke, the scene is still droolworthy, and it’s just the beginning. . . . “He didn’t dare open his eyes, afraid that Itachi would be able to read his thoughts through them, and then somehow separate them.” I wouldn’t put it past him, either. I’m glad Naruto’s thinking that way, though. . . . I like how much Naruto’s thinking of Sasuke in this scene, and how much Sasuke’s responding to Naruto. . . . Boy, Itachi’s a sadist. And very arrogant. . . . “though his mouth was lighter there, more reassuring in the face of the blond’s previous anxiety.” Again, ignore the really abused one. Jerk. . . . (*gulp*blush*) This is erotic. . . . A lot more erotic than the previous chapter. I guess it’s because it feels more primal rather than sadistic and twisted now. . . . Wow, that was surprising. I was starting to think I’d never see Itachi give head in this story. And it was almost . . . I dunno how to describe it—unusual. He still has that “I’m dominant” manner to him in that last movement. =O . . . . Boy. That feels . . . almost nice, how Itachi just leaves them there. And yet I don’t trust him. (*blinks*) Damn, he’s good.
    Wha? Naruto’s leaving? Aww. T_T . . . . Hmm, that sounds ominous. (!) Is Itachi going to do something to his family and/or Kakashi?? õ.õ . . . . “Why all the questions, Naruto? One would think you didn’t trust me.” Cuz he’s smart. And you’re evil. . . . Please tell me honestly that Jiraiya’s not going to do any gay stuff in the future.
    I guess I can’t blame Sasuke for being a little paranoid after the way Itachi treated him. Though it is a little tiresome. . . . Wow, this chapter ended kind of suddenly.

    Alright, I’m caught up! I like this story and want to continue reading it. Please keep updating. ^_^ ♥
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 31, 2008
    GOTTA WARN YOU: The earlier part of this review is rather biased. I know, I know the rule about No Like, No Read, but I’m not the type to quit reading a story I’m enjoying just because something that bothers me gets involved.
    Later, though, comes some more bitching. Complaints about what’s happening. Not the worst I’ve done, but not totally favorable (though there are a few neutral/positive parts). Again, I considered it worth reading, though, cuz I’ve liked the story so far, and it would be pretty silly of me to quit now.

