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Reviews for A sad life deserves more

By : Zendura

From ANON - shadowserpentdragon on November 14, 2007
This story line is truly amazing i can not believe how much i was just drawn into this story. i hope you keep this up even though its been two months since you updated i would really like you to return so that i can find out what happens next this is just to great of a story to just let die this way, and dispite what you say those fighting parts are great. well i really hope you continue to update even though it has been awhile, but before i go i must say that this is the greatest naruto and haku story i have ever read and i have read nearly all of them on this site.
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From zeroharm on October 06, 2007
okay... it has officially been a month... with all the crap on this site, as the author of two of the best damn fics on here you really really really need to update! It wouldn't be a big deal if your stories were just ok, or if you just had one of them, but two of my top 5 are by you and I am sure I am not alone in that sentiment. now please, for the love of whatever god you hold dear..... please update. :-(
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From zeroharm on September 19, 2007
hey zendora, just commenting because I sat back and realized there hasn't been an update on here in almost a month! Both of your stories are on my top five favorites so I am really really missing them...If you could update soon or at least give a status update so we know you aren't dead or anything that would be great:-).
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From RavenShantor on September 01, 2007
Long time reader first time reviewer stuff aside I'm very happy to see this story on a regular up-date schedual. It's still very unique, very well written and with enough twists and turns as to prevent it from getting stale. My only real complaint about chapter 19 was that Tayuya and Shika's sex scene seemed a bit pre-mature for my taste. Don't get me wrong I enjoyed it (Boy did I enjoy it) but I thought that maybe you could have held off on having them do anything for maybe another chapter or two, you know give her a few days to process what's going on first before having her join Shika and Kin in bed. Other then that I've got to say I'm definatly enjoying the story so far and am looking forward to seeing how this all turns out.

Though if I may I'd like to offer a couple suggestions:

1) Maybe give Sakura a chance to redeem herself so she can go on to train under Tsunade as a Medic-nin. Sorry but I like how she turned out in the series even if I didn't like how she started out. While you did a great job with her in the begining I think it's getting near time to let her start growing up. (Sasuke's a lost cause so bash him all you want, hell I'll get you that steel bat if you need.)

2) After what happened with Lee finding out about Haku I think it might be a good idea if they come out and tell their friends the truth. I'm not suggesting they initiate anyone but just level with them. (By friends I mean Lee's and Hinata's teams, including Senseis, as well as Choji and Kakashi, if they don't already know.)

3) Have Tsunade put together a group of "Special Genin", ie the Konoha 11, and ask that the Kitsune train them to act as her "Personal Guard" as a way of strengthening their alliance. The training should consist of the chakra wieghts and time compression and maybe a new fighting technique or two that humans can learn.

Other then that great job and update soon...

(Suggestions can be taken or ignored as you wish but request for up-dates is mandatory and must be obyed.... LOL)
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From CasaHouse on August 28, 2007
I love your story... I've been an avid reader for quite a while. As for what to do with Sasuke, *points to his own story* I sorted him out at the end of my chapter 14. Granted, I hate Sasuke. Lol. Keep up the good work! Hopefully Tayuya will follow Kin's path.

-Casa
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From zeroharm on August 28, 2007
wow... just wow. Sat down and read all 18 chapters last night.... Have you say you have gained a new loyal fan :-) While I do have to say I was thrown off a little, especially in the beginning, I found the story to be incredibly original, funny, and unique. The only things I didn't particularly like about reading in in one go was the repetition, rather than a skip you explained the kyubi-uchiha contract multiple times for instance, I realize thats necessary for a story with time between chapters, but it kind of messes with those of us reading it in one go. The only other complaint I had was my homophobic side popping up every once in a while, but I have to say that the weird situations and pairings are one of the endearing qualities of this piece, and if you don't delve outside your comfort zone every once in a while you never grow, right? :-) Since I read this all at once I don't know your update schedule but will definately keep my eye out for an update... now to "once more into the breach"
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From ANON - mr. blogtastic on August 27, 2007
So we have two winkles, and four ginies; oh the possibilities (and that's not including what tricks they can do with their tails). This story is boss.
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From NinjaToadsAteMyBaby on August 27, 2007
Holy Mother of Squishy Frogs!!! That was incredible! So much was excellent that I can't single out just one moment to praise. I am now going bonkers trying to figure out if Neji is gonna slip the main branch's leash, what type of demon Gaara and Ino are if they turned into demons, and how you're going to deal with the whole fetch Tsunade dealy as well as other thoughts this chapter provoked.I can wait for those answers, however, I do have one big question that can't wait and that is, are you going to have Itachi show up in this fic?
And as for the fight scenes? I could see them in my mind's eye so you did really well with them. An amazing chapter that leaves me drooling for more. Can't wait for your update.
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From serenagold on August 27, 2007
I love the new chapters!

