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From Ikippiki on September 28, 2008
I love the way you made Sasuke cum, so hot. Please update soon!
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From Kool3Ayame on August 08, 2008
Hey your stories are awsome. I especially liked this last chap of Housemates but just remember to keep up the good work and success; we need strong people in this world

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From ANON - Anon on August 06, 2008
Boy, it�s been a while. I�ll have to skim back through some of the earlier chapters so I�ll remember what�s happening in this story. o_o;

Chapter 9: Man, Sasuke�s selfish. He�s getting more possessive by the day, I swear. . . . Heh�distract him with sex. (And if that doesn�t work, try food. Or vice-versa.) ^_^ . . . . This is very hotly written. I hope they each get turns to top in the future. . . . I really like this part: �they just stayed as they were: [. . .] because he couldn�t stand to part with Sasuke.� Very pretty. ♥ . . . . I hope Sasuke�s feelings become more genuine in the future.
Uh-oh, company. . . . Bigger uh-oh, Sakura�s crying. Yeah, I think of worst case scenarios when this sort of thing happens, too. �_� . . . . Well. Lee came to mind, but I hadn�t expected that. �_o . . . . This puts a new twist on Sasuke really being alive; if he comes out into the open, what will the effects be? . . . . I like that bit about how Sasuke�s �death� was �affecting� Naruto. Or the way it looks anyway. . . . Oh boy, that�s always thrilling when Sakura gets pissed at Sasuke. =D . . . . Err, you forgot the end-quotes at the line, �I won�t let him ruin your life anymore than he already has.� . . . . Crap. Fine date. Naruto, Sasuke comes first. And if Sakura and Lee come before Sasuke on that date, then it better be worth it later. . . . Sasuke�ll definitely be pissed. But the �concessions� . . . Sasuke could turn those around to his advantage big time. On the other hand, if Naruto�s that determined to go to the party, he�ll wonder how much he�s got Naruto under his thumb. But on the other hand, if he develops more genuine feelings for Naruto by then . . . This is so much fun to think about! Cool twist! =D And I absolutely love this line: �Bound by a promise to keep promises: his nindo.� ♥ . . . . Wow, check this out: Not only did Naruto promise and is now bound by that, but also a) his invitation was unique, and b) other people might not come. If he had doubts about going even after promising, he�ll be even more pressured now. Nice bit about Gai, by the way. X3
(*shiver*) Sasuke�s just got this aura that�s so masterful. Just his initial actions in this scene are . . . (*sighs dreamily*) ♥ . . . . Boy, wouldn�t it suck if they were interrupted again? ^^;;; . . . . Hang on a second. This line is sexy and all, but it�s a little contradictory: �He grabbed Naruto�s hair in a gentle grip and spoke against his lips; holding Naruto back from kissing him.� How can Naruto not kiss Sasuke if Sasuke�s got their lips together?? �.� . . . . Love Naruto�s determination. . . . Man. What a seducer. ♥ . . . . As steamy as this is, I can�t help but imagine how furious and possibly betrayed Sasuke will feel once he learns of the date of the party. . . . Wow. o.o And . . . that was . . . sudden. The way it ended so quickly.

Congrats on getting on the Dean�s List.

I liked this chapter. I�m not sure how I felt about the abrupt ending. I liked it, but it was also . . . I dunno, disappointing? Hard to say. Either way, I enjoyed reading this chapter, and hope to see some more updates on this story soon. ^_^
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From mizukiruhoh on August 05, 2008
fantastic story! love it to pieces! :D look forward to future chapters. :D
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From minaaaaaaaa on August 05, 2008
omg i couldnt remember the details of this story at all :S but i recognised the summary and knew i liked it alot sooo i just re read the entire thing. it was good :D seems i had missed chapter 8 so i got to read 2 'new' chapters yay!! I love how horny they are LOL and how much naruto enjoys his perineum play. I havent seen that mentioned in many fics, twas intersting *grins*
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From Allys on August 04, 2008
That's excellent!! Well done on making the Dean's list!! I loved the chapter, kinda wanna kick Sakura, but yeah I get it she's concerned, LOL. She doesn't know she's cock-blocking, but damn Sasuke's gonna have a fit. Speaking of Sasuke!! He was soo Cute in this chapter!!! So happy to see he's not so firmly entrenched in denial as I thought. *Hugs him* And *hugs u* Thank you so much for the update and the awesome smut XD. It's nice to know you're still thinking of us over here.
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From Vibora on August 04, 2008
waaaaah! omg! great fic! i love how you did/are doing sasuke! i love it when he's a possessive bastard! lol oh and congrats on getting dean's list! hope to read more from you soon! ^_^
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From hisoka on August 04, 2008
sasukes sorta like a house wife, not wanting her husband to go to the bar.poor naruto not knowing hes being used in one of the worst ways possible.hope you can update soon
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From serenagold on August 04, 2008
Hmm.... Sasuke's really really really not going to take it well when he discovers Naruto now has something else to do on his birthday. Not well at all.