    Chapter 6: “Not as big, but much more grand.” A little hard to picture at first, but interesting. . . . (*wince*) Eww. [Kakashi] Please tell me he’s not going to be super-involved soon. >.< . . . .
    (*SIGH*) Oh, thank you for no details. -_-;;; . . . . Cute about the snuggling. . . . Oh God, this is torture. I should’ve known from your warning. X_X . . . . Then again, it could’ve been worse. (*green*)
    Heh—so much for Itachi not finding out about the first time Sasuke went missing. His lack of wrath is being made up for, now. ^^ . . . . I like the progression of the target of blame, how it eventually turns to himself. . . . Tsk, tsk, shame on you, Itachi. . . . Interesting last line of that scene. It indicates that he cares for Sasuke, but it doesn’t explain how much it’s worth. And at the same time, it’s worth more than he thought.
    Yeah, about Kakashi’s mask—I think you should’ve made a point to mention it in the (I think it was the) previous chapter. There was a moment when he grinned, so I assumed he wasn’t wearing a mask at the time. Granted, in the manga we can tell when he grins even while wearing the mask, but it was a little hard to tell in this case. . . . Are we going to find out why Naruto has to be a prostitute? . . . . (Don’t need to read this) Can’t resist: I have a really hard time seeing Kakashi as an out-there-ish pervert, even a closet pervert who secretly spies on people and stuff. I just don’t get it. -_-; . . . . But I like Naruto’s feelings towards Sasuke, how it’s a mixture of worry and attachment. . . . Naruto wants to just hang out with Sasuke, right? He’s not saying they go on that date thing as part of his job, right? . . . . For some reason, I feel uneasy. Why do I get the feeling that something could go horribly wrong?
    Boy, are you busted or what, Sasuke. . . . “Sasuke was a bit disappointed at the boy’s quarters, they were dingier than anyplace he’d ever stayed.” Pssh—well, they would be; you come from a filthy-rich family, he’s a prostitute trying to make his way. (*amused*) . . . . Hah—! “A jealous tinge rising in his chest.” Aha, we’re getting somewhere there! =) . . . . Smooth answer, Naruto. I’m impressed. Clever. . . . Oh, go figure: he gets found at the same place as last time. I wonder if Kakashi won’t get busted (though I’ll be disappointed if he doesn’t). . . . Wow, Shisui said that pretty calmly for someone who was so upset.
    “A cold mask.” Is that his way of showing his anger? If so, it’s impressive and definitely scary. It would probably be more of a relief if he just exploded and lost his temper or broke down or something. I’m not sure if I prefer that or not, but I like how the lines are just jerking out of Itachi’s mouth. . . . Wow. Sasuke’s apology is heart-wrenching. And it’s horrifying how cold Itachi’s acting towards him. I wonder if Itachi’s going to stay this way or not by the time the fic ends. . . . Ah, so Kakashi’s name got dragged in. I’m hoping he’ll suffer some of Itachi’s wrath. It’s too much to hope for no more to Sasuke and none to Naruto, but hopefully things won’t get too much worse and the blame will be shared with the adult involved in the situation. . . . Jeezus! Itachi could really traumatize Sasuke by torturing him like this, especially when it was hardly Sasuke’s fault! . . . . Itachi better get control of that damn pride of his. Now that he’s got Sasuke with him, he’s lashing it all out on the kid. And he doesn’t seem to be hearing or remembering the fact that Sasuke was DRUNK. He remembered that earlier, and he remembered that he himself hadn’t taken enough responsibility. So now he’s beating up the kid for it. I hope this somehow backfires on him. . . . “He didn’t want to have to look at Itachi, not when he’d done so much to hurt his brother.” Boy, that is messed up. It’s kind of understandable, but he himself was hurting first, and he’s hurting again now. No matter how much he may have hurt Itachi (yeah right, the guy was just worried sick), he doesn’t deserve this treatment from his brother. . . . “Don’t you dare try to blame me, Sasuke.” Why not? You were doing it just fine earlier, Itachi. Is it too much for you to handle now? Are you that fragile? Come on, Sasuke, don’t take this bullshit. Do something! . . . . (*sigh*) I could kind of understand the attraction before and the eagerness to please, but this is getting a little weird. I thought Sasuke had more self-respect than this. And they say that you have to love yourself before you love someone else. He apparently jumped ahead of the line. . . . “I can tell your sorry, Otouto. [. . .] I have to get you clean.” Okay, things are calming down a little, thank heavens. And I like those lines; they show more firsthand that Itachi’s just—a little—deranged. . . . “Hard inside the boy’s pants” I thought Itachi was a man, not a boy. . . . “But he knew that he probably deserved it.” NOT. . . . “He’d been so bad [. . .]” Out of the things mentioned, the only two I agree with are “not coming home” and “not even telling anyone where he went.” The first one wasn’t his fault, the second could be blamed on the first, the third I would agree with if Itachi had shown some more humility; but as it is, let the man worry himself to death one of these days (unless he gains some humility in the future). . . . Shit. The last paragraph in this scene makes my stomach drop. Please tell me honestly that things will be alright for Naruto in the future! ;__; And despite my bitching, I thought the sexy scene was worth reading. ^_^
    Oh God, bad things are approaching. >.< . . . . *phew* At least the door wasn’t slammed with a harsh rejection to his face. That’s something. Don’t get comfortable yet, Garmiet, just wait for it. . . . Despite my misgivings, the tense mood of the scene when Itachi and Sasuke enter the room is done pretty well. . . . Itachi’s first words to Naruto were interesting. They were kind of moderate. And I definitely agree with the last statement. . . . Wow, that must be kind of humiliating to Sasuke, Itachi telling Naruto “I expect you to look after him better in the future” right in front of him. Still, he’s going pretty light on Naruto. I was terrified what he would do to him, considering what he did to Sasuke. I don’t get why he’s going so easy on him. Not that I don’t appreciate it, I’m grateful, just confused. . . . Aww, that was cute, that little interplay between Naruto and Sasuke. Heh, and Itachi’s lines made me laugh a little: scary hospitality is always nervously fun to read about. ^_^;

    Despite my bitching, it was all worth reading for that last scene. It was more reassuring. =)
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 29, 2008
    Chapter 5: I wonder what the epiphany will be, and whose it will be.