So Ino and Gaara are going to be Tanuki demons now? THats freaking awesome. I love this story and am so glad you finally updated. ^^ Keep up the great work.
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From ANON - spiritwolf30 on August 14, 2007
I love the story and I cann`t wait till you update so PLEASE UPDATE SOON PLEASE
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From Saiori on July 30, 2007
yo Zendura! great to be reading this again. hope everything went well for you, anyway. haha, i loved reading the 'race' scene at the beginning (lol who wouldn't love to wake up in a similar situation?). i was really starting to wonder what you were planning for hinata, but recent events have given me a good idea what. nice dune reference, and...YAY FOR SHIKA LOVE! very nice touch, the whole shinigami thing with him.
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From NinjaToadsAteMyBaby on July 26, 2007
Your BACK!(mega-glomps you) Oh you have noooooo idea how much I've missed you. I checked AFF everytime I went online to see if this fic was updated. I'm not griping I just wanted you to know how much I missed you.
Dude, talk about Hiashi making a mistake alienating Hinata, I see major ass-kickage in the future. Are you going to have Neji smacked out of his doomed fate mentality by Naruto or will he still believe in inescapable destiny?
I find the mission that Kin is on veeery intriguing. Perhaps she'll be Shika's mate and the punishment seal will be eradicated via demon ritual?
This chapter was excellent and I can't wait for the next. Take care and have cookies(sends you a plate of a dozen homemade chocolate chunk cookies)
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From ANON - WS on July 26, 2007
Good story, I expect to see more or else *does the evil eye (yes, I actually get a pair of those when I'm angry)* Yeah, needless to say I like this story- very good job at manipulating the plot to work without utterly destroying the original setup! (Honestly, I don't think I could have done that myself, I've never even really thought about it) Very effective way of killing off Akai without having to make up another OC or something that might have gotten Haku and Naruto disqualified, damn, I won't get any sleep at all I keep listing every thing I like about the story and I'd ruin the plot for anyone who hasn't read it but is already reading the review (shame on you people, you know who you are- not really, I read the reviews first sometimes too). Alright, I'm gonna have to scold you a little bit on grammar- one of the most frequent mistakes I noticed was the mis-usage of the word 'your' instead of 'you're'- 'your' being a possessive pronoun (for those reading this that don't understand, that 'your' is used in reference to an object belonging to another person) where you are generally are intending to use the contraction 'you're' (for those reading this and have English as a first language that don't understand that 'you're' is a contraction for 'you are' there's a nice scratch and sniff sticker at the bottom of the pool, you should go check it out [or wait until your balls drop before you continue reading this, I'm talking third grade material here people. it's not that hard])

Anyway, continue with the story (it's really difficult to find a story with a good plot, and plenty of good lemons) Later. WS.
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From ANON - jinsei_kurai on July 26, 2007
Finally I swear i was going stir crazy waiting for this story to be updated. It is after all my favorite story and every update makes my day. I am not a very good writer myself, good concepts bad plot lines, however I am a fairly good critic and I have to say this is by far my favorite story. I eagerly await updates, and thank you for being such a terrific author.
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From ANON - KilrathSluzath on July 25, 2007
Glad to see your back, this was another excelent chapter and i still hope to see much more from you
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