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Reviews for Dream Girl

By : DevilnBlue
  • From ANON - ru on July 07, 2007
    Poor Naruto. I hope he's ok..I just wonder what sasuke is thinking ^^''
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  • From Cepheus on May 29, 2007
    heh. i kind of like this fanfiction. the plot goes around pretty smoothly and your grammar is good too (which is the best), and the plot is singular too (though, I don't know if you had the idea reading "Global Garden", but it's actually starting the same way, inverted, but i know your story will move into a completely different way).

    soo, i want to see how this developes. i know you said this shouldn't have advanced from the first chapter, but it has potential and i wish to see how you'll be able to work it out.

    thanks for posting this fic, and i hope in a new update as soon as you feel like it. ^^

    SOY/MF/Ceph
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  • From ANON - Kytalise on May 19, 2007
    Well, I for one just found this story, and I love it. I can't stand when people don't read a story and review it. I mean, seriously. This story is even oppen to the public to review, so there's no excuse.

    Anyway, like I said, I love this story, so if you only write for the readers, you can always write for me.
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  • From Kerrisa on May 17, 2007
    Awe!! Assassins_Kiss-sama!! Can i call you Kiss-sama? You weren't kidding, that was really sad =( but on the flip slide is was really awesome. I'm proud of Naruto getting back in there and doing damage to Mizuki! Those freaking child molesters >_< Itachi shoulda shot at their groins! Woulda served them rignt >=/ i love a story that can get you involved, make ya wanna scream at the characters or grab them up so you can protect them in your arms. Your story does this. It already has such sad undertones, with the los on RIni and his Dad, and his not all there mother, i really feel for Naruto =( Now that he's met with Itachi and Sasuke i'm hoping he'll get some more rays of sun light in his life so he can be genuinely happy. Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to more updates =D!!
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  • From ANON - dut on May 17, 2007
    Aw.. come on... dont stop writting! Please~~~ They finally actually come in contact with each other already! I really wanna know how Sasuke is gonna take things in the future.. and i definately wanna see the Naruto's life progress for the better... It will right? somewhere..
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  • From vanessaclarke on May 17, 2007
    Dude, don't worry too much about other peoples negative opinions. The content of your story is entirely up to you and btw I must say that I for one very much liked the fact that you didn't dumb down the kids. I do remember being that age very well and I know exactly how complicated my thought process was. People don't tend to give children nearly enough credit. You right very well and I've found this story extremely interesting. Great job! I rather hope you'll continue. (of course that's up to you to) Hugs and Squishes!
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  • From ANON - someone on May 17, 2007
    Awesome! keep up the good work! A very developed and deep story you have going here. I like it.
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  • From ANON - dana on May 16, 2007
    i am so glad that naruto was not raped i am tired of the people who seem to always be trying to tag naruto's "ass"ets. i am wondering if you are going to have them seperate for a number of years and meet again and he finds out that naruto is a boy. or are you going to have sasuke find out right away. i can't wait to see the next chapter and find out.
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 16, 2007
    Thank goodness. Sasuke and Itachi both showed up. I'm glad Naruto and Sasuke are both going to be okay. Please continue!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 16, 2007
    OMG! Itachi kicks ass man.
    I love your writing :)
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  • From ANON - Briryan on May 16, 2007
    Question, was Naruto raped or no? I hope not. Good chapter btw. Looking forward to the next one.
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  • From emp78 on May 16, 2007
    I'm so glad Sasuke and Itachi came to Naruto's rescue. About the rest, I really like your stories. "My Little Uke" is one of my favorites. I personally can see Naruto losing his identity. When my husband died, my mother-in-law started to call my son by his father's name, and herself, "mommy". When he started to answer to that name only, and called her 'mommy', I blew a fuse. My father-in-law set her straight. Some times it takes an outsider to reconcile a person to their grief. Maybe you could have Sasuke and Itachi do that for Naruto and his mother. Anyway, please don't stop writing; we would lose an awesome writing talent. Sorry for the babbling. Just felt it had to be said.^_^
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  • From HumanInfiltrator on May 16, 2007
    Please don't stop. Just do what makes you happy. There is such potential in this fic. I like how you let Naruto get up and fight, although the relationship between Itachi and Sasuke still confuses me.

    Thank you.
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  • From EllaCrain on May 03, 2007
    Very Very Good. Your description of both sasuke and naruto's emotions are amazing, and the ending of the 4th chapter where sasuke has sworn to save naruto has intrigued me, and i shall me looking foward to the rest of the story.
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  • From Reyn on May 02, 2007
    Wow. This story definitely carries a very tragic sense about it. The only complaint I would really have is that it is impossible for me to tell the ages of Sasuke and Naruto. At first, I assumed they were very young (around 5 or so) due to what I could gather from physical descriptions. But then their thoughts and the way they talk is far too mature, and at times, Naruto seems like he's a teenager even.

    I understand the need to get certain emotions and thoughts across to the readers, but it really is important that if these are the thoughts and emotions of a young child, then they need to appear as if they are actually coming from the child, and not the narrator giving a more in depth explanation to what a child may barely comprehend or understand. Such a thing will definitely help readers relate to the characters much better ^_^
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