    Aww, cute first scene. ♥ . . . . It’s ironic—Sasuke kind of sneers at his mom being a social butterfly, and here Itachi’s one as well. . . . And as for those rules, well, go figure, Itachi—Sasuke didn’t even know about them, and if he did, it would only make things sadder. . . . I like seeing Itachi’s private turmoil.
    Aw, darn. Think they’ll ever get to just cuddle in the morning sometime? . . . . Boy, at this rate, Sasuke’s going to haunt this room when he dies. . . . Oh boy, first line Itachi says sounds like bad news to Sasuke. And I wonder if Itachi’ll flirt a little with someone else at the party. OR, Sasuke could end up flirting with someone else and Itachi’ll get jealous.
    Bummer. “This party was supposed to be about him, but everyone only seemed interested in Itachi.” That sucks. Then again, would Sasuke like it if he was the center of attention? He seemed annoyed about that idea earlier. Either way, he’s unsatisfied. . . . Well, Naruto’s here. How’d he arrive? Did Kakashi bring him as a date, or did Itachi invite him? As for Kakashi, I’m hoping (probably vainly) that he’ll keep quiet about sexy jokes and all that stuff. . . . “You don’t look like you’re enjoying yourself though.” Uh—duh. . . . Okay, first joke wasn’t as bad as it could’ve been. For some reason, it doesn’t bother me like it usually would have.
    I wonder if eventually in the story, the smaller voice will overpower the louder voice in Itachi’s head. . . . (*giggle*) “He had revived [his mood] most of the way now though, with a whole lot of alcohol, and two lovely ladies.” ^^ I’m not sure if he’s sarcastic or not. . . . That’d be funny and damn awkward if Shisui found the younger one while he was, ahem, busy. 6_6
    Bring shame on the family? I doubt it; I thought everyone would just ignore it and pay attention to Itachi. Then again, he is drunk, and the party was supposed to be for/about him, so . . . . Oh my, don’t tell me I was right?? =D . . . . Yeesh, how much wine did Sasuke have anyway? . . . . (*giggle*) I love this part: “He leaned into the boy’s arms, wrapping his own around Naruto’s slim chest with a sigh, laying his head on the other boy’s shoulder. Naruto awkwardly hugged him in return, rubbing his back soothingly and shooting a worried little look at Kakashi, who was sipping from Sasuke’s now forgotten glass. The man just smiled.” ^_^ Sorry, had to mention the whole part. I love what each of them are doing in those sentences. . . . Jeez, Kakashi’s going to be playing with fire, if Itachi realizes Sasuke’s missing and then finds him with the man and Naruto. Please tell me Kakashi’s going to stay out of the lemon stuff.
    He’s had a headache since this morning, right? Yikes. I get the feeling it’s Bad News approaching. . . . Sooo is Itachi bi? That’s cool. It was probably in his bed in the house, though. Sasuke’s not going to be happy when next he returns to that room if he smells someone else’s scent in there.
    Carriage! They are taking him out of there! =D . . . . “Kakashi’s grin.” (*blinks*) Odd. Understandable that he’s not wearing a mask, but still weird. And unsettling. (*shivers*) . . . . Okay, Naruto’s answer to Kakashi’s question: “In a way, yes. But not entirely. You know I can’t give you details of my time with other patrons though.” I’m thinking that he should’ve only said the last line, instead of the first two as well. . . . Dang, is Sasuke going to remember anything in the morning? I know that his head will be hurting. And I get the feeling that Itachi’s will be too; his has been hurting all day, and plus the alcohol . . . yeah.