(Excellent blowjob, btw.) ^^ I love this story. I'm happy to see it updating again. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Chapter 8: Love the dilemma Naruto�s having over using chakra. . . . Love how Naruto wants to �ease into it.� And yet, Sasuke�s not exactly that type of guy, is he? ^_^ . . . Hmm, maybe I spoke too soon. At least he�s willing to wait a month. I love how determined he is. The words just sent a nice shiver down my back. . . . Nicely stated, Naruto. ^_^ . . . Heh, and then there was Sasuke�s sudden straight-to-it reaction. . . . Err, okay, that was . . . short. ._. . . . . Mmmm, the lulling heartbeat. :heart:
Aw, that�s sweet, Sasuke�s making ramen for Naruto. :heart: . . . Whoa, kinky! O.O (I wants a picture! :D) . . . Hmm, I thought you weren�t going for Naruto being too uke. I know the idea here is that he is the uke, but if you ask me, he�s a little too uke. Sorry about that. -_- . . . Uh-oh, I know what�s coming. O.O . . . Or not. . . . That�s funny, what Naruto�s doing with his hair. ^^ . . . Is it just the ADD in him that makes him wonder at the slipperiness of the shampoo, or is he accidentally using Sasuke�s shampoo instead of his own? . . . Heh, knew Sasuke was going to catch him in the act. . . . You know, it�s actually too bad that you�re not as slow as Naruto, Sasuke. Take the time and enjoy it a little more! ^_^

To the A/N: Your class notes are filled with notes about this smutty chapter! O.O Hope nobody wants to borrow them! XDD
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Chapter 7: Oh, I SO called it when I said in like chapter 2 or 3 that Sasuke was like a cat! ^_^ . . . Ahaha, �Kakashi-sensei gives me dirty looks if I say stuff like that too.� XD That could be taken two different ways: (1) The way you intended, as suggestive, or (2) angry looks. . . . Nice little paragraph about why Naruto�s a �prude.� . . . (*snicker*) �You�re like my boyfriend.� I wonder, was Sasuke expecting that? XD . . . Ooh, hawtness! *_* . . . (*snort*) Nice one, Naruto. Now Sasuke has to take another �shower.� ^^ . . . Not even noon? Well, that�s good, because Sasuke would�ve had a medical problem otherwise (see previous review). On the other hand, their hours could get all screwed up; believe me, I�d know. -_-
(*giggle*) �(Thankfully)� XD . . . (*uncontrollable giggles*) �Leaned against the doorway and waited for him to realize he was there.� XD . . . Ooh, fancy word. 6_6 . . . Okay, so at least Sasuke is still picky enough to be neat. He�s not a total freeloader. . . . AHAHAHA, Naruto just got Sasuke in the face! XDDD . . . And where the hell do you find all these words?! �Crapshoot,� I mean. Along with all those other ones I hinted at earlier! O.O . . . Okay, I�m getting the feeling of a yaoi manga here. I mean, I�m getting the typical picture of who�s seme and who�s uke, judging from their actions. Not sure if I like it or not. �_o Still cute, though. . . . Uh, duh, Naruto. What else would he be thinking about? Although I suppose it is kind of a weird feeling when stated so bluntly to your face, so, yeah. . . . I like how you brought Sasuke�s entrance back in while Naruto�s experiencing the oven. . . . Er, I think the way Naruto stated his desire to bake stuff for his family seemed a little too cutesy. (*sweat*). . . . (*giggle*) ��Exactly,� Sasuke deadpanned.� XD . . . �Sasuke was slightly bewildered by Naruto�s behavior [. . .]� Yeah, you�re not the only one, dude. Only I am just slightly bothered by it. (*sweat*). . . . Mm, Naruto just said, �I promised I wouldn�t tell.� If you ask me (which you probably don�t, but here it is anyway ^_^), I think it would�ve sounded better if he said, �I promised myself I wouldn�t tell.� . . . You know, I might just be able to learn from this scene: asking someone bluntly what they want for your birthday, and then seeing what I can do with the response. . . . Whoa, one hell of a cliffhanger! O.O