    My suggestion? Leave Kakashi out of sexual situations. Then again, that might be hard to do in this case, so maybe just let him watch.
    And I don’t get why people make Kakashi insane; I just don’t. He’s never come off as insane to me. Mostly bored or just watching without much interest, though enough to keep an eye on things. And usually if he does say/do something a little out there, it’s unintentional and it sometimes just backfires on him without much effect on who it was meant for. Anyways, that’s my take on it. I know he giggles at the books he reads, but he sometimes seems a little embarrassed about it when he remembers there are other people watching; fine enough to read it in public, not too comfortable with talking about it.

    By the way, the chapter was called “Epiphany”. From what I read, it sounds like it was supposed to be Itachi’s, but it didn’t seem like too much of an epiphany. More like an almost-epiphany.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 29, 2008
    Chapter 4: Haha, I forgot that they didn’t know where Sasuke was. Shisui and/or Itachi’ll probably figure it out, though. . . . Heh, and it figures that Itachi would come back that particular night. ^^ . . . . “He hoped that Sasuke was still there and in one piece when he got there [. . .]” What, is he afraid Sasuke got mugged or raped or something? And I liked the way you described Itachi’s wrath in the last sentence. :heart:
    “He turned to glare at Sasuke [. . .]” Why? What’d Sasuke do? . . . . (*sigh*) Yeah, Sasuke, it’s tough. But it’s Naruto’s job. u_u . . . . Teehee, I like Shisui’s entrance. ^^ . . . . Interesting line: “The morning just kept getting worse.” Kinda like reality sinking in.
    Aww, the way Sasuke and Itachi greet each other was sweet. :heart: . . . . Itachi’s offer sounds fun. . . . “Leaving the room with a smile plastered to his face.” My. What will the servants think. =)
    (*snort*) Funny that you asked that, Itachi, because it just so happened . . . XD . . . . “Flash of something that sped through Itachi’s eyes.” I wonder what that was. Jealousy? Victory? Excitement? Worry? Just plain ol’ surprise? . . . . “Itachi was home now and that was the only thing that mattered.” Poor Naruto. u_u . . . . I liiike where this scene is going. =) . . . . Nice use of the word “sweat”; I don’t hear that very often. . . . It’s kind of sad how such an intimate thing with Naruto has suddenly turned into “experience.” I still hope they all get together in the end. They make a great threesome. . . . Love how Sasuke’s trying to figure out “what he’s doing wrong.” . . . . The way you describe his focus is excellent. It makes the scene that much hotter to read. . . . Wow. Even though it’s really uncomfortable and his reflexes are protesting, talk about willpower! . . . . Say, how much shorter is Sasuke than Itachi? . . . . Interesting: Sasuke’s more anxious about Itachi leaving him than what the other people would think if they caught them in an intimate moment. . . . Cute: “Itachi felt something skip in his chest a little at that, but pushed it away. He needed to focus now.” ^_^ . . . . “And the boy was bleeding a little this time.” Itachi bites hard, doesn’t he? . . . . “Itachi was careful though, knowing that Sasuke’s control wasn’t as good as his own, and that anything could set him off.” True or not, it has that slight undertone of arrogance to it. . . . “He knew he had to keep doing this right, to keep the boy coming back for more.” You know, sometimes I wonder about Itachi. I think he wants to consider it as having sex with his hot/adorable little brother and possibly take advantage of him (not in the evil way), but sometimes he seems to really love Sasuke that way. Yet here, it’s the manipulative part of him going. . . . Oooh. Really good way you brought that revelation into the story. “None of the people he’d had sex with while he was gone compared to this.” Very subtle. =D I feel like it should’ve occurred to me that he’d been doing that, but it hadn’t. I wonder how Sasuke will feel about that if he finds out. . . . I love it when Sasuke calls his brother by his name. :heart: . . . . Cute ending. I wonder if things’ll stay happy.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 29, 2008
    Chapter 3: I’m skipping over the summary. Don’t want the surprise ruined. Maybe I’ll read the summary afterwards.

    I get the feeling that if Sasuke went looking around that part of town without Shisui or Itachi, he could get in some kind of trouble with someone. . . . I would say, “Boy, that’s gotta be hard on Naruto, being a substitute,” but then I remember that he’s probably used to this sort of thing. Doesn’t make it any better, really, but still.
    Good luck, Sasuke. . . . I like that line: “All of a sudden he found himself nervous, feeling like a blushing virgin on a first date.” ^^ . . . . (*snort*) Knew it was Deidara. ^^ . . . . It’s a little fun thinking about the trouble Sasuke could get into (though kind of scary, too). There’s the kind he could run into in this part of town, and there’s the kind he’ll be in when he gets back home. But I love how he was so confident and sure of himself (roughly), and now that he’s here he’s all nervous and wary. . . . I wonder if Deidara knows what Sasuke’s up to, and where he’s taking him. . . . Hey, it’s Gaara. ^_^ . . . . Heh—Sasuke forgot exactly what happens in this place. He was so intent on just getting here and seeing the guy. ^^ . . . . Oh great, giiiirls 9_9 That first one’s gotta be Temari, second is Ino, and third is definitely Sakura (I love what you did to her hair, by the way). . . . (*gack*) You’re not alone, Sasuke. I hate it when she does this, too. x_x . . . . “The thought almost made Sasuke giggle.”—(*blinks*) W~o~w. . . . Heh. Sasuke’s in an awkward situation now. Now that Naruto’s with him, what does he do?
    OOPS: “Gaara had found him in their room and told him he had a costumer waiting downstairs” I think you got the “o” and the “u” mixed up. ^^; . . . . “The weirdly shy little virgin.” Teehee, that’s a cute way to describe him. ^^ . . . . Naruto’s not sure if Sasuke wants to have sex or just talk; I get the feeling that Sasuke’s not too sure either. . . . Interesting how Naruto problem-solves. . . . “he forgot the older Uchiha a little more, until the boy was a dull shape in the back of his mind [. . .]” I would’ve thought he’d be a “man”. . . . Interesting, how Naruto sees this as different than when he does his job. . . . This is cute, how Sasuke’s slowly getting acquainted with jerking off another guy. . . . Love how entranced Sasuke was that he didn’t realize how close Naruto was. . . . (*giggle*) Cute. “Aw, Sasuke, that was nice. Lets not ruin the moment by being petty. Here, come here.” . . . . Are they allowed to sleep there?
    Love how beautiful Sasuke’s portrayed in this story. . . . Naruto calls Sasuke “the kid.” They are the same age, right? I mean, I do that too, but not everyone else does. . . . Ooh, great ending! =D

    By the way, the lemon was hot as hell. I was really taken with it. ♥
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 29, 2008
    Chapter 2: “technically comes after Just Breathe” Is that the one by kakashizgirl? I haven’t read that yet, but it’s on my list and I’ll probably read it within a couple of months.

    Three days? Jeez, that’s a long time. What did his parents think when he didn’t come home? . . . . Err, whoops: “and not wonder off.” You mean “wander off.” . . . . Interesting detail about Sasuke’s mom dragging him to the parties. . . . Heh, Itachi and I have something in common: we both like red and black. ^_^ . . . . Oh, COOL! London!—Wait—London, England? Cuz I know there are some Londons in North America. . . . Heh, nice touch about Sasuke “picking up girls and drinking.” ^^ . . . . “Fabulous.” I don’t think many straight guys say that. . . . I wonder if these three guys are going to eventually form a ménage a trois. (I’m not too clear on the details of what that is, but it sounds hot.) . . . . “It was Itachi’s, far too big for him, but he hadn’t brought anything with him [. . .] so he had stolen it.” ^^ Stolen. Cute how it’s such a harsh word; really, I think Sasuke’s borrowing it (though technically it was without permission). I wonder if Itachi would mind. . . . I wonder what Itachi’s been so busy with. . . . God, I love the description of Sasuke’s parents! ^_^ . . . . Yikes, nursemaids. That’s insulting.
    Why act like a five-year-old? Isn’t that embarrassing? õ.õ . . . . Lol, the guy is Shisui. ^^ That was startling; I never would’ve guessed. . . . Heh. And the guy’s checking him out, too. I wonder what’s up with that. . . . Awesome details about Shisui’s background and connection to the Uchiha family. . . . Who’s Sasuke to cast stones about someone acting childish when he himself “generally acted like a five-year-old” earlier? Anyway, those nicknames are kinda funny. . . . Ahaha, Dei! (*claps*) You’re great at bringing the characters into the stories! ^_^ . . . . “Looks like a mini Itachi . . .” I’ll admit they somewhat resemble each other, but I wouldn’t go quite that far. ^^ . . . . How much is Dei kidding when he says, “You looked at him like you’ve seen him naked or something.”? Does he suspect and is just ribbing them, or is he oblivious? (Dumb question, I know. 9_9) . . . . Boy. And Naruto doesn’t care giving details. . . . Oh God, please don’t tell me that Kakashi’s one of Naruto’s customers. >.< . . . . “Good lay.” Yech. XP (I doubt I’ll ever get used to watching/hearing about Kakashi’s sex life. *green*) . . . . I do NOT want to know what was on that seat. >.< . . . . So Sasuke likes ramen. That’s cool. I wonder if Naruto likes it too. . . . Interesting. “He didn’t really want to have a servant of his brother looking over his shoulder, probably taking notes to relay to Itachi.” He loves his brother, but he understands how sneaky Itachi can be.