Um, something I�m really curious about is how the hell does Sasuke stay hidden? What does he do when Naruto does go out? I think you should elaborate on how much they have to keep Sasuke�s presence a secret; it�d be interesting and add suspense.
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Chapter 6: Two in the morning?? What�s the occasion? . . . Oh, this is going to be fun, �hot�n�horny in the middle of training.� 6_6 . . . Oh boy, this is great! :D . . . Hey, since when can Naruto use chakra-strings? �_o . . . XD This is so deliberate! . . . I don�t know how long they�ve been out there, but do you know there�s a medical problem if a guy has an erection that lasts for more than 4 hours? So this has got to be sometime before 6 am. Otherwise, Sasuke needs a nurse. (. . . no pun intended. *sweat*) . . . Oh boy, �two can play at that game.� That�s always good news, heh heh heh. . . . Hey, isn�t the water cold? . . . Cool idea, �Does he have me under some kind of jutsu?� That WOULD be entertaining if he did! XD . . . Huh? Sasuke�s not going to finish? �_�
Uh-oh, here comes the bad mood. . . . Great dialogue. And I love the repeated question: �What are you thinking?� That�s great. . . . That is so Sasuke: short and to the point, leaving out unnecessary details. . . . Oh, that was clever. �Why would one person kiss another person?� �Well, you kiss a person because you . . . (O_O)� �. . .� That was great; it totally came out slightly wrong, and yet made perfect sense! XD . . . Nice ending. :)

To the A/N: No, I don�t think Naruto was too uke. At least he�s not this mewling, whining little shrimp I get in some stories. I think he could be a little more . . . aggressive, I guess I�d say. 9_9
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From ANON - Anon on February 15, 2008
Chapter 5: Ooooh! (*squeal!*) I love the opening paragraph! ^^ Wonderful description. . . . Love Sasuke�s observations in the second paragraph. (*gasp*) And then the third-! This story just keeps getting better and better! :D . . . Hmm, that�s a tough question, Sasuke, but I�d opt for the second. ^_^ . . . Mmm, Sasuke has no shame. ^_^ . . . (*giggle*) �Nerves of steel, man.� ^^
That�s cool, Naruto�s enjoying Sasuke�s stay. . . . Love this whole scenario with Naruto trying to escort Gaara and Sasuke being a jerk about it. . . . I�m with you, Naruto. Kakashi and Iruka? �_� . . . Nice comparison about Gaara and Neji. I�m ever-so-slowly warming up to that couple. Slowly, though, v~e~r~y s~l~o~w~l~y. . . . Okay, I think maybe there should�ve been a long sequence of how they got Neji and Gaara together, something more than just a little paragraph saying, �So they did this and this happened.� Just a thought. . . . At least Sasuke�s helping out somewhat. . . . �Way back?� I thought it was just a month ago! �_o . . . (*snicker*) That�s funny, it�s a regular drill with Sasuke. XD . . . Oooh, great blend for the next scene! :D
Sasuke, do you know that your behavior would make one curious as to how you compare to Shikamaru? And do you even care? . . . WHOA, how the hell does Naruto�s face end up there?! O.O . . . Deny it all you want, Sasuke. You want the guy! . . . Love the honesty paragraph. . . . Also love the paragraph about recognition. . . . Interesting. Sasuke�s just waiting for Naruto to come to him. Lazy-ass bastard. ^_^

To the A/N: Uh, yeah, I think the chapters are a little short, but the story�s really good to read.

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From ANON - Anon on February 15, 2008
Chapter 4: Alright, vampires! :D Was the film Interview with the Vampire? . . . Love the Who�s-fault debate. . . . Is that the old-fashioned way to make popcorn? Interesting. . . . Guess it�s not Interview. What movie is it? . . . Man, I can�t find enough of this stuff on TV. -_- I mean, there�s a lot of straight-makeout scenes, but hardly any gay males. Soooo not fair. T_T . . . Naruto�s got a serious point. Sakura scares the hell out of me when she�s mad. T_T . . . Okay, I�m noticing that Naruto seems to have a lot of visitors in his apartment frequently. What gives? �_o . . . And what is Sasuke�s problem? Why can�t he use his own? �_o . . . (*snicker*) Toothpaste on the nose. ^^ . . . XD That�s great: �Even if you make me sleep on the couch, I�ll just sneak in here when you�re asleep.� XD Lock the door, Naruto! . . . How the hell does his eyes adjust so quickly? I mean, sure he�s got the Sharingan, but I doubt that would affect normal eyesight when he doesn�t have it on. Oh well. (*shrugs*) That�d be a cool picture, their eyes glowing in the dark. . . . Cute ending. :heart:
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From ANON - Anon on February 15, 2008
Chapter 3: Love the fact-by-fact first paragraph. ^^ . . . Well, if you don�t like it Sasuke, buy them yourself! �_o . . . (*giggle*) Great line: �Use�ta be I had to beat a conversation out of you and now you won�t be quiet.� ^^ . . . Clever about the choice of words. I wonder if Naruto�s going to regret his decision. . . . Is that the truth, Sasuke? Or are you just covering up? �_o . . . (*snicker*) I never heard of it that way either, Naruto, but it shouldn�t be too hard to figure out. . . . Ahahaha! �You�ll have enough access then.� XD . . . Hmm, I wonder if Sasuke�s going to think again on his not-needing a family. . . . Interesting set-up for the story. . . . Love Sasuke�s chain of reasoning and denial. . . . What is uni? . . . (*snicker*) The Heimlich. XD

To the A/N: I�m okay with cliffies, just so long as it doesn�t take the author forever to update.

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