    Not bad. =)
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 29, 2008
    (I review as I read.)

    Chapter 1: O.O Nice initial image of Naruto. ♥ . . . . “The pale man behind him.” Do we know him?? I think we do. . . . That is some wig there. Wow. . . . Hang on: “The transformation was complete, the figure in front of him bore almost no resemblance to the boy who had walked into this room two hours ago, the boy he saw in the mirror every day.” I’m a little confused. That last part made me think of Naruto’s own reflection, but it sort of contradicts the first part. Then again, I seem very certain that . . . wait. “The figure in front of him.” Is that referring to the man in the room, or Naruto’s reflection? That might be the problem I’m having. Okay, moving on. . . . Mm. You spelled “paid” as “payed.” . . . . Ooh, good line: “Nobody wanted a scarred hooker, they paid him to get away from their own problems, not see evidence of his.” Well done. . . . This pale guy—I’m pretty sure it’s an Uchiha. . . . Corset. Yowch. I know that’s hell on a woman, but I can only guess that it’s rougher on a guy who doesn’t have those curves to begin with. (*shudder*) By the way, I know Naruto’s wearing makeup, but are his whiskers still showing? . . . . Yup, it’s an Uchiha. Love his first words in the story, by the way. (*purrrr*) . . . . Good ending. =)
    Heh. Love Sasuke’s automatic negative attitude. ♥ . . . . Yeesh, that much? That’s a lot of wine in a short time. Is that even possible? . . . . I like Sasuke’s reaction to the “girl” with his brother. I wonder how (if) he’ll find out. =) . . . . Heh. Nice move from Itachi. ^_^ (How old is Sasuke in this, by the way?) . . . . I like the details about Itachi’s interaction with the “girl” and Sasuke’s POV on the matter. . . . It was a little rocky when it started to switch to Itachi’s POV; kinda hard to tell who it was talking about. . . . Lol, you spelled “assess” as “asses”. X3 (Sorry—normally I wouldn’t laugh, but the typo was funny to a yaoi-fangirl.) . . . . This mysterious “plan” of Itachi’s has me gripped. =) . . . . Itachi—always the sadist
    Funny—I can picture Sasuke acting stiff, but I have a hard time picturing him in a formal jacket like that. . . . Interesting. He mentally called the “girl” a slut out of jealousy; yet he has no idea how close he is. Technically, Naruto’s a prostitute, so . . . or does Sasuke know? Itachi said “All I have to do is ask,” so maybe that could tip him off. (*shrug*) Doesn’t really matter. . . . Good analysis: “To his parents he was always the second son, the backup plan.” Very true. . . . Another good one! Second son = second best. . . . Aww, cool how you made Sasuke’s family like in the manga; he was kind of taken for granted by them, except for Itachi, who really saw him. ♥ (So what is Itachi playing at, then?) . . . . Itachi as charismatic—I like it. . . . Wait. They—they haven’t really done it yet! Awright, awesome! Sasuke harbored the affection and attraction towards his brother, but it was never acted out until now! Cool! =D . . . . You do a good job with portraying the changes of moods. . . . “Coachmen?” “Carriage?” What time period is this? Or is this like the ninja-verse, where there’s old and new stuff and it doesn’t really matter? . . . . “attention reluctantly shifting from Itachi, still conversing with the river outside.” I didn’t quite understand that. . . . This conversation between Sasuke and the “girl” is interesting. . . . Heh. The way Naruto was “brought out”. ^_^ I’m still wondering what Itachi’s up to, but this is fun. =) . . . . “Cabin?” That’s a kind of house. I thought they were in a carriage. õ.ô . . . . “The two parted [. . .] their mouths connected by a single strand of saliva, stretched between them.” But you said it was a “chaste kiss.” How is there saliva if it was chaste? . . . . So even though Sasuke’s in love with his brother, he’s still okay with screwing around a little? (Or maybe it’s because he’s a little drunk.) I like the details of this, by the way; makes it very hot to read. . . . Heh. Nice bit about Naruto fiddling with the curls. I know how he feels. ^^ . . . . Very nice atmosphere painted here. . . . Love how s~l~o~w the scene is going. . . . That’s gotta be awkward. Sasuke’s flat on his back with Naruto straddling him, and Itachi’s trying to prep Sasuke. It’s a cool thought, but that’s gotta be tough to do. . . . Now it’s a car. What happened to carriage? Might want to fix that. . . . Funny—Itachi’s thinking, “The best-laid plans sometimes get better.” ^_^ . . . . I like the sun and moon, night and day analogy, but I’m not sure if it fits well in this scene. I’m having a hard time picturing it. But it’s a good analogy all the same. . . . “There was pleasure, yes, but also pain, indecision and confusion.” I can imagine. And it does/doesn’t help that he’s got two guys doing him in both ways, giving and receiving. . . . Wow. Love the one-after-another effect in detail. . . . Love that cute, vague almost-understatement: “It had been a long day.” ^_^
    Aww, cute. I wonder where Itachi went. That’d be cool to see them all cuddling together. ♥ . . . . Jeez, did Naruto sleep in the corset or what? (Ouch.) . . . . Wow. Good feeling gone, just like that.

    Hell, yeah. That was an awesome chapter. I hope things end happy with all of them.
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  • From minaaaaaaaa on July 06, 2008
    i remember this story, been a while. happy to see it again and with 2 chapters i hadnt read last time yay!! itachi is too much of an uber top *pouts* but i really cant see either naruto or sasuke as they r in this story stepping up to take him on sooo i'll move on lol

    yay!! sas and naruto go off to the country together. they are absolutely ADORABLE aawwww trying to protect each other, snuggling... so sweet.

    keep it coming homes!
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  • From Sapphirexkat2 on July 06, 2008
    I'm so glad you've updated this story. I can't wait for what happens next! heehee
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  • From kaimono on July 05, 2008
    hm...seems like i finally got a little less opinionated towards itachi and sasuke pairing; as long as naruto is there somewhere, i am able to find this story enjoyable. please do continue. =D
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  • From minaaaaaaaa on November 30, 2007
    yeah! it came back! *huggles you* aaahhhmmmm lol i'm pretty sure i'm gonna be the ONLY person NOT begging you for a threesome with kakashi, we already have the itachi/sasu/naru threesome thats good enough for my threesome quota x) pluuuusss the sasunaru from when sas visited naru was so sweet i'm inclined to scream "chuck off kakashi an leave my 2 boys alone!" but as i said, i know i'll be in the minority so whatever u decide is cool still
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  • From Sapphirexkat2 on November 30, 2007
    Well my dear, I think that a kaka/sasu/naru threesome would be awesome, and maybe itachi could find out about it later and all hell will break loose. haha. as for the central theme of the plot, you could make it romance, either between Itachi and Sasuke, or Itachi, Sasuke, and Naruto. There are so many places this story can go, and I wish you the best!